Green light blazed in the sky and rent the heavens apart.
The breach was like a wound bleeding, raw and ragged at the edges, verdant glow seething out like puss. It pulsed, and the tear widened, darkened, shadows spilling ink and oil from its depths. They came like rain and soaked the land, splattering heavy and warm, more like blood than water, the sound of the spatters just wrong to the ear. The wind lifted, and the smell was rot and spice and iron.
Dralin watched the phenomenon with a calm, tranquil gaze, unblinking even as the crowds surrounding him wailed and panicked. Some pointed, gasping, shaking, as bolts of emerald lightning leapt down and speared the sprawling golden city around them, cracking buildings, tossing rubble. The gleaming golden streets ran to ebony, then onyx, blacker and blacker; the towers crumbled, and the fine mansions and palaces charred. Folk in finery wailed as their youth and worn riches wilted, leaving them destitute husks.
But as Dralin looked on, he noticed a strangeness in the maelstrom: though the lightning struck at some men and women in particular, it never seemed to burn them. The only thing it broke were the chains they wore, freeing them to run in the furor of a world falling down.
Heavy-handed, this one, the Gray Jedi thought as he slowly inhaled, pulling his mind gently back into his body as much as he was pulling air into his lungs. He blinked, and his vision cleared, and once more he was folded in a quiet corner of the Combat Center. He had never really left; he had felt the mat beneath him and the cool wall at his back, the circulating of recycled air where nonexistent jade flames had danced in his eyes. The Human stretched leisurely, unfurling from his twisted position like a lazy manka cat.
The Center was a surprisingly decent place to meditate during its odd hours, somewhat isolated from the otherwise disconcerting and rigid business of Arx's capital. His ship was better, but Dralin knew that if he was to change anything, he would have to reintegrate himself in time. If others came and went while he reposed here, then it was an easy thing, and he spent the time observing them and their practice bouts. None truly bothered him, save a few approaches that he declined. He had a schedule to keep, and had yet to plan any fights of his own into it.
Speaking of which...
The man stood, brushing at the seat of his well-worn trousers, and looked down and right at his R3-D9 droid. "It is about time for tea, isn't it?" he asked, and the droid beeped savagely at him, muttering about boiling water and its various lethal applications to organics. Dralin's mouth almost twitched into a shape like a smile. He would have his snack and ponder on the day's vision while he ate; some aspects were obvious, and other details were masked in the Force's sometimes indecipherable prose.
Just as he began walking for the entrance, his senses trilled, and he sidestepped as easy as breathing, dodging out of the way of a fallen...training saber?
Not a heartbeat later, someone fell out of the sky and landed promptly on Dralin.
They crashed hard in a tangle of limbs, air knocking out of chests and heads ringing. The Plaguein clutched at his face and groaned, his head absolutely throbbing, along with many other parts of him.
"Ahh, ah, kriff, sithspit, ow. Frang, man, my bad, ah, you okay? Bogan, my back..." the mysterious ceiling person babbled, switching to another language to babble something that sounded like curses.
"Ow," Dralin said while the other body disentangled from his. He focused through the aching for a few moments, trying to quiet some of the pain. The Force was kind, but only a little. His neck and muscles still tingled with what were sure to be bruises as he sat up, coming face-to-face with a hand, open and offering.
The Coruscantian grasped the other man's offered grip, allowing himself to be assisted upright. He stared at the fingers curled around his forearm: bright green, covered in black ink and striped in scars. His mouth dropped open suddenly.
"Uh," said the malachite man, "you...alright there, dude?"
Dralin realized he had been holding on to his sort of-assailant for a long minute, examining his arm like it was some lab experiment. He released him and took a step back, his features returning to their typical calm. He had been briefly startled — his visions didn't usually resolve so abruptly, or so...literally.
"What were you doing?" he asked instead of answering, watching closely as the man — a young man, a Mirialan, all tattoos and rough exterior over eyes older than his face — seemed to flush and scratched at the back of his neck.
"Er," the Mirialan uttered, one of his dreadlocks springing free of their tie and flopping over his eyes. He brushed it aside. "I've been trying to see how high I can jump, when I amplify the strength in my legs. And. Uhm. I wondered if I couldn't, like...launch myself up higher. Telekinetically."
The Human's lips almost grinned again.
"And how did that work out for you?"
"Oh, great," replied the boy sarcastically. The bruises all over his frame made more sense, now. "Anyway, I'm really sorry about dropping in on ya. Didn't see you there before I took off, otherwise I never woulda tried."
"It is...not too much trouble," Dralin compromised, still observing closely. "You are an apprentice then? And interested in the study of telekinesis?"
