His skin was blue. His blood was red.
She wanted more of it.
The frenzy burned under her skin. There was no subtlety in her movements as she sliced for the joining of his calf and thigh.
Her knife never made it in range of his tendons. He grabbed her up in a hip toss and flung her away from him. She landed easily on her feet and charged again, both her knives in hand now. The right slashed forward, then the left. He knocked one blade harmlessly aside with the flat of his palm and jerked back from the other, escaping with a line of weeping crimson in his split skin instead of a severed artery or steel stuck in bone. Satsi sliced at him again, and again, drawing more wicked red against blue, blood droplets spurting with each awesome flex of his muscles, and then—
Strong struck her left arm hard enough to numb it completely, making all her nerves lock and buzz. The knife clattered to the floor from her stunned fingers as the limb trembled. Snarling, Satsi stabbed at him futily with her remaining weapon. He caught her hand, thick fingers wrapping all the way around her fist and prying open her grip. That knife fell too.
It all happened in the space of two heartbeats. Before she could even chamber a kick in response, he was moving, and so was she.
He slammed her into the nearby wall by her throat with the broad side of his immense forearm, knocking the wind out of her and making her teeth clack around her tongue. He held her there, huffing and stony-faced, and she glared at the big oh-so-noble oaf with one eye and a grin as blood trickled from her mouth.
"Harder, daddy," she moaned exaggeratedly, licking her lips for extra measure. He dropped her like she was hot iron, making a series of choking noises. Lo and behold, Chiss could turn purple when they blushed. Like somebody had painted a mustache on a juna berry.
Satsi ducked away under his arm, pivoting on her heel and back-spinning into a kick to knock him closer to the wall and shove her an extra foot further back. He only just staggered. Still, he seemed wordlessly flustered as he turned to her, stuttering. Or maybe he was screaming internally. Both?
"Aww, don't look so fussed, sweetie. At least I didn't say brother," she cackled, watching the violet of his neck and ears deepen, spreading down his pulsating pectorals and up to the crown of his shiny head. Maybe if she kept pushing, he'd stroke out. "You ever even been laid, big guy? I know lots of places, cater any fetish ya like, clean boys and girls. You know, so to speak. Hell, way you put hands on me, I might have to charge you before the night's over. What do you say? Want me wrapped around your face again? I promise I won't go for the eyes this time. Your mouth, though..."
"This commentary is highly inappropriate and slanderous, madame, and I request that it cease at once. While there is no shame in your profession, I am not one to take advantage of a lady, and would never! DO NOT ASSUME SUCH ON THE HONOR OF MYSELF OR ANY INDIVIDUAL OF THE GARMIS FAMILY!"
"Make me," the Human hissed, manic with anger and glee. She spat a mouthful of blood, laughed, and made a beckoning motion.
"MUST YOU CONTINUE TO FORCE MY HAND IN THIS MANNER?"
"I said, make me," Satsi sneered, snatching some shattered shards of glass that cut into her palm and making to leap up and grind them into his face. He tiredly caught her arm in a lock at the joint and twisted her all the way around, forcing her to bend.
"Madame, PLEASE, I beg you, stop."
"You ain't broke my legs yet, frakker."
She pistoned a knee into his shin for that, making him yelp. She did it again, bucking and twisting. She'd dislocate her shoulder and beat him to death with one damn arm.
"Madame, I had no wish to do this, but you force me to subdue you with the pacifying technique passed down through my family for generations!"
He grabbed her in something of a backwards bear hug with all of one tree trunk-think arm, trapping hers to her sides. Her head didn't even reach the top of his chest. His other arm moved to cinch at her throat in a far too secure headlock.
If she'd had the air, she would have told him to shut the frak up. As it was, she knew even as his hold tightened that, unlike in holodramas, she would only have seconds before unconsciousness came hard and fast.
He began to squeeze her neck and blackness encroached on her vision. She slid her hand along his thigh, in, up, and then grabbed and twisted, until she felt the slightest give of pressure as something in her grip popped wetly.
Predictably, the hulking man gave an inhuman screech of pain, probably many octaves higher in tone than his booming voice had ever gotten, and buckled. She wasn't quite prepared for the sudden and sheer mass of the weight coming down on top of her as the hulking Chiss fell to his knees and curled over, vomiting. Satsi hit the floor in a crumple, all her tendons straining and her spine whirring as she tried to claw her way out from under the massive, whimpering blue bulk crushing her. She wheezed as she dragged herself across the ground, legs pinned under six fraktons of weirdo. "Holy karking banthafrakkers, you're heavy..."
He didn't seem to be listening, busy clutching at whatever pulp remained of the Garmis family's crown jewels. Guess he wouldn't be passing much on to the future generations. Hopefully there were siblings for that.
