Satsi got back to her feet slowly, palms sliding over her body as she stood.
"What is it with you and women getting on their knees?" She spread her arms wide against the backdrop of the increasingly agitated ocean. "Didn't I beat you badly enough last time? Coulda sworn you were dead."
He started to scowl at her goading just as she jerked her arm forward. His eyes widened as they followed her movement and spied the device clutched in her fingers. Quicksilver his saber reactivated, and he swept the humming blade upwards, diagonally across his person, to bisect the projectile before it ever reached him.
But Satsi didn't throw the grenade.
The woman sprinted full tilt at him and ducked under his sword arm, tackling him around the hips. His lightsaber fell away as they crashed to the ground like waves against the cliffside. The air left Magik's lungs while pain exploded up his spine.
Then she was punching him, one fist raining down, meaty cracks against bone. The sky opened above them in the midst of the assault, pelting them with torrential rain.
"Frakker," yelled Satsi over the wind. A tooth swam loose in the pool of sanguine saliva flooding his mouth. "Chew on this."
Something metallic and unyielding pressed against his lips and teeth, and then kept pressing. Her fingers found the hinge of his jaw and squeezed, and between the two forces his mouth choked open as wide as it could go.
And still the object pressed, and found no ground, and the skin tore from his lips and his teeth screamed in their sockets as the pressure increased and gave—
Another tooth popped free and that was enough as others cracked down the middle and chipped in places. The grenade just barely lodged in his mouth, but it seemed to be satisfactory to Satsi as she stood from her crouch atop him. Through the strife of the storm, he could hear the detonator beeping. The Mercenary turned and sprinted out of his sight.
For a horrific moment, Magik struggled. The pain and dizziness in his head muddled his senses into almost nothing. But he had the Force, and he reached for it. The Sith squeezed his eyes closed, shutting out the agony and panic. He desperately focused and took control, dampening all his nerves.
Magik rolled upright, spat out the grenade, picked it up and threw it hard into the ocean. It didn't even disappear from view before it exploded, making him flinch away from the sudden BOOM of superheated air and water.
It all came crashing back in an instant. He became aware of his injuries again as he scrambled away from the now-crumbling rock, destabilized from the atomized crater taken out of it. He bit down around a scream, only causing further pain in his teeth and jaw. The Sith staggered to higher ground, slipping on slick stone, and reached for the Force again. He needed to mend what he could before he tracked down the woman and ended her.
Damn her, he thought, his hatred fuel for his healing. She will regret this.
"Sithspit, I regret this," Satsi spat, hunkering down in a little niche that partially shielded her from the rain. She was soaked through, her gun was gone, and she still hadn't found whatever stupid frakking books — books! Like those still existed? — Turel talked about being on this island. Some birthday present, if she couldn't find them.
Maybe she'd bring him a rock. Then throw it at him.
"Frakking sparkfingers," growled the woman. She wasn't going to count on Magik, a living weapon, being defenseless without a saber; and she wasn't confident he was dead just from a grenade either. Too many times she'd let that assumption get her attacked just like this.
Sighing, she drew her dagger, waiting and listening. The rain kept pouring, masking most sound. She'd heard the explosive go off, but not much else.
A scrabbling noise drew her attention, and she tensed. Gripping her blade tighter, she crouched and listened to the scraping of movement come closer through the downpour.
Satsi lashed out, slicing for approximately where she expected Magik's throat to be as he came upon her. But, her strike only cut through empty air. Stumbling with the wasted momentum, the woman nearly kissed dirt. She swore and twisted, prepared to dodge some attack, but none came.
It took her a solid, soaking moment of blinking dumbly in the rain to realize Magik wasn't there before another scuffle caught her ear. She stilled, looking up just in time to see the Sith on the cliff above and the small boulders he held in a telekinetic grasp.
"Fr—" Satsi began before the stones came hurtling down at her. She tried to dodge, dropping her dagger and slamming herself into the shelter of cave wall, but felt the clip of one rock against her leg. She staggered away and was nearly weak with relief that she could, that she wasn't pinned or crushed.
Then the pain came.
The woman choked around a scream, feeling a sudden numbness rush up her leg as it buckled. She looked down, eyes following a trail of red so heavy that the rain wasn't immediately washing it away. It ran from her ruined boot to the boulder…
Which had apparently shorn off at least some of her toes. And foot? She couldn't tell.
Oh, Shadows, Satsi thought, in a swollen moment of queasiness, before she slammed that mental door. It was just pain. Just pain. Pain was pain. She'd had worse. She'd seen and felt worse. She could handle it—
Magik leapt down from his perch and rolled into a crouch across from her. He was panting heavily, barehanded, his face purpled and his front blood-soaked.
"Finally on your knees where you should be," he slurred, words mangled, and Satsi bared her teeth.
"Come and get it," she bit back, tugging free her brother's lightsaber and activating the blade.
Positive Takeaways
You give a good sense of setting for the scene. Too many ACC battles take place in a flat, featureless plane but you definitely give a sense of this taking place at Ahch-to.
Can be Improved
The syntax definitely needs some improvement. There were a number of spelling and grammar mistakes that impacted the flow of reading and might have been caught by a proofreader. The lack of dialogue formatting especially hurt the post here, and is a spot I would recommend focusing on There was a single realism mistake, as TK+2 is not fast enough to rip the pistol out of Satsi’s hands so casually. It requires a few seconds of focusing and concentration that satsi could have used to retaliate.
The biggest problems with this post, however, were storywise. Firstly the use of the noun “lay” threw me off a lot. While not wrong, that usage of the word is so archaic I had to go out of my way to look up the etymology. Any time your use of language forces your writer out of the story that’s not good as a writer
In the second paragraph there’s a weird switch between dialogue and narration right at the end that feels super out of place. If you begin an exchange with dialogue usually it’s good form to finish it with the same, or just narrate it all. Swapping between the two in the same paragraph just comes off as confusing
The introduction of Magik’s lightsaber also left me confused. It’s not named anywhere on his sheet, so simply saying that he “reached for his Inquisitor” left me nothing to go on. If your going to refer to a lightsaber or weapon by name, make sure it’s marked on the actual possession for clarity.
One of the biggest issues, however, was disarming your opponent so early into the match. This is simply extremely poor form in an ACC match. Before the fight’s even begun, before she’s even gotten off a single bullet, the gun is Just ripped out of her hands and thrown off a cliff, never to be recovered, removing a good deal of her ranged capability. There’s still two more posts worth of fight to go through, doing this sort of thing so early not only removes a lot of possibilities and excitement from the fight, it also ruins the narrative pacing of the battle