Smoke floated around tables, staff of questionable freedom moved from seat to seat, and the dealer droids had more photoreceptors than a spice spider. The Winter Palace was a proper hive of scum and villainy, which meant that it had some of the straightest tables in the sector. Or the best skimmers and cheaters, but pulling those kinds of tricks at a place like this was a quick way to sate a Hutt’s boredom. Which was one of the reasons the Ryn sitting at a Sabaacc table was playing fair, not even trusting in the Force to make his bets, but instead his observational skills and gut. He wouldn’t put it past the Kajidics to have either funded or developed some kind of tech that could ferret out a cheating Force Sensitive, and he wasn’t game to find out.
He was up, incredibly, which was good considering the line of credit he’d set up lead back to a shell company of his own clan. If he wasn’t the Consul, someone would have already come for his tail. Which was why it was worrying when he sensed a hostile, yet familiar, presence entering the area. His gray eyes peeked over his cards, and groaned internally. He tossed his down, much to the dismay of several of the other gamblers at the table.
“Sorry, lads, gotta cash out, ya know how it is with quick exits, eh?” he apologized, scooping up his cred chips and markers. His explanation got a number of understanding grunts and waves of dismissal. He’d not won so much that anyone would pull a blaster, but some of them had hoped to get theirs back. The Ryn had made it almost to the entrance hall when the snap-hiss of a saber activating brought him to a halt. Slowly, he turned, a grim look on his face.
“Oi, Rrogon. Do nae know what yer doin’ all tha way out here when yer job is back on Selen these days.”
“My job is whatever I’m told to do by those above me, Kordath,” the Kaleesh growled at him, his vibrant white blade humming menacingly.
The Ryn’s eyes flicked around the room; they were drawing a crowd, and credits were already changing hands as people whispered odds to one another. Security was gathering as well, but they were lounging or betting among themselves. There to protect the establishment, not necessarily the patrons.
“Aye? And who’d all would that be, mate, because last I checked, t’was meself atop that ladder.”
“For now,” stated Skar, giving his saber a short spin, as if to loosen up the wrist. Or to intimidate his Consul. “I was sent to retrieve you. Something about clan funds going missing.”
Kordath lifted the bag, shaking it so the credit chips would clink together. “Good thing I’m up then, this might buy us another transport ta help with tha Selen relief efforts. Ya can escort me ta see if anybody is down on their luck and lookin’ ta sale their ship. Would hate ta get robbed.”
The Consul turned on his heel, taking a few steps towards the exit before feeling his body start to drag backward, heels skipping across the flagstones. He looked back at Skar, annoyed.
“I was told to bring you back alive, if I could.”
“Well, good thing I’m alive, why we waitin’ here?”
The Kaleesh took a step towards him, mouth bending into what looked like a smile.
“Who says I found you alive?”
“Treason, is it then, mate? Gonna have ta answer some questions when ya get back if ya do this.”
The Ryn held the bag of credit chits in front of him, his right hand moving to the hilt of his Dagger. Slowly he pulled it from its scabbard, watching the Kaleesh.
“There are those who will ask, and there are those who will rejoice. Those who may move into power with your loss...well, we have an understanding.”
Bleedin’ conspiracies now, great. Kordath took a deep breath and shook his head.
“Nath’d be disappointed in ya, mate,” he stated, tensing his body.
Skar’s face contorted in rage at the mention of their late master. “Perhaps if you hadn’t ended her, she would be here to guide you to better decisions!” the Kaleesh shouted, lifting his saber to attack.
Kordath stepped back and threw his bag of cred chits at the Juggernaut, watching the blade cut it in twain and sending credits everywhere. His opponent’s red eyes flickered across the scene, instinctively tracking possible threats, and Bleu rushed in after, pulling his sapphire blade free with his offhand. Knocking the saber aside with his dagger, he slashed across the Kaleesh’s chest with the azure blade, scarring the armor and biting deep enough to draw a score of blood. He tried to follow it up by dropping low and using his momentum to sweep the bigger man’s legs with his own, but the Kaleesh simply didn’t go down from the hit.
Uh-oh.
The Force screamed in warning, and he barely blocked the attack from above with his alchemically-treated dagger. Bleu scrambled backward, seeing the burning in Rrogon’s already red eyes. Where once it was malicious and cold, taking the opportunity to eliminate one he viewed as a rival, now the Sith was angry.
Good job, ya idiot, ya made him mad.
Skar didn’t wait, didn’t gloat, simply came at him. His saber moved quickly with certainty and power. The attacks were rapid, following one after another, and the Consul found himself on the retreat, trusting in the Force to keep him alive. Blocking a particularly vicious blow knocked his dagger from his hand, causing him to jump back and reach to his belt, unclipping one of the grenades there and holding it up in the air.
“I’ll blow us both up, Skar! Do nae think I won’t!” he shouted, widening his eyes in an effort to look a bit mad.
The Kaleesh turned his head slightly and stared at him. “You’re bluffing.”
Positive Takeaways
Story
Your descriptions are detailed and do a good job of setting the scene, this was a significant factor in using up as much of the word limit as you did, which comes easier to some than others. I would try to apply equal weight to descriptions of a scene to balance out your writing.
Can Be Improved
Story
The dialogue revolving around Nath towards the end of the post feels like something Kord knows would annoy Rrogon, yet he acts surprised when this exact thing happens. I would suggest taking time to read things over to make sure you aren’t having a character react to something in a way they shouldn’t.