The Human finally wrestled herself free, covered now in even more grit, booze, and lots of puke that, for once, wasn't from her baby girl. She made a disgusted noise and wobbled upright, making no move to brush herself off except to swipe bits of glass and crushed pretzels out of her sticky hair. Some stuck particularly stubbornly, and with narrowed eyes, she yanked them and a small clump of black and red strands out.
"Shadows, I need a shower," groaned the woman. Rolling her shoulders and turning, she sneered down at the sobbing Chiss still retching up foamy bile, now that his earlier meals were decorating her and the tiles. The woman lifted a boot and planted it against his piston-sized shoulder, shoving hard into the ground right when he convulsed to make him choke a bit. "I want you to remember something when you're done dyin' there, Strong ol' boy. Kordath Bleu was mine before he was yours or that Zuji mutt's, so you can back the frak off. I'ma spend as much time with him and his twerp as either of us likes, and if you got something else to say about it, I'll rip off the other sack too. Got it?"
The crazy man was still polite enough to hold up a hand while he vomited and cried, as if in apology for his response being delayed by fighting off unconsciousness. She didn't wait for one, kicking at him again and then walking over to the bar where Mick had risen back up from behind it and resumed polishing glasses like usual. She waved two fingers. The Rodian poured her a scotch.
Satsi only got to taking her first sip when her comm rang. She set the glass back down, plucking the device from her belt and answering with an unconscious grin to see the incoming ID-code. "ello?"
"Where is Samantha's third favorite blanket?" came her twin's voice through the emitter. "She has already spit up on the first two tonight and I cannot locate the next."
"Oh my frakking— she's not your neurotic ass yet, she doesn't have favorites, nevahmind third ones. She's like, one!"
"You call things her favorites all the time, and she expresses preferences." A heartbeat pause. "And her birth date has not passed yet."
"I'm rounding."
"The blanket, shimai?"
"She should have another in the bedroom closet. Look, kyodai, I'm comin' home, so—"
"—you do not need to."
"I want to," Satsi said, and she meant it. "Kordy and I 're done already anyway and I miss ya two, so there."
"Alright, dear. Was your time pleasant?"
"Yeah, we had drinks, chatted, I got in a brawl with his bigass Fade—"
"What did you do?"
"Hey! He was the one who called me a whore and interrupted, I'm not gonna take that."
"It is not exactly an uncommon or incorrect misconception."
"Who's side are you on here?"
"Throw an extra kick for me, then," answered her brother mildly, and she knew he was amused. "Since you have already caused damages, I am sure. And give Mick my condolences."
"Don't worry, Micky knows we'll pay fer the broken stuff n'shit. And as fer the kick...I already did one bettah in yer honor. Man's chances of reproducing are 'bout halved now."
"Tactful as ever. I will see you when you get in. Get a speeder. Do not drive."
"I ain't had that much to drink."
"And how many blows to the head did you take?"
"Fine, fine, ya naggy nerf. I'm being safe, don't worry." She winked, realized he wouldn't know, and then blew a kissy sound into the comm. He snorted.
They ended the call. Satsi looked back at Strong and the wreckage around her, downed her drink, and then made her way out the door.
Syntax
While there are already plenty of commas here, there needs to be just one more after “noticed.” This is a very minor ding, though.
This is not a detractor, but more a caution. Having “and” at the beginning of a sentence is acceptable under a variety of conditions (esp. conversation), but be conscious of the effect that period has on the flow into the next part of the dialogue and/or narration.
The comma usage here is rather awkward; understandable, but awkward. Using an m-dash or, as much as some folks hate them, parentheses would have more effectively separated the qualifying clause.
This comma should be a period. A “soft stop” reads awkwardly here, and I tried more than a few variations aloud. This is repeated several more times further down the post.
This whole sentence reads rather awkwardly by its word choice, and I would advise making the period at the end a comma as the following sentence is really a continuation of the first; but I understand the dramatic effect that it offers, so I’m going to allow it.
Story
This was hard to discern at the outset of the post, as it read equally as easily that he was in the cantina just watching over Bleu, rather than actively entering the establishment and seeking the Ryn.
Bwahahaha! This is great! Unrelated: Strong’s use of “Master” is odd, as it sometimes comes across as a moniker of propriety (eg. master, mistress, ma’am, etc.) and at others as a title (master and apprentice). As a reader, I want to know what’s going on here.
Realism
The generally lackadaisical manner that Strong takes with Satsi appears to be counter to his mid-line Resolve and Endurance relative to Sati’s Might, which matches Strong’s. This is not a detractor because of the brevity of the encounter, but use caution with your portrayal: desired intent isn’t always in line with our CSs.
Synopsis
Loved reading this post! You maximized used of the setting without making it burdensome on the narrative and portrayed the characters well, including the measured use of third parties. There are some awkward syntax issues, but for the most part they don’t detract from the reading of the overall post.