She didn't listen.
Satsi hauled herself to standing as soon as she thought it was clear, having heard what might have been the Ewoks chasing after Kord — or it might have been the wind, or an animal, frak. Her shoulders were tight and her fingers twitchy on the trigger as she kept scanning around her, jumping at the slightest sound.
Damned fluffy idiot was going to get himself skinned for supper.
Snarling, the gangster did her best to use the makeshift excuse of a crutch and head in the direction she'd seen the Ryn had gone. But, she had no idea how to track him down in the brush, and no sparky senses to guide her to him. She could only gnaw on her lip and hope for the best, hope she was retracing their steps to the village and not just wandering idiotically, following plants she thought looked more flattened than others.
It was an agonizingly long many minutes, sticky with humidity and choked by the racing of her heart. The Human managed to drag, hop, and crawl her way up a little slope that she thought they might have run down earlier, only to get to the top and come face to face with—
"Gah!" she screeched, unable to go for her gun without falling backwards. She was saved by a hand wrapping around one wrist and a tail around the other.
"What are ya bloody doin'?" demanded the pink-dyed Ryn, helping her up, and Satsi scowled as she righted herself.
"Not leaving family behind. What the frak are you doing? Why are yah covered in that crap?"
The Consul was all smeared with goopy red, like the berries he'd fallen into earlier. Seeing his crimson-painted, whiskered face had nearly given her a heart attack; he looked like some deranged, murderous bird...rat...monkey… thing.
"Found another bush o' 'em, figured, eh, might mask me scent or somethin'."
"Do these furry frakkers even hunt by smell?"
"I dunno, lass, ya wanna go an' ask 'em?" scathed Kordath, and she almost hit him.
"Shut up. Are we close yet?"
"Jus' past them trees," the short man grunted, gesturing. "Ya need ta stay 'ere—"
"Not a chance. And if you try anything sparky with me 'for my own good,' so help me Shadows I will make your life hell."
"Me engagement is over, me kiddo is gone with 'er mum, an' I'm bein' made dinner by teddies. Can't be much worse, lass."
"I'll get out of here and show Zuji that holovid we made."
He paled under his fur.
"Ya wouldn't."
"Try me."
"Fine," growled the Ryn. "But stay quiet."
"Do my best."
They advanced together, Kordath wincing every time Satsi made extra noise limping along. Still, they made it to the edge of the village clearing with perhaps too little incident, hovering there and breathing hard. The Ryn stretched out his senses, but the jungle around them was already so brimming with life that it was difficult to parse all the auras when he was already a bit battered. Still, he was good, and the Force was good to him, and he soon picked out many pint-sized bodies waiting all around them.
Oh, great. A trap.
"Buggers 're here," he murmured to his companion. "I'm gonna distract 'em, yeah, you grab Skitters."
"Are you frakking me? No way—"
But the slippery Ryn was faster than her, and he made good use of it, pushing something into her hands and then scampering forward as silently and swiftly as possible. Satsi looked down at the...hook shot?... he'd given her and then resumed watching him advance, trying not to vibrate out of her own skin from anxiety and the need to do violence.
For a moment, all was still.
Then, a cloud of small arrows made the freaking sky go black.
Satsi cried out, but Kord twisted around and slid under a thatch construction of some kind, throwing his hands up and scowling in concentration. It took a moment for the barrier to flicker into existence, but it was enough, appearing just as the hail of projectiles finished their descent and rained down around him, the sound like whiptwhipthipwhipt.
As soon as the last arrow struck the ground, the Ryn was off again, springing up and sprinting in some strange, serpentine pattern as if his life depended on it. She had to admit, at least, that the distraction was effective; the Ewoks hooted and howled, emerging from their cover to chase after him on small, vicious legs. Around and around the camp they went, nearly cornering the Consul before he used his powers to his advantage and either leapt over their heads or sent them running after an illusion version of himself while he scampered the other way.
It was the single stupidest thing Satsi had ever seen. And it wouldn't work forever.
Mouth pressed into a line, the former Fade thought frantically for something she could do; shooting them would do no good with Kordy in the middle of the fray, and she couldn't very well move so fast as to make decent knife attacks right now, nevermind a lightsaber. Frak, frak, frak.
What would Uji do? she wondered desperately as Kordath made another lap. The Ryn was obviously tiring, while the Ewoks seemed to be enjoying the sport. Something smart, probably. Kord would be tricksy. Smart and tricksy...
Her gaze fell to the metal haul underfoot, and a thought occurred.
Satsi was moving before she'd even fully thought out a plan, impatience and a burning need to protect her friend driving her muscles, adrenaline flooding synapses and washing away pain. She burst into the village, crutch discarded, and aimed high with the grappling hook. Its head was heavy, but the thing shot true when she spun it and tossed as hard as she could, looping around a thick bough above them. A firm tug ensured its grounding, and then she was hauling herself into the air, arm over arm.
