It was strange for Stres’tron’garmis to be in such a place without his master of questionable morals, but the orders received had been rather specific. To be here, in this place, at this time and day, for combat training. He’d not made additional preparations, knowing that which he carried with him on a daily basis would have to suffice should a situation ever arise. The usual fare of ne’er do wells were shuffling around the level. None approached the hulking Chiss whose hand laid on the grip of his riot baton.
The big man walked slowly, aiming to make a circuit of the circular area, passing through the usual things such a place held. Open air markets made of small stalls, women showing more skin than not, piled up detritus of old crates, boxes and likely a fair number of forgotten corpses. He’d barely made it a quarter of the way around the massive ring before an armored figure, made up with blacks and purples, landed ahead of him in a gout of smoke. A sound of heated metal contracting could be heard as the jetpack on the figure’s back cooled.
He, or possibly she, turned towards the Chiss, helmeted head cocking slightly as if inspecting the large man, who reached back to unsling his riot shield. The movement was slow and measured, one of caution rather than provocation.
“Stres’tron’garmis, I assume? Must be. Can’t be many Chiss on Coruscant fitting your description,” stated the armored figure. The voice sounded male, but without knowing if the armor hid some kind of modulator it was impossible to know. “My name is Kojiro Keibatsu. You may have heard of me?”
The purple-trimmed character puffed his chest out in pride at speaking his own name, and Strong began to recognize some of the symbols adorning the armor. He was given no further time to reply, the bounty hunter having drawn a pistol in a blur and pointed it towards him.
“Right, you’re my bounty today, so come along quietly and I won’t have to maim you. This is supposed to be some kind of training exercise, after all.”
Strong had little to compel him to comply; his own instructions had simply been to show here. He hadn’t intended to be someone’s prey and bounty hunters were not high on his list of respected professions. He hefted his shield and took a step towards Kojiro, who fired a warning shot at the Arconan’s feet. It was ignored, the son of Garmis glowering at the armored man and speeding to a jog.
“Fine,” growled the Keibatsu, lifting his right arm and firing a projectile from a small box on his wrist. The net expanded as it sped forward, and Kojiro smirked under his helmet. There was little doubt the big man would try to avoid it, but it was unlikely he’d succeed. An easy collar.
The Chiss pulled back and hurled his shield into the approaching net with enough force to send both items back towards Kojiro. He broke into a sprint, his eyes narrowed to slits as he glared at Kojiro.
For the Sadowan, it was a matter of sidestepping the thrown shield, tangled in the net. He instinctually tracked it with his vision for a moment, before snapping his helmet back to see Strong bearing down on him. He muttered a curse in Mando’a and triggered his jetpack, blasting into the air and firing his pistol at his target. The big man kept moving, deceptively quick for his size, towards a pile of trash and rubble. Several of the bolts hit, sparking off an energy shield.
He’s more prepared than he looks, but that energy field can only take so much and he’s already lost his shield, thought the Keibatsu, gritting his teeth. He had to take the man alive. Letting off the thrust to keep from burning out, he descended, bursting his jetpack to safely land, and thanked his keen senses even as he dodged out of the way of a bag of thrown garbage. “Really!? You’re throwing people’s trash at me?”
The Chiss did not reply, instead, picking up a piece of rubble and hefting it on his shoulder. Kojiro decided further discourse would be useless and fired his fibercord whip. He smirked when the big man dropped his chunk of duracrete in an effort to catch the rope. It wrapped around his right forearm, digging into the muscular arm as the clone pulled it taut.
“Just a moment, we’ll have you in cuffs and on our way to my reward, big guy. Wait, what are you — you’ll do nothing but cut your own hand off like that!” he shouted as the Arconan’s right hand grasped the cord, wrapping it around his palm several times. “Oh Sithspit.”
Kojiro launched himself skyward again, firing several shots with his pistol at the man. The first couple dissipated against his shield again, the third burning a hole in the Chiss’s shirt and torso. Damaged product, blast it.
But his plan to pull the man off the ground in an effort to disable him became a contest of strength. Below, Strong’s heels dragged across the floor until he reached the retainer wall above the pit, feet planting against it. The Arconan’s muscles bulged, neck veins standing out as he shouted and pulled back on the fibercord. It cut into the man’s hand, blood dripping down his arm while Kojiro’s jetpack strained to lift a combined weight of nearly six hundred pounds. His HUD popped up a warning, the fail-safes that kept the pack from burning out were kicking in.
“No!” shouted the clone as his jetpack cut out and he found himself plummeting down the pit. When the cord held by Strong dipped below the retainer, the Chiss took up the slack and grunted, not allowing the Keibatsu to plunge to his death. Kojiro slammed into the wall, the armor doing little to dull the pain of the impact.
Positive Takeaways
Overall I loved the action in this post, especially your vivid descriptions of both the combat and the environment. The basis for the character conflict was pretty straightforward but you made up for it by grabbing my attention as a reader fairly quickly in the post.
Can Be Improved
You have Strong take a blaster shot to the torso and not only keep fighting but heft a 258 pound (plus armor/gear) mando up by a whipcord later in the post. If you intended for this to be a grazing blow you needed to be clearer but Kojiro's thought about damaged goods in the next line indicate a direct hit. This is a minor realism error.
This is a comma splice. The comma should be changed to a semicolon, period or add a coordinating conjunction.