Mune kept his eyes focused on the man before him. Kojiro made to close the distance between them. Quickly, he estimated the space that separated he and Keibatsu, using it to judge just how quickly the Human moved. The Palatinaean Rollmaster shifted his footing sideways and felt the breeze created by his assailant’s bisento. Mune’s eyes tracked the arc of the blade.
The clone shifted his weight and turned the vertical slash into a vicious horizontal swipe. Mune caught the edge upon the broad side of one of his swords. He felt the sheer force reverberate up his left arm and noted mentally the man’s strength. Kojiro’s weight was behind the blow and Mune felt his feet scrape the floor underfoot. The Shistavanen disengaged, pivoting on his right foot and narrowly dodging a quick thrust of the enemy’s bisento. The advantage of the weapon’s reach was immediately obvious.
“My name is Mune Cinteroph-Palpatine.”
“I never asked your name…” Kojiro muttered.
“I offer it freely,” Mune quipped.
The Human snorted and levelled his weapon, the tip pointed directly at its intended target. Mune felt the fur along his spine quiver. This was a man to be feared, and he knew it with every fiber of his being.
Kojiro charged.
Mune reversed the grip of the sword in his right hand, freeing up some of his fingers and focussed. The Force answered, though if felt far darker than he had expected. It had to have been the influence of the Sith Temple. Sharpening his focus, he gestured and shoved forcefully the point of the weapon sideways. Kojiro hadn’t expected the use of telekinesis, Mune was well within his guard. The Shistavanen struck with his left sword, aiming to drive it low and into the man’s right thigh.
Kojiro was a veteran of more than a few battles, the Force answered his call readily and adjusted his speed enough to turn the attack into a grazing blow that left but a gouge in his armour. He grasped the opportunity of having the other man so close. He released one hand from his weapon and in a quick motion backhanded the Palatinaean Rollmaster.
Mune saw through the Force the next attack but was too close to effectively dodge. Instead he drew on the Force to strengthen his resilience, breaking bones was not on his list of things to do. He braced and took the blow on the left side of his head. He felt the world flip and the ground rush up to greet him. The pain exploded behind his eyes. His senses barely returned in time to avoid Kojiro’s bisento plunging towards him. He rolled and the blade plunged into stone and ash.
With a grunt, Mune rose back to his feet, his left ear still ringing slightly. Kojiro looked unamused, his eyes full of rage turned on the other man. “I’ll kill you.”
The words sent a tremor down the Shistavanen’s spine. The certainty with which the words were uttered unnerved him.
“I will destroy everything that is you…”
The words echoed through Mune’s mind, the Force turned against him, the darkness reaching a cold hand to clench around his heart. The thud of his heart filled his ears, the arena of battle fallen to shadows all around him, deeper than he could have ever imagined them before that moment. Then he felt the Force beginning to well within, and he recognized a response he dreaded. He grasped onto logic, counting down in his head to try and gain control of his own emotions and mind.
Kojiro began a slow walk towards him. His weapon raised, his brow furrowed in concentration as he continued to exert his powers upon his opponent.
What Mune lacked in resolve, he made up for in a sharp mind. He desperately worked to analyze his way out of the fear that worked to engulf him so entirely. Its gaping maw thrown wide to take him in whole and destroy him.
Kojiro lunged.
Mune twisted, he felt the jolt of the electro bistento and the instant numbing of his left arm. It was but a shallow cut that drew thin rivulets of blood. Mune dropped his second weapon in that moment and touched his palm upon the Human’s right wrist and the Force responded. In a wicked snap of tendon and bone, Kojiro’s right wrist was ruined.
Positive Takeaways
Descriptions are a major positive in your writing, even when factoring in the limit on word count required for the event, to hone in on this, look at what you're writing and see if it could benefit from additional detail and add that detail if you think it would add to the environment or the story.
Can Be Improved
The only thing that regularly cropped up was not having commas where they should be, but commas are one of the easiest things to trip up on when writing. There are so many rules, and each of those has exceptions, it's easy to forget when to use a comma or not. They're often used too much or not enough in writing. A possible way to help yourself improve is to read out what you've written, think about when you pause for breath and when you do so for effect. Another possible method of developing this, as the event was made to show, is proofing. One proofer, two proofers, three or four proofers, additional pairs of eyes on your work can only help your work.