The darkness hummed.
If shadows lived, it would be here, where the wailing wraiths of those long-decimated whispered in the walls. Their fear was an echo, their agony ancient, but it lingered, haunting, soaked into the stone and steeped under the ash.
Rrogon Skar breathed deep of it and shuddered.
It was euphoric, being here. Painless, which was so completely abnormal to him. He felt so full, so clear, cocooned in the darkness that was patient and generous with him. No part of it was calm or gentle, but the absolution was real. The ground beneath him was consecrated in cleansing anguish, a burn so deep it numbed, and it breathed into him like he breathed into the black.
The Dark was good.
Rrogon slitted his sulfuric yellow eyes open just enough to peer around the dim crater. The Dark had shivered, and he'd felt it as keenly as a breath ghosting over his scales. He was no longer alone.
Almost regretfully, the Juggernaut rose to his feet with the whir of servos. His bionic parts gleamed dull before his dark robes fell over them, hiding his body completely from sight. It seemed his meditations were over, at least until he'd sussed out what insolent spark of life had dared to tread in this sacred sepulcher of Sith power.
The cyborg prowled about, claws resting on his saber hilt, metallic feet scraping across the rock with a slow, soft screee. His burning eyes darted everywhere, searching. Everything was cold and dark—
A flash of reddishness in his vision, a source of heat.
He whirled, his blue saber unfurling in his grasp, but even as he turned to face the living object, his senses screamed, signalling danger coming fast behind him. The Sith pivoted again, bringing his blade around in a two-handed swing with supernatural strength. Molten orange flared as a metal limb sheared clean and clattered to the ground, Skar's saber carrying effortlessly on to bisect the tall torso of a KY-security droid as it attempted to grab him. The droid toppled and the Kaleesh moved again just as two smaller items clattered down to his feet.
The grenades issued a pale poison and the cyborg found himself swallowed by their combined cloud in a heartbeat. He felt his throat burning and constricting and stumbled, tripping over the droid's corpse. It took him to a knee as he coughed and gagged, senses barraged by a constant drone of alarm. He struggled upright and inhaled the Dark Side along with another mouthful of gas, effortlessly twisting it to his indomitable will and directing it in an incredible push.
The blast of force punched through the cloud, creating an opening. He launched himself through it in an augmented leap, sailing in a short arc before landing. Drawing himself up, shaking and hacking, he held tight to the Force to heal his dissolving insides.
He wasn't given much time.
That form of heat appeared again, dropping down a few meters from atop a rocky outcropping, a gun pointed right at him. Familiar eyes glared at him from behind a breath mask.
Satsi Tameike.
"You are worse than a mynock," snarled the Kaleesh, his modulated voice a rasp of ruin. Everywhere he'd gone since his return to Dajorra, she had been there.
When he'd first arrived on the planet, he hadn't even made it to the Citadel before she'd come shot him with a rocket launcher, blowing off his remaining limbs. He'd barely survived, the pulpy remains of his head and torso scraped off the smoldering streets, kept alive only by machine machinations by Qyreia. The recovery was nonexistent; instead he swore himself to service as the Quaestor's Aedile, functioning in constant agony that had developed into the background hurts of his sleepless days and nights. But even though Tameike left the Summit, she was still always there, hovering at the edges of meetings and events the same way the Arconae skulked, watching him. He was certain she was having him followed even when he knew she was elsewhere. The attempt on his life wasn't enough. She had latched like a leech, refusing to be shaken free.
"Die already," the Human hissed, squeezing the trigger, but her bravado was somewhat undone by his charging at her at a dead sprint, bypassing her bullet.
Satsi cursed, backpedaling from her crouch, but she was too slow and he the superior. He swung his lightsaber with unbridled aggression, slicing a shallow flame across her flank as she ducked away. She screeched, delighting him as he continued a chain of dominating, brutal attacks, driving her back across the cavern as she contorted to dodge. Many burning cuts appeared on her body and armor, and her sounds of pain grew louder.
The Kaleesh spun his blade, preparing to bring it down in an executing move, but the woman crouched and launched herself at him, chambered kick spinning into the side of his head. He staggered from the crack but recovered quickly, snarling and swiping at her again.
This time, though, his weapon caught on another beam of plasma, and his reptilian eyes flared in surprise and hunger. Satsi spat at him over their locked lightsabers, her bleeding arms trembling slightly, though they seemed matched in strength.
"I'm going to carve out your entrails," menaced the Sith, rage roiling in his gut. "I'm going to feed them to you so you know how sick you make me and then I will return to Selen and drag that pathetic cripple of a brother of yours and your mutant bastard spawn into the streets and butcher them for all to see. I'll hang them from the rooftops and let them burn alive. Make a spectacle for the crowd. Raise some funds for a good deed, perhaps."
For once Satsi didn't respond with her own threats. She just shouted in inarticulate rage and shoved hard at their lock, blades singing as they slid free.
Positive Takeaways
You start your post with an absolutely haunting and beautifully enchanting description. The feeling your words strive for is well achieved, even as you carry it onwards into describing the euphoria the Kaleesh feels within this dark and cold place. The darkness of him becomes something very real. I love the images the words conjure in the mind of the reader and it truly does well in captivating your audience.
Here you have some very dark dialogue from your opponent that paints quite the terrifying image of him. It really puts hme that this is a character well used to being fierce from having fought in the arena for his life, and not to mention his penchant for enjoying the screams of those he is fighting. Why would he not try to shake up his opponent with such terrifying threats, right? Great addition of colour.
Needs Improvement
So, the above is something I would like to touch upon and falls in the realm of Realism. A distinct trait of lightsaber wounds is that they cauterize instantly Satsi does take numerous wounds through the opening combat of the post however all these wounds from what I can find are from the one weapon Rrogon has been using which is his lightsaber, thus, no bleeding. I also imagine the pain of such wounds to be quite intense. The trembling in her arms denotes that well.
So, of major note is the combat opening. You hit Rrogon with a dioxis grenade, resulting in his falling to a knee, coughing and even inhaling more gas. Rrogon only has a +2 in Control Self so… this will not be usable under such duress without concentration, yet, he manages to escape then use Healing +3 when his innards are described as dissolving. This is a toxic gas even in small amounts and he breathes in more than a little, having been engulfed in a cloud of the stuff. Healing +3 is also not enough to recover so readily from this assault, yet he seems to go on unhindered from the inhalation of the dioxis.