Aul cursed under his breath and panted in pain. The Sadowan’s head thumped with every cheer of the crowd for their beloved Palatinaean champion. As he tried to regain his composure, searing hot bursts of agony coursed from his shoulder and spread throughout his body. The world began to turn on the Gray Jedi and he bowled over on his knees before vomiting onto the arena floor.
The crowd groaned in disgust, then broke out in another round of laughter.
“Attractive,” Blade taunted the broken combatant. “Come, now, you’ve made it this far. Don’t embarrass yourself. Don’t embarrass your Clan.”
The anxiety and fear in Aul grew stronger as the crowd turned against him. Blade’s statement sent shockwaves through Celsus’ mind as he realized the potential to let his entire clan down, and the devastation he would feel in doing so. His other fights were remote and isolated, if he failed then at least it was his own burden. Here, his mentors, his friends, his family would know. The world around him closed away and he could only focus on panic.
Shame. Outcast. Failure.
Blade looked at Aul cowering on the ground in disbelief. She turned to the section of the stands holding the members of Clan Naga Sadow. “This is your champion? Your great entry to the tournament? What a joke.”
Darkness. Defeat. Death.
A voice broke through the darkness.
“Owly! Get your arse in gear!”
Within his internal realm of terror Aul came alive. He “grabbed” the shockwave of fear running through his thoughts and stilled it expertly. He opened his eyes and the volume of the arena registered in his senses again.
“Oh, good, you’ve joined us again,” Blade scoffed, kicking a bit of dirt in Aul’s direction.
The human locked eyes with the Zeltron and defiantly rose to his feet once more. His left arm dangled loosely at his sides. He turned and looked at his comrades.
“Owly, you’ve got this, you lazy bum!” Ophelia, Aul's Aedile in Marka Ragnos, shouted at the top of her lungs.
Seated behind her, Sanguinius Tsucyra leaned forward on the bench and clipped Ophelia on the ear. Leaning back, he locked eyes with Aul. He wasn’t cheering, but simply sat with a peaceful, knowing expression on his face. Everything he needed to say came through with a simple nod.
Looking down the bench he saw the rest of his adopted family gathered in support of him. Locke, the Consul of Naga Sadow, was organizing a “Corellian Wave” down the bench while Tasha, DarkHawk and the rest of Aul’s Battleteam held up pieces of paper to construct a mosaic of the Naga Sadow seal.
“Woo! Carl!” the former Grand Master Muz shouted, turned away from the arena center and sending lightning bolts haphazardly through the air. A number of bottles of Corellian rum lay beside him.
Aul laughed at the chaotic scene. He turned back to Blade and ignited his lightsaber with a snap-hiss. With the support of his Clan, he found his center; no matter the outcome.
Aul lifted his blade over his head parallel to the ground, but his left arm remained limp at his side. He crouched deeply to minimize his target area to compensate for his handicap.
“Sure, you’re confident. The traps are on your side,” moaned Blade. She raised her lightsaber and bolted at Aul. A trail of dust rose in her wake. Crimson met blue in quick succession as the Marauder ferociously advanced on the Arcanist. Her rapid, unpredictable movement brought her closer and closer to tagging her target.
Suddenly, a small port opened in the arena floor beneath Blade’s feet and a meter-wide fireball shot up from a small nozzle hidden in the compartment. The Zeltron dove away desperately, but her legs were caught in the blast. She cried out in excruciating pain as the top layer of her skin was immediately scorched off. She stumbled a few steps away from Aul, but kept on her feet with pure, fierce determination. Her hilt held tightly in her hands she launched at Aul again, leaving a trail of blood in the dirt.
The cheers and applause from the crowd was remarkable. The fluid, blurred strikes from the half-burned Zeltron against the half-crippled human were a surprise to even the Grand Master himself, who could not help but appreciate her prowess in combat. The Dark Lord of the Sith sighed, looked over at the control booth, then nodded.
With a crunch and a splat, meter-long spikes exploded out of the arena floor. The Zeltron was held in her spot, skewered through various places around her body, blood pooling beneath her. The screams of pain pierced through the cries of horror and gasps of disbelief from the crowd.
Aul stood with his mouth agape, his lightsaber held loosely at his side.
“Help, please…” Blade begged of Aul between sobs.
The human ran to the Zeltron’s side and checked the wounds where she had been impaled. To his horror he found that numerous organs were punctured completely through, beyond salvage by all but the most advanced medical facilities on Coruscant.
Aul slowly moved in front of Blade’s face. He held his hand on her cheek as she continued to weep in desperation. The human knelt down to look directly the Zeltron’s face and connected with her gaze.
“They all love you. Know that. You did wonderfully,” Aul tried to comfort the distraught Blade.
With a swift motion, Aul’s blue blade flashed between them and an instant later a blue-haired head lay on the arena floor.
“Victor!” came the cry that resounded around the arena.
Excellent introduction post. You set the stage very well with the crowd and the stakes. I like how you set up the doubt of Pravus' not wanting her to win because she's an alien.
No other notes really from this post, solid and well written.
I went through this first looking for errors, then went back through looking with a more critical eye. You have foreshadowing, call backs in later posts, referenced previous battles in this tournament, a solid set-up, in depth imagery. I could feel the sand on my own legs as if I were in the match myself. This is an example of an excellently written opening post.
I'm very impressed.