Rhylance deftly moved between the many bodies that formed the fleeing mob. The Godless Matron was truly a masterwork in engineering and the sheer number of inhabitants and visitors astounded the Chiss. Keeping his eyes peeled, he scoured the area for anything that could be used to hide himself. Spotting a nearby old cloak hanging off of a now-abandoned outlet, he grabbed the brown and tan garment and threw it over his head and shoulders, covering his blue skin from view that would have been a dead giveaway. Rejoining the crowd, he learned that they had hit a dead end and would have to turn around.
A scream nearby caused the crowd to go silent. Everyone turned to see Magik standing in the back of the group with his lightsaber emitted. The crimson glow, accompanied by the rhythmic humming of the blade, promised danger to any who got in the Sith’s way. Rhylance kept out of sight, copying the pleading words spoken by the rest of the civilians in their native tongues. He may not have known what they were saying, but the intent was clear, as was the fear they exuded through their voices.
Magik scanned over the crowd with his eyes, but he saw no sign of blue flesh. A Chiss would stand out in a crowd like this, which meant he was hiding. Reaching out with his feelings, the Sith opened up his mind to hear the distant thoughts of the nearby shoppers. He stepped through the crowd, his mind opened and linked to those around him. He needed to find his quarry and he wouldn’t stop until the Quaestor was dead.
Rhylance silently observed the Sith as he stepped through the terrified crowd. The Human had sweat dripping down his forehead and his breathing seemed to be slightly labored. The Medic realized that Magik’s body just wasn’t trained to a level to handle an extended confrontation, and his use of the Force was speeding up the tiring process. Reaching into his coat, the Quaestor pulled out a scalpel and silently waited to be found.
Magik continued to walk through the crowd until he heard a familiar sounding mental voice.
That traitor, trying to kill me, his own Quaestor. How dare he defile the name Arcona like this!
Instantly the Human followed the thoughts to their source. The Chiss’s voice rang inside his head, growing louder as he approached a hunched over figure wearing a decrepit-looking cloak. His blade was ready. This time, Rhylance wouldn’t get away.
“Turn around, Rhylance, let's not make this any harder than it needs to be,” Magik taunted slightly, knowing he had won.
“I will extend my offer this one time, Magik. Tell me who ordered my death, and I will show leniency for your transgressions,” the Chiss spoke with an authoritative voice as he turned around slowly, his crimson eyes meeting Magik’s amber orbs.
“Your words are meaningless to me, Rhylance. For my benefit, I complete my charge.”
Magik raised his arm to strike down his foe with his lightsaber. Rhylance, only slightly faster than the Sith, brandished his scalpel and cut the Human across his now exposed side, slicing through the robes and releasing a paralytic toxin into Magik’s bloodstream. Magik recoiled in pain, his lightsaber nearly skewering a different civilian.
“Your body was already tiring. This will help my poison travel through your systems, and you should begin to feel numb in your arms,” Rhylance explained to the wide-eyed Sith.
To the Chiss’s credit, Magik’s arms indeed went numb. He couldn't feel his hands anymore, and his lightsaber fell from his grasp, deactivating as it fell. Magik could only stare in wonder as he felt his body grow stiffer. He tried to move, but he had been too tired before. Extended connection to the Force drained him.
Rhylance smirked as he looked down on his underling. This would be the moment dissention vanished from House Qel-Droma. Many in the terrified crowd began to cheer at the Sith’s fall, and all too soon their happiness was cut short.
“Alright, alright, everybody clear on out now. Nothing to see here!”
Several of the Godless Matron security officers stormed into the area, intent on capturing the troublemaker. Rhylance refused to allow this. Standing up tall, he approached the highest ranking officer and spoke.
“This man will be coming with me. He is a warrior under my command who committed treason and must now be dealt with.”
“Sorry, Chiss, the jurisdiction is ours. Move along now.”
Rhylance merely smiled. He knew who these brutes reported to, and what she would expect in return.
“You tell your boss, Selika, that you are delivering a message from the Blind Man of Port Ol’Val. If she wants to open trade routes with Ol’Val, this man comes with me.”
The guard's eyes went wide. Nothing was said as if he was listening to someone in his ear before motioning to the other guards. They left the area, and the patrons of the Godless Matron went back to their days.
Now to get Magik to the Port. Lucine is sure to have a field day with his mind, the Chiss though as his eyes burned with a fiery intensity and he grinned.
Positive Takeaways
You set up the scene pretty well, and gave reason as to why Magik was coming for Rhylance. It was pretty interesting to see someone having influence in Chute Town, too. Normally people have their characters wandering in and out like their nobodies, but here Magik has guards and crew members listening and working for him. Interesting change of pace and goes against the expected norm.
Can Be Improved
Either a tiny mispelling or grammar issue here. Nothing a rundown through spellcheck or grammarly won’t fix.
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