Qor sprang away from the screams of Tisto and leapt over the lip of the fountain, then ran a safe distance away as he chuckled in delight. He reached into his pouch to search for the second vial, finding the fragile glass and yanking it out.
Philtre of the Lost it read.
But that means he has the Sarlaac’s kiss running through his veins. This should be wonderful to watch! Qor chuckled to himself as he clapped softly, then placed the vial back into his pouch.
“Squid! Gah! Where are you!” Tisto roared as he tried to step from the fountain. Due to a temporary loss of sight, the Kiffar stumbled forward and tripped on the fountain lip. His head and arm slammed into the floor heavily, which caused the nearby Gungans to gasp and gather in a crescent.
“Is hesa okee-day?”
“Wheresa is a doctor? Thisa man is boo-boo’d!”
“No you clumsy, hesa just drunkin!”
The Gungans squabbled and bickered about the Kiffar, who managed to slowly find his feet and glared at Qor. To the Quarren it wasn’t pretty, as he could see the vial still stuck to a cut in his forehead. A large amount of blood was blinding his left eye as a swelling began to grow from the cut’s source.
I should aim for his left side, he can’t see attacks from there, Qor thought as he slowly pulled out his saberstaff. The revealing of the weapon was not subtle enough, as many of the Gungans began to gasp loudly. They then shrieked and began to flee in terror at the sight of the weapon.
“I told you I do not want to fight, but you leave me no choice!” Tisto growled as the VROOM of his lightsaber echoed the area. Empty apart from some lone Gungans who anxiously waited, eager to see some carnage or a rare Jedi battle.
Qor then scurried forward as best he could which seemed rather pitiful to Tisto. With the saberstaff hilt in hand, Qor hopped towards Tisto and swung for his ribcage. The Savant seemed to subconsciously know about Qor’s attack and twisted himself around. His bright lightsaber blade snapped across and sliced Qor’s weapon into two pieces.
“Oh damn, why did you murder my weapon?” Qor grumbled.
Tisto shoved the Quarren back and span around again, the tip of his lightsaber cutting a tentacle from the Quarren’s jaw. Qor wailed out as the Force began to comfort him. His pulsating and hot pain began to cool into nothing more than an itch against his chin, as Qor’s body controlled its own pain.
“This is useless, squid! Stand down or I will kill you,” Tisto panted as the blood against his face thickened. Qor noticed that the Kiffar was slowly arching forward and flinching in pain, while his hands shook against the lightsaber.
I see the poison is slowly progressing, Qor thought.
“Okay fine, I will not fight. But you owe me a new saberstaff. These things are expensive and I will not have some simpleton destroying my only defence,” Qor lectured the Kiffar as he slowly walked back around and to the fountain.
“I am not paying for that, you attacked me and I reacted. If anything you should be paying for my hospital bills!” Tisto replied as he gritted his teeth, while the pain of using his lips caused him to whimper.
“Fine, then I shall treat your wounds myself. But that will still cost you, medicine isn’t free here.” Qor slowly got back into the fountain as Tisto’s eyes followed him. Qor’s arm yanked back as the Force swirled and grew to his arm, while the Kiffar began to feel more pain each second. Using the strength in the Force, Qor slammed his palm down into the water as a telekinetic wave washed the pair heavily.
“Owie! Karabast!”
The white water rained down onto Tisto’s face, who keeled onto his knees in agony, as if acid had soaked his skin.
“It was nice knowing you, Tisto. Just call me and book that appointment!” Qor shouted back as he rolled over the lip of the fountain and away. The Quarren raced to the edge of the bubble and looked back one more time, just to see Tisto stumble onto his feet. With a smile, Qor dived through the bubble and swam into the darkness of the ocean’s salt waters.
Syntax
Need a comma after the introductory phrase.
Repetitious use of "walk" here. Change it up to keep the writing interesting for the reader.
I'm not flagging it, but you have a lack of comma use in your dialogue throughout. When you call someone "sir" or "squid" at the end of dialogue, it should come after a comma.
Story
I have to point out the pacing of the conflict you're setting up here. You didn't even rub up against the word cap so we can't attribute it to that, you just didn't bother planning for it. This is a 2+2 format match. In simplest terms, that means the story lasts three posts. Two of yours, one from your opponent. When you only have that much space to tell a story, you should have a good body of action going on in your opening post. A few paragraphs at least, though it's a good rule of thumb to attribute half your post to it. This post, as it is, is all set-up with no actual conflict, save for the sudden threat at the end. You are clearly trying to play to the Aspects of both characters, which is good, but there isn't anything going on here except set-up. There's no payoff and you put the meat of the fight on your opponent entirely.
General
Your jacket item aspect calls them the "Void Serpents". Not giving you a hit on this, as it's not really part of the Realism category (though you better call them Void Snakes for the rest of the match). Just want to remind you to keep such things consistent in your material.