The coarse grains of sands flowed through his fingers, joining with trillions upon trillions of other grains that encompassed this smart part of Jakku. The desert planet had been the site of the Empire’s last stand against the nascent New Republic. Thousands had died, fighting for what they had believed in, protecting those they had loved.
Sanguinius smiled bitterly as the last grains of sand flowed through his open fingers, his empty palm outstretched. He looked up at the remains of the Star Destroyer Inflictor, where they had decided to scuttle the ship instead of handing it over to their enemies.
The gesture of denying one’s enemies was a well-known and relatable one to the Jedi, yet the sacrifice of so many lives was not. It was always better to live and fight another day, life was too sweet to be cut short. The Consul was not here to simply idolize about the past however, he was here to meet with someone who had been a great influence in his life.
A message had been passed between them, one that promised potential cooperation between two Clans that had been at loggerheads before. Sanguinius wanted to believe in his old comrade, despite the bad blood between their Clans. His old friend was well known amongst the Brotherhood, always eager to help Clans in need and had stood up in the past for what was right.
The sound of approaching engines heralded the arrival of his guest, as the sunlight was bright enough to hide the shuttle. Sang covered his eyes with his forearm, as the shuttle kicked up dust and sand as it came into land. The dust slowly settled as the slight breeze blew the worst of it away. Uncovering his face, the Entar watched his old comrade amble down the shuttle’s ramp.
A smile crossed his face as Sanguinius stretched out his arms in attempt to embrace his friend. “Braecen, how good to see you, old friend.”
Braecen had once been the Consul of Plagueis, the Clan that Sanguinius had first joined as a young and idealistic Apprentice. The Adept had mentored him somewhat, allowing the Journeyman some measure of responsibility and encouraging the Augur to step up into leadership. The Jedi had always maintained that he would never have gotten as far as he did within the Brotherhood without the guidance and support of his old friend.
Braecen allowed the Augur to embrace him and smiled in response. “It is good to see you too, old friend. But I’m afraid that this visit is not a happy one.”
The words were delivered in a sad tone, causing concern to the Sadowan. “Braecen?” Sang questioned, hoping that it was not too serious, as he backed away from the Adept.
“I’m afraid that Scholae Palatinae and Naga Sadow remain enemies, Sang,” Braecen replied, “My visit here is to relay that message and assure Naga Sadow that we have not forgotten the last instance we met upon the field.”
“You say keep saying we, Braecen,” Sang narrowed his eyes, watching the Palatinaean carefully, “What do you mean, we?”
“I mean what I say, Sang. We are enemies and will continue to be so.”
“Enemies? What have we done to deserve such a fate? We have done nothing but continue to offer a hand in friendship despite the many times Scholae has bitten it. Each time, we say ‘forgiveness is a good thing’, yet Scholae continues to spit on our friendship.”
Sang gestured towards the Inflictor, “Each time, more innocents died, just like they did here several years ago.” The Jedi got more upset as he continued, “What does it take for you Sith to be happy? To stop being such murderous, power hungry thugs?”
Braecen was silent, watching the man before him. Both of them had a shared history, both had spent time in the different Clans of the Brotherhood, had experienced their cultures and their histories.
Sang had believed that Braecen was different, that he was beyond the petty squabbles that embroiled the Clans. Yet, one was often disappointed when they met their heroes.
The Augur turned away from Braecen, making to walk away, when the sound of a lightsaber igniting behind him gave him pause.
“Even you..?” Sang sighed.
Sanguinius reached for one of his hilts and resignedly turned to face his former idol. “So be it, old friend.”
The blue blade ignited, as the Defender confronted the storm before him.
Syntax
This is a touch repetitious with your opening sentence, almost word for word. It doesn't read as intended repetition either. It could have done with just a mention of him smiling bitterly as the last grains fell away.
Almost every sentence in this paragraph is structured with "[...] as the [...]" in the middle. It's very repetitious. Can be catch a reader or tire them out. Makes it almost monotonous.
Reads like you missed a word here.
There is much "say" here!
An ellipsis, even leading into a question mark, should be three full stops.
Story
Pacing is probably the most important thing to keep in mind when writing in the ACC. Especially when you are locked to 2+2 format with 750 word limits. This match is all history, character building, and then whipping out a saber at the end. Almost half your post should be devoted to actual combat with your enemy. Conflict. Saber on saber. Powers against powers, or any combination thereof. The emotions you were going for were good, just they came at the expense of the Combat in the Antei Combat Center.