Sweat poured down her brown, and she panted, stopping to loop her wrist and hand in the rope before looking back down. Seemed suitably high enough. Her brown eyes found her partner, being chased back her way. She wished she could reach down to snatch him up, but she needed all her upper body strength to hold him and her dead weight up.
This was going to hurt.
"Kord!" Satsi shouted, gripping the borrowed grappling line tightly as her triceps and abdomen strained. "Grab on to me!"
"What?!" yelped the Ryn, dodging away from a tiny, deadly spear with a movement that looked like a drunken, boneless stumble but ended in stunningly fluid roll upright.
"Grab my legs! Hurry up!"
"Why?!"
"Look at what we're standing on!"
Gray eyes took the risk of flickering around the village clearing again, trying to find whatever his companion was on about, and he realized after a moment as he narrowly ducked a slung stone. The entire little town was constructed on top of a massive piece of haul plating.
"Oh, kark," exclaimed the Consul as he dipped, dove, and ran for Satsi where she hung suspended from one of the immense trees. She braced herself, but couldn't hold back a scream as the Ryn leapt with a Force-fueled boost and snagged his arms around her thighs. His mass pulled at her already broken ankle, and he swore he felt something tearing or popping or something as he dangled. Apologies and curses poured out of him as he bunched his legs over her booted feet and shimmied upwards, effectively climbing up her body until he had a better hold. The woman was openly sobbing and shaking with the strain of it all, but they were both off the ground.
And the Ewoks, who chirped and growled and congregated closer like they were circling pray, weren't. It was extremely unnerving, watching even the archers lower their bows and come closer, until the whole fuzzy crowd was below them and grabbing spears to poke with. Even with the language barrier, he knew laughter when he heard it.
"Zap them already," Satsi spat through clenched teeth, and Kordath's jaw dropped open.
"Tha' was yer bloody plan?!" he exclaimed, yelping when a spear nicked his tail, others jabbing at his rear and both their legs. None of the jabs were very strong, almost like they wanted to just poke them full of holes until they fell or died and oh kark no. "I can nae do lightning, wench!"
"What?! What kinda sparky are you?!"
"Don't blame me fer yer assumin'! Ya should know me better!"
"Oh I think I know you pretty frakking wel— ahhh!" she cried out as one of the spearheads sliced through her pantleg. It would have hamstrung her if the Ryn hadn't jerked the thing off-track with his tail. "Frak. Frak, ahh! Fine, new plan, get the grenade on my belt!"
"Which one?!"
"Any one!"
"We goin ta bloody die!" shouted Bleu, but they were well and truly stuck now, and so he grabbed at the nearest thing he could that felt right, fumbled until something clicked, and dropped it into the huddle of death below them with a prayer. He clenched his eyes shut, ready to be blown to pieces.
The area exploded into crystalline cold.
Pain raced along their nerves as small shards of ice ripped past at high speeds, shredding through skin or embedding in muscle. Frost burns flashed over their feet and legs, the Ryn's tail only saved by being coiled tightly around his waist.
Their hunters were less lucky. The cryoban had frozen the water in the bodies of the small creatures closest to its impact point and debilitated others with its burn and chill. Those farthest from the center were making pained, panicky noises and trying to drag themselves away. Neither of the Arconans could tell if any of the creatures were truly dead or just stuck, but either way, they weren't about to wait to find out.
It was a precarious, agonizing thing to swing their combined mass around enough to get clearance of the pile of Ewoks and the spears and knives still pointing up at them, but Satsi managed. She let go and they hit the ground hard at odd angles, no control in the fall at all. The Human might have blacked out for a minute; she wasn't sure. But the next thing she knew, Kordath was at least trying to tie up the worst of her lacerations. There wasn't much to be done about the frost that had cracked her boots, likely beyond repair. At least her toes weren't black when they pulled her foot out of one; her ankle was too swollen to remove the other. Truthfully, the residual cold felt nice on the inflamed flesh.
"Help me up," Satsi grit out after the few desperate minutes the process took. "I gotta get those little frakkers."
Kordath had the decency of the two of them to look disturbed. "We can jus' leave 'em ta sort themselves out, scram."
"Not going anywhere fast and not taking the chance, Kord. Help. Me. Up."
With a deep frown and heavy brows, the Ryn did, propping his teammate upright by the shoulders, then working up to her knees. She hobbled to one bare foot with him as a crutch, and hopped awkwardly closer to the Ewoks that were stirring and struggling in their icy prison, fast dissipating in the jungle heat.
The crack of her pistol's repeated rapport made the Ryn's ears ring, and he flinched, looking away. It wasn't the worst thing, but it was still messy business, unpleasant. At least her shots were clean. Probably spared the buggers some bad frostbite.
