Once, it was the home to the witches of Dathomir, otherwise known as the Nightsisters. Tucked away in from the rest of the galaxy in an isolated cluster, the Nightsisters were able to draw energy from the planet itself, and pursued a type of ritualistic magic. They ruled over the population of Zabarak—Nightbrothers—and used them as a warrior caste to serve their purposes.
Then, the Clone Wars. The Nightsisters were pulled into the conflict due to the machinations of Mother Talzin and her rival Darth Sidious. This ultimately lead to the eradication of the Dathomarians and their settlements. The desolation was claimed by the Confederacy of Independent Systems after the last Nightsiser fell.
Now, the planet known as Dathomir is a haunted skeleton of its former greatness. A perpetual crimson glow coats the planet. The bleak world has become an amalgamation of ruined forest, decrepit swamplands, and withered mountains worn to the sands of time.
In the desolate swamps, faint echoes haunt the graves of the long-dead witches, infusing the green fog that spreads above the damp ground. Dreadful whispers rumoured to be lingering incantations defend the world from intruders. Tall tales and rumors of zombies and ritual sacrifice alluding to grisly flashes of imagery.
The trees, large and misshapen, promise misery to those who touch their tortured bark and open themselves to the memories of the place. Eerie as the voices over the wind, the water beneath the fog appears red and bubbling, as if the land itself were pockmarked in cauldrons of blood to keep the incantations alive.
Creatures unaffected by the purge of the Nightsisters still remain. Snakes, reptiles and insects of varying lethality wander the wasteland. Reports have even said that rancor still roam freely.
This is Dathomir.
Positive Takeaways
Not a bad setup, especially on ambiance.
Creative combat.
Can Be Improved
Spend more time reading your opponent's aspects; Ras is lined out as quiet for the most part or a few bantering jabs here and there to get a rise out of her opponent, you went a bit further than that here.
Spend more time going over your opponent's loadout. Ras has two lightsabers and a dual bladed dagger, but no dual-bladed lightsaber, so you lost some points for bringing up a weapon that wasn't a part of her loadout.
Realism in combat; you write dual wielding a lightsaber and a blaster, which is fine, you have points in dual wielding. You have none in Blasters and attempting to fight off a more experienced duelist and take pot shots with an unfamiliar weapon. Also, the point-blank hit to Rasil's shoulder should have come with more apparent injury, as blasters are about as dangerous as a lightsaber.