The Sun had gone down an hour before the Arthos’ humming engines could be heard cutting the dead silence. The Baudo-Class Star yacht came to a lurching stop inside the starboard exhaust port of the Inflictor’s wrecked carcass. The last rays of Jakku’s sun were still grasping at the skyline as the engines cut out. Talis immediately began reaching out with the Force to the area but was interrupted by the Captain whose voice blared out of the computer next to him.
“Another shuttle is present, Master Jedi. No life signs in the immediate area. Scanning the interior of the Inflictor for life signs, will report back when that's completed.”
‘Well, looks like I am not the only person here.’ The Odanite let out a heavy sigh as he prepared himself mentally to use his teachings in the Force to hide himself.
“Looks like we are not the only ones who have heard the rumors about the intel Captain, on my mark destroy that shuttle but not a moment sooner,” Talis replied before he lifted his middle finger off the panel’s comm activation button and jammed his thumb into his belt. The Knight stood in front of the ship's ramp as it slowly lowered to the ground with the creaking of controlled pressure and ended with a dull thud.
Talis exited his ship with his right thumb still holding onto his belt and his left arm swinging at his side as he took long strides down the ramp. The cloaked Miraluka made his way to the other ship and inspected it. After a few minutes, Talis turned towards a gaping hole in the exhaust port on its starboard side and made his way to it. Reaching out from himself, the Jedi began prodding out, to sense his quarry as he entered the enveloping blackness of the ship’s interior.
Talis made his way to an elevator shaft and searched for any form of assistance he could find to traverse to the bridge of the ship. He found a ladder that stopped every five floors at maintenance platforms. The Sentinel let out a dissatisfied sigh before beginning his long climb. Talis made good time as he ascended the elevator shaft but stayed concentrated on keeping his Force aptitude suppressed from any unwanted prying minds. As he came to the top he could hear some cursing from some open doors above him.
Talis approached the bulwark along the maintenance platform making sure to utilize his training from when he was a member of Strike Team Ooroo. The Miralukan pulled his hood back and peeked around the corner. He could see a form hunched over a lit up console. Strewn across the console was various devices from an external power source to a decryption pad and an external data storage drive. Talis smiled to himself. He wouldn't need to do any of the hard work.
‘Might as well let the person do my job for me,’ The Knight thought to himself.
Talis stayed crouched and ready as he waited. Making sure to keep himself suppressed to avoid detection.
Suddenly a clanging noise caught Talis’ attention and caused him to peek back around the corner. The man was packing up his belongings in a hurry as if something had spooked him.
“Captain, don’t reply,” the Odanite whispered into his communicator, “Destroy the ship and the Evac location has changed, it will be atop the Inflictor’s bridge tower.”
A distant explosion sent a quiver through the ship. Talis sprang into action, reaching out, creating a blinding flash as he leapt past the being. A yelp of surprise told Talis it had worked as he landed on his feet in a dead run. The Odanite had deftly snagged the guys gear before bounding towards a decent sized hole in the ceiling of the room. As he slid to a stop Talis reached deep into the Force and pushed off the floor of the bridge and up through the hole. The Knight landed in a maintenance compartment between the shielding and bridge below. Talis moved to another hole in the armor, leaping and rolling as he went to avoid the scattered wreckage in the compartment.
As he came to a sliding stop Talis sprang up again the hole. This time clearing the exterior armor and came out into the night air. He landed nimbly and began running towards the edge where a distant humming could be heard. Behind him Talis heard the lightsaber activated and the hairs on the back of his neck stood on end.
Talis turned his body to his left and pulled his lightsaber out and in one motion, activated it, and smacked the incoming lightsaber into the durasteel plating. The Odanite dropped the bag behind him and started marching his foe back with superior raw strength. The man’s feet tapped away as he tried to stay on his feet. The tall Miralukan disengaged and planted his feet shoulder length apart with a stomp. His shoulders were turned and his knees were slightly bent.
“So,” The man paused, “a Jedi, who’d have thunk, I wondered why I couldn’t sense you.”