The ensuing silence was loud in his skull, his teeth still aching from the gunshots so close by. The jungle around them had gone quiet, wildlife and, hopefully, any other Ewoks scared off by the commotion.
Suddenly, Satsi's weight increased, and the Consul squawked as they both buckled and flopped back to the metal-covered forest floor.
"Okay, so we're sittin' now. Some warnin' woulda been nice, lass."
"Sorry," the Human replied, slouching. She tucked her pistol sloppily back into its holster after discarding the two cartridges she'd just spent. "It's all hitting me."
"We'll get out of here soon," Kordath promised, moving away from her to scrounge around the clearing. For a few minutes, his worry skyrocketed, but then a familiar series of beeps and tiny arm-waving came from under some leaves and Skitters emerged, chirping furiously. He relaxed just a bit. "Oi! There ya bloody are, bud!"
The unit obediently came up to him, though it pinched him several times in retribution, the bratty thing. He went about checking it's chassis over and then its datachip, murmuring soft commands for a report.
"The files're safe," sighed the Ryn eventually in immense relief.
It was a moment before what he'd said set in, Satsi still dizzy with agony and eyeballing the perimeter for any more hostiles.
"Wait, files?" she stressed the plural. "How d'yah know he found more than one?"
"Uh," answered Kord intelligently, his tail twitching in a very specific way she knew all too well.
"...how did you even know he found any Intel in the first place?" muttered the Human, her gaze turning into a glare, recalling his earlier excuses. She looked pointedly around them, at the camp of wood and debris, in which not a single working piece of tech seemed to be in sight.
"Well, ya see..."
It clicked, and Satsi nearly shrieked, "Oh my— you Shadows-damned bastard, you went back for your porn! You did, didn't you?!"
"You don't have to say it like that, lass..."
"You frakking sleemo," Satsi gasped, but then she was laughing, laughing hard. She threw her head back and guffawed. "Kark me, yah not even gonna try to say it's some precious holo of the first time Shay spoke on there or something? Just gonna admit it, it's your porn stash on his drives."
"Heh." Kordath's lips were pulling in a grin, his mustaches twitching. "I'll have ya know, luv, I'm an honest bloke, I am. And ain't no shame in a lil' self care."
Satsi bent over and laughed harder still, her sounds more stuttering gasps than anything, but her face was still stretched and squinched in amusement. Tears leaked from her screwed shut eyes, and her cheeks were bright red around her smile.
It was infectious, and soon the Ryn was chortling as well, a quieter sound that whistled through his beaky nose. Satsi leaned against him and wheezed, holding her stomach.
"Oh, it hurts," she rasped, shaking silently, though he could only sense delight from her. "Ow, ow, ow, kark, haha."
"Careful there, lass. Don't wanna break anythin'."
"Too late fer that," joked the woman, obviously struggling to take deeper breaths and control herself. "Shadows, Kordy. I missed you."
"Didn't go anywhere."
"I know. That's the worst part. Even in the same room, I'm frakking missing you."
He tucked his chin briefly into her shoulder.
"Missed ya too," he murmured. Then, he pulled back, looking unsettled. Satsi leaned away too, staring at him with too-open sadness, all the more raw after her mirth.
"Kordy—"
"Don't, Sats, c'mon, we can't— I can't—"
"Kordath," she interrupted, gaze pleading. "Would you just let me karking say this? Kord, I'm sorry. Okay? Do you know that? I'm sorry. I'm sorry I was part of frakking up you and Zuji, and I want to fix it, and I don't wanna lose you. I'm not looking for anything else anymore. I just want my Flu...my friend."
The Consul hung his head.
"I dunno, Red," he whispered. "I can't risk karkin' things up any worse with 'er, and if we're bein' friendly, then..."
Satsi's face fell, her shoulders slumping. She sighed and said, "Yeah. Okay."
"Satsi..."
"I get it," she bit out, trying to haul herself upright but only managing to fall back on her rear. "I do, okay? You do it for her. I do it for him. Just...does it have to be...I mean, for how long? A month, two, a year? Are...can we never be friends again? Is this it?"
"I don't know," Kordath answered honestly, sounding miserable, and Satsi sighed again, leaning back. The Consul grimaced when she flinched from the jostle of her leg.
They stared at anything but one another for a long time.
"Let's go home," the gangster finally declared. "We're obviously not finding anything useful here, not today. We can send somebody back who can actually walk. And who has free drive space."
That, at least, drew a snort. The Ryn nodded.
"Yeah," he agreed, picking up his Skitters unit and settling it in his lap. He'd comm for backup to evacuate them. "Let's git."
"Kay. Gonna sleep now...Bleu, sir."
"Ya do that, luv— Tameike. Ya do tha'."
Positive Takeaways
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