As Firith tried to jump back from the area affected by the glittery cloud that had enveloped Aul, a jagged piece of rock snagged his boot causing him to stagger and tumble. Reaching back to catch himself, his burned and blistered left hand was torn up by a bristly grass bush and he screamed in agony as the exposed nerves were scraped by the sharp blades of grass.
Cradling the hand to his chest he rolled into a fetal position and started sneezing from the dust inhaled.
Bending his will, he tried to convince himself he was okay, but each sneeze broke his concentration and jarred his hand.
Aul, however, had gotten a face full and was coughing and tearing up from the dust. “You-cough cough miserable krif- cough, snort, cough, wha-cough!” The Devil's Shroud member hacked and wheezed and finally fell to his knees; snot running from his nose, his eyes swollen red.
“Oh quit your cryin,” Firith said between sneezing. “As soon as I can get up, I'll give you somethin’ to cry about.” The older man gasped and then sneezed, eliciting another whimper and groan.
Using the last of his energy, Firith uncurled and tried to stand. The throbbing of his pulse in his hand kept him from focusing on his Forced based abilities. Okay, looks like I have to do this the old fashioned way. Gritting his teeth Firith forced himself to stand and looked at his still retching opponent.
“You! you’ve crippled me, damnit! Be thankful I'm going to kill you, because Lilith would otherwise.” Firith panted, spitting out words through the pain.
Staggering forward, Firith made an attempt to kick the Gray Jedi in front of him. The only thing that happened was that he lost his balance and fell over Aul, causing both of them to collapse to the ground again.
Aul tried to get up but had the same issue as Firith. The dust kept him from focusing. “I, I have to ask,” the Dakhani sputtered and wheezed. “ Why did, why have you been, att-attacking me?”
“Sang sent me,” Firith mumbled just before passing out from exhaustion and pain.
Some time later Firith came back to consciousness and found Aul kneeling next to him. The Savant was healing the burns he had inflicted. Firith jerked away and immediately regretted it as hundreds of tiny bolts of pain shot through his abused body.
Opening his eyes Aul looked at the aged man on the ground in front of him and stopped what he was doing. The Gray Jedi's eyes still showed the redness of taking a bag of dust to the face, but otherwise seemed fine.
“I have something I want you to watch,” he said, and got up and walked over to a holocommunicator sitting on rock near the entrance to the temple.
“How did we get outside? Oh damn, I hurt,” Firith groaned sitting up.
“I dragged you out, the Sith spirits kept bothering me when I finally was able deal with your damn dust.” The Consular said looking over his shoulder and giving Firith a wry look. “What did you mean when you said Sang sent you?”
Firith groaned and flopped back and looked at the clouds above. Sighing he shook his head. “If I get a call from Sang to go somewhere, it means he wants me to do my job. That means he wants me to remove someone.”
Aul cocked his head to the side, squinted his eyes, and crossed his arms. “Always?”
Groaning in frustration and pain, Firith slowly pulled himself up onto a fallen stone. “Yes, usually, why?”
Shaking his head at the Dark Jedi he had just been fighting, Aul rolled his eyes and took a deep breath. Then he reached down and activated the holocommunicator.
After a brief flicker the image of Sang appeared. “Greetings Savant Aul Celsus, Savant Firith’rar Versea-Stormwind. I am sending you this message because I have a secret mission I feel the two of you will work well together on. Th--”
Pausing the recording, Aul turned and looked at the older man, “Always?”
Firith looked at the frozen image then up to look at Aul. Grinning feebly he had the good grace to look somewhat abashed. “Oops?”
Syntax
This should have a comma after the first word for proper sentence flow.
This section should be split into two sentences, as above.
The highlight section above should be hyphenated into one word.
Here is an instance of "thought" dialogue. I say dialogue so the grammar rules are less confusing. Much like with dialogue, you would exit out with a comma and a lowercase "T" here as it follows the "he said, she said" formula. Beyond that, you should not follow the comma after "Huh" with a capital "It's".
Typo here, "if" instead of "of".
Not sure why this section was broken up into single sentence paragraphs. It didn't provide any apparent benefit to the flow of the narrative.
Missed comma here. There are several such issues in this post and I didn't identify them all.
This should be "lightning".
Story
I like seeing this quick setup and then a jump into the action. I feel like you took a serious look at your first match and took the suggestions therein across to this match. That's awesome to see! Keep it up.
Realism
Between the Aspects "If I must..." and "Due Diligence", this depiction of Aul seems at odds with his sheet. I'm also not quite sure within the context of the narrative how/why Firith'rar has such conclusions about Aul but I can make an educated guess it's due him working with "your wife".