“Maybe spend more time training useful skills other than fighting, Sith.” The tone of gleefulness and anticipation soaked Talis’ voice. He finally had a chance to fight after sitting on a ship for so long. The dark green blade of Talis’ lightsaber began swiping back and forth as the Odanite bounced on the balls of his feet. He relaxed his grip and stopped bouncing as his opponent took up his own stance across from him.
His hand firmly grasped high on the hilt of his lightsaber, just under his emitter, in his right hand. The man’s feet planted sturdy, shoulder length across and with his right foot back. His lightsaber back and poised for a strike. Talis’ senses flared like a raging fire as the man burst forward at him. The Jedi stepped back as a vicious slash rent the air where the Miraluka stood. Talis sent an upward swipe in at the man's lower body.
The Sith reflexively swatted downward as Talis turned and used the collision’s momentum to aid his spin as he bound upward and brought three downward slashes at the man's head in quick, swirling, repetition. The man’s defense was waiting. To any onlooker it would have looked like a green buzz saw blade striking an unbraced piece of steel as the Red lightsaber took the blows and rattled from it.
Talis landed and diverted the man's next strike away from his body allowing his momentum to bring him forward. The knight spun and smacked his opponents lateral defense before bounding back a step and went back to his stance but extended his hand out behind him.
“So,” the man interjected, “who am i fighting?”
“Most folks give their name first before asking,” Talis quibbled back at the man.
“Fair enough.” The man thought for a moment. “My name is your death.”
“That’s an odd name,” The Odanite jeered back at the man, “Must have been a hard childhood, your parents must have really hated you.”
“Well at least you are entertaining, so what is your name.”
“My name is, Your...” The Sentinel paused as a smirk crept across his face. “daddy.”
The Sentinel bounded forward at the man with his lightsaber held high before suddenly stopping short. The Miralukan took a deep step to his right before throwing a wrap shot at his enemy by rolling his hand and bringing his strike up at the man’s open back. The two lightsabers collided in bright sparks as they locked in a struggle of pure strength. Both combatants pulled their heads back and spit in the others eyes. Talis’ enemy reeled back as the knight held his ground.
“What in world?” The man exclaimed out loud.
“I don't have eyes to spit in bud.” Talis brought his hand up to his wrapping and wiped the spit off it.
“You’re a Miraluka?”
“Yep,” The Jedi replied smugly.
Talis flicked his blade up and pointed it across his body at a right angle and and at a right angle form this wrist. He loosened his grip on his hilt and adjusted his feet to rest at shoulder length and bent his knees as he turned his offhand shoulder away from his enemy.
Syntax
You're missing an apostrophe for "others" to make it possessive.
Double "and" toward the end and I think you meant "from" instead of "form"
Story
This seemed very random at first until I noticed both characters had the dirty fighter aspect. I applaud your use of both CSs but from a story standpoint it still seemed odd that they'd both attempt the same dirty trick at the exact same time. Also, why would Kylex attempt to spit into someone's eyes who is clearly wearing cloth around his eyes?
Overall this was a very strong opening post. You painted a detailed scene for the reader and established the in-character conflict in a natural way. Your use of dialogue for both characters was superb and made for a fun post.
Realism
This did not affect your score in any way but I feel the need to point out that the Arthos is no longer officially part of COU's fleet since possessions came out. I point this out because the ACC rules will eventually catch up with possessions and you will need to be mindful about what your character has and doesn't have in future matches. The same goes with Clan assets to a lessor extent. Just something to think about. Again, didn't affect your score in any way.
It's a bit of a stretch to say superior raw strength given that both characters have +3 might. It's also worth pointing out that Kylex uses Djem So which is a form focused on using power to overwhelm opponents while Talis uses Ataru which relies on speed to overwhelm opponents. All things being equal, Kylex would be more apt to leverage his physical strength in saber combat than Talis would just based on their chosen forms. Talis could certainly gain the upper hand as you described but you'd need to explain it with something other than "superior raw strength."