Bloody stupid, showing your wallet like that in a place like this and not just holding on to it afterwards. Practically asking for it.
Kordath Bleu was a in a good mood. He’d been sent to New Tython on a light mission for Arcona’s Intelligence group. The Dajorra Intelligence Agency had him picking something up from the Odan-Urr Jedi, some kind of intel sharing bit to go along with their recent non-aggression pact. They never sent him with much of an operating fund, since the Ryn had something of a reputation when it came to his deft fingers.
He rather enjoyed this world. The temperature tended to be nice and the climate didn’t make his hair itch, which meant his entire body was comfortable. Even with his robes covering him, the Krath wasn’t really hot. It was a lovely day for some petty theft and scoring points with the DIA.
Yet something started to nag at him, and he glanced back the way he’d come and saw a sandy-headed Human look away. Kordath groaned, keeping his hood up and slouching further. The Human was nearly half a foot taller than the Ryn; he might not spot him if he could find someplace to dart off too.
Blast, must be getting clumsy in all this time off. Need to start practicing my skills when I’ve got the time, this is just embarrassing.
The marketplace was still busy even as Kordath moved away from the central area of the bazaar. An alleyway ran off from both sides of the street up ahead, and the Ryn considered his options. Running off down one of those seemed like the most obvious move, which meant the Human tailing him would likely catch on. Not to mention the Krath didn’t have the faintest idea what the layout of the area was, so getting lost was a real possibility. Checking his rear again, Bleu almost stumbled. The Human was gone!
Might have been my imagination, always so hard to tell the hairless ones apart, he decided, smiling to himself in self-satisfaction. Kordath turned his head back to the watch where he was going, and ran head-first into the tall Human’s chest.
“Gah!” he shouted in surprise before instinct took over and he kicked the man in the shin. As the Human yelped and hopped back a step, the Krath turned and ran towards the alleyway on his right. A glance thrown over his shoulder showed the man hobbling after him, his strides growing longer as he moved. Kordath let out a mental sigh. He’d not expected the little kick to do much but he’d hoped it’d slow the guy down. He was tough looking anyways, but this seemed unfair.
A threeway intersection of alleys was coming up, and Kordath didn’t hesitate to sprint to his left. Spotting a pile of empty crates outside the back door of what was, from the smells wafting out, a local restaurant, he kicked the bottom one out. A clattering of wood could be heard behind him, causing him to steal another look back, just in time to watch the man make a clean leap over it.
Oh poodoo, this is bad. He might not be any quicker than me, but blast it if he’s not even breathing hard yet.
Kordath saw a dumpster up ahead, lids down and pushed up against the wall, and had a moment of desperate inspiration. Scrambling quickly as he reached it, the Ryn gave himself a little boost from the Force and used the trash bin to help him reach the roof. Pulling himself over the edge and running forward again, he felt himself starting to pant. This was turning into a not so good day, he realized as the sound of boots on roof could be heard behind him. He found himself headed towards the edge of the rooftop and gauged the distance to the next one. It was doable, he felt, as he pushed himself to the limit, leaping across the expanse of open air.
An abrupt stop nearly caused him to fall backwards and off his new perch, tail flailing wildly behind him in an attempt to find balance. Falling forward, the Ryn hit his knees and tried to slow his breathing, eyes wide. Something had grabbed him by the back of his robes when his feet had hit this side of the jump. With a much more graceful landing, the Human appeared next to him, looking at him more in question than anger.
“You’re quick, little guy. But you aren’t out running me.”
Kordath shook his hood back and looked up to grin at the man, trying to put on as pleasant of an appearance as he could. He reached into his robes as he stood, causing the Human’s hand to settle on the grip of a pistol on his hip. With a sigh, Kordath held one hand up in a placating manner while pulling the man’s wallet out and tossed it at him. He caught it, raising an eyebrow at the Ryn in question.
“Sorry, mate. Didn’t recognize ya I guess, must be one of the newer Odanites, eh?”
“Pardon?”
“You stopped me with the Force, nearly made me tumble off the bleeding roof you did. But if I’d known you was one of the Jedi I’d not have pinched the thing in the first place.” Kordath shrugged, smiling at the man. An Odan-Urr Jedi was no threat to him in this place, as long as he didn’t move to attack him.
A smile crossed the Human’s face. “I see. You think I’m one of the ‘locals’. You’re not that lucky, pal.”
The Human pulled his pistol from its holster, watching the Ryn. “Now, I’m Callus, Callus Bo’Amar. Perhaps you’ve heard of me? Doesn’t matter. Nobody steals from me.”
“Whoa, whoa whoa wait! I gave back the bleeding wallet, what’s the issue, mate?”
“I am not your ‘mate’, friend,” growled Callus, lifting the pistol. Kordath groaned to himself and held up both hands in front of him. A bright flash came from the gun and skittered across an invisible shield before the Krath, causing Callus to pause.
“Okay, I’ll bite, who are you then? Not a Jedi, so neither of us are supposed to be on this world,” asked the Sith, waiting for his disruptor to be fireable again.
“I’m Bleu, mate. Comeon, let’s not do this, we make too much of a ruckus and the brown cloaks will be all over us, eh?”
“Brown cloaks? Oh. The Odanites, I see. You don’t wish to be discovered by them either, hmm?”
Kordath gave the man a lopsided grin. ”Actually, I got me an invitation. But I don’t see no reason to get you killed, mate, we only just met.”
The smile never left the Krath’s face, and he’d not lowered his hands yet either. When a bright flash erupted from nothingness between them, it caught the Sith completely off guard. The world was a blur of spinning purple splotches on white as Callus tried to keep his footing. As he dealt with this, waving his DX-2 around to ward off the little bastard that had blinded him, he heard the Ryn speak.
“Drop it, mate, I don’t wanna fight ya. I’m not the killin’ type and I already gave ya back the wallet, so just leave it.”
After that there was a patter of running feet, and his vision slowly returned. A dark flash out of the corner of his left eye allowed him to spot the Ryn hopping over the alley and running across another roof. Callus raised a hand and sent out a thin, jagged line of electrical energy that impacted on the fleeing Krath’s rear, causing him to yelp and botch his jump. He heard Bleu yell out in surprise as he fell, and a crash from below.
“Not getting away that easily,” growled Bo’Amar as he moved to pursue his prey.
Either the "they" in the middle there should be "that" or you forgot a period. Additionally, probably should have a comma before "most notably Mon Cal."
Awkward punctuation in this bit as well.
Missing period at the end. You also forgot to close the quote, and there should be a comma after "Callus suggested"
Use a question mark here, not a period.
Also, remember to capitalize "Force."
Despite the grammatical issues, this was a pretty neat setup. I really felt immersed in the marketplace, so you did a good job setting the scene.