Crackles of blue violent energy reached out towards Shadow, and twisted to the right to avoid it before backing off. "Impressive. But your little light show will not always save you."
"Oh I don't know. It just may dazzle the enemy," the teen countered jokingly as the lightning dissipated. He raised his saber up horizontally above his head as he studied her.
The Battlelord flicked her wrists as she maneuvered the hilts of her sabers within her fingers, the crying and whirling blades showing signs of her anticipation and confidence. She then quickly charged, entering a twisting dance of light and speed as her sabers followed her cyclonic path and collided the Warrior's already awaiting blade. She continued to strike viciously, using both strength and velocity to try and overwhelm him. Derek was holding his own, however, and that impressed the Sith immensely. Yet, she wasn't just testing him for his strength.
Easing off a bit, she let Derek recover. He quickly went on the offensive, his blade arching over his head and downward for his leader. Quickly, Shadow crossed her blade and caught his weapon within. She gazed into the visor of his helmet, focusing as she reached into his mind. The woman grasped hold, sensing that was the Warrior had in physical strength, he lacked mentally. What she was about to do would be quickly condemned by many others, but she knew it would be for the young man's own benefit as a learning experience.
As her opponent tried to strike again, the Battlelord defended herself once again and latched onto his mind with the Force. The new presence within his consciousness caused Derek to pause slightly. It was then Shadow took advantage. She induced great fear into the younger Sith's mind, and within seconds, Derek found himself disorientated and suddenly in terror as he froze completely, beads of chilling sweat forming on the back of his neck. His eyes were locked with hers, and more than anything, he desperately wanted to flee the great horror before him. To his dismay, his muscles had locked up as had his mind, and he couldn't get himself to escape.
A wicked grin formed on the pale, half-Sephi's face as her ears twitched in satisfaction. "Physical strength and trickery is all well and good for some occasions, Derek Cinn, but those who conquer the mind are the true victors."
With the Warrior's locked jaw prohibiting him from responding, Shadow quickly knocked his saber out of his hand. She sent her silver blade straight into his shoulder, the pain freeing Derek from the paralysis as he screamed in pain. The Battlelord then placed her right foot against his gut and pushed him off her blade. She then extinguished both of her lightsabers, and knelt next to the groaning boy.
"Strengthen your mind, Derek. The weak-minded have no place in this world."
With that, the Shadow Wolf stood back up, collected her sniper rifle from the tree, and walked off towards her awaiting ship. Her departure was marked by the arrival of the storm as lightning flashed and rain poured down on the wounded and broken Sith Warrior left to wallow in his defeat.
Positive Takeaways
This is a nice introduction to the fight because it pulls in Shadow Nighthunter’s aspects, specifically her affinity for nature and her skills in using it. This helps me understand your character better in this setting, which is always a good thing.
This is a nice use of your opponent’s aspects. This brings the story to life more. Well done.
Can Be Improved
You do well to provide a reason to fight but the first post should really kick off the fight as well. I suggest that you include this in future first posts to make a more complete setup.