"Totally, yeah. What about you? You a Jedi?"
"Not quite."
"But a Force-user?"
"Indeed." By way of demonstration, Dralin summoned the Force to himself, lifting his forgotten droid and spiraling it through the air without even a hand gesture. The R3 screeched a shrill series of beeps.
"He, uh, doesn't sound happy."
"He is very much not. He would like to murder us both, in great detail."
"Fun." The boy seemed intrigued, and he turned to Dralin as the Human set his unit back down. "You seem real good at that. Got any pointers?"
"I may be inclined to show you," Dralin allowed carefully. Why not foster a good skill? And besides, no vision was to be ignored... "You may join me for my repast if you like, and then we may return."
"Your res-what?"
He resisted casting his cybernetic eyes to the ceiling. Barely.
"It is a light meal. In this instance, the best biscuits and tea Aliso can offer."
The Mirialan seemed to think about it, then shrugged. "I guess, sure. Name's Ruka."
"Dralin Fortea."
They didn't shake hands, which suited the Human just fine. He felt no need to be any friendlier than he was already behaving.
"Just let me grab my crap," Ruka said, walking off. As he did so, he muttered, "Aliso? Why's that sound familiar...?"
"It is the Plaugeian homeworld," Dralin answered to the air, folding his hands calmly. "It ought to be familiar to any of the Brethren."
Ruka stopped.
The Force trembled, lifting the fine hairs on the back of Dralin's neck.
Slowly, the Mirialan turned around to glare over his shoulder. "You're from Plagueis?" he growled, and Dralin blinked placidly.
"Indeed I am, though I have been gone a long, long while." He arched a brow. "What is it to you?"
Ruka had spun back to face him fully now, and his fists were clenched, his whole demeanor gone ragged. "My teachers have told me about you people. You're slavers."
"It is true, we employ slaves."
"There's no 'employ' about it, they're kriffing slaves!"
"Choose your semantics as you will. Do you have a point?"
The boy bared his teeth. "You're disgusting."
"I own no slaves myself," replied Dralin easily. "And whence I did, those under my service in my House were well-kept."
"That doesn't make it better!"
"Does it not? It is not the most moral of practices, I will agree; I have little taste for it these days, even discourage the crueler of my compatriots. But it is only a fact of the universe. In Plagueis, and in innumerable other societies. Sad, perhaps, but still truth."
"Are you seriously trying to kriffing tell me you're sorry or something?! You don't deserve to be sorry! If you let it happen and walk on by then you're just as bad as the guy holding the whip. Just a fact? Kark that."
With a quick-draw flurry of motion, the Mirialan slid two blades out of the sheaths hanging off of his person: one sapphire, one amethyst, both held tight in his emerald grip.
Dralin raised a brow.
"What are you going to do here, young one? Attack me? Kill me? For an ideal? What change with that effect? I am one man. You may as well rage at the sun for rising."
"I really don't give one flying frak how pretty you talk, slimesucker," snarled Ruka. His violet eyes flashed gold, rimmed in red. He spat, "Somebody has to stand up for the poor frangers who can't stand up for themselves!"
Any other reproach the Human may have given was cut off as the Knight charged, leaping high in a Force-augmented arc likely much like he had been practicing. Dralin moved as wind and water, smoothly drawing and activating his saber, raising it in a guard as he sank himself into the tides of the Force.
The expected clash did not come, however; even as Dralin's body ebbed and flowed to catch the blades coming towards him, Ruka turned his hand, not slashing at Dralin, but slamming his fist into the mats when he landed just in front of the Plagueian.
The wave of power that bloomed forward knocked the Human back, staggering him badly enough to send him sprawling. He contorted, hands circling to slam into the ground and push him into a roll aside instead of crumpling in a heap. As he came back upright in a crouch, saber held to his side, he really did smile, wide and toothy.
Then, he raised his hand and sent a telekinetic hammer blow slamming into the Mirialan in replay.
Positive Takeaways
This is an unconventional introduction approach in a venue like this, do that more often. I was thrown off with the opening vision. I rechecked the venue, then the first paragraph, then the venue again. It got me both confused and interested, amazing way to draw in readers. The conflict between Dralin and Ruka was also a different approach. Most who end up in the Training Center fight to practice, which is a cliche in this venue This is a real fight, one with a good motive, very well done.
Can be Improved
Just be aware of some of the minor things. Dralin’s precog is pretty high; If you can dodge a saber, you can dodge a fall. I feel like he could have missed Ruka, or even stop moving well before the saber and Ruka fell.