Lava is mined as a precious natural resource on this volatile and volcanic world. The opposing gravitational forces of the twin gas giants closest to Mustafar tear apart the planet’s surface to reveal the mineral-rich lava flows underneath. Once serving as the capital world for the Confederacy of Independent Systems, remnants of their past influence still linger. Massive mining facilities - originally constructed by the Techno Union - are still maintained by the native Mustafarians, an egocentric people who would like nothing more than to squeeze minerals for the purposes of trade and commerce from their volcanic planet.
Other than in the pursuit of business interests, few arrive on Mustafar save for those needing to incinerate evidence in its vast expanses of magma. What little curiosity is given to the volcanic planet is thwarted by a natural scanning interference caused by intense geological activity. Pirates, smugglers, criminals and scum all value this world’s ability to dump bodies, tracked cargo shipments and other unwanted articles—the singular reason for the Black Sun’s interest in the Outer Rim world.
Droids, machines and conveyor belts create the workings of an efficient system to extract the minerals and have it prepared for refinement and transportation. Lacking a suitable surface, metal walkways are shielded against the heat to allow workers passage throughout the facilities. Even with the worst of the heat being shielded against, Mustafar’s temperature remains less than comfortable to most species lacking exoskeletons.
Beyond the blistering heat of the volcanic world, Mustafar served as the battlefield for the fabled final duel between Obi Wan Kenobi and Anakin Skywalker.
Positive Takeaways
You did an excellent job describing the venue (I could feel the Mustafar heat) and the sequence of combat. You painted a very clear picture in the reader's mind.
Can be Improved
As written this suggests that he was able to focus while falling in order to build up for the telekinetic strike. This stretches realism some, even at +4 TK. I would suggest advancing time a little and having him land on his back and then execute the strike for a passage like this.
Visually, this is some outstanding imagery. However, this also stretches realism some. Maximus has +4 Telekinesis with the Hammer Time feat. If Droveth were a Juggernaut with the Iron Skin II feat, this passage could work. If you had Droveth dodge the TK blast, it probably would have worked. But having him take the "powerful blast" and then be able to control his movement enough to crouch down and dig his saber into the ground instead of just being knocked off his feet is probably beyond his ability.