He’d been too distracted; too many things not going according to plan. Before he could redirect his hold, the mercenary drew the heavy blaster and fired, catching him square in the chest. He crumpled to the wet ground, wheezing but still alive, while Qyreia fell the few meters back to the earth with a hard, splashing thud.
“Owww,” she groaned as she slowly recovered. Sashar was still convulsing from the impact of the high-powered stun round. “Goddamn space wizard… lucky you’re in my unit or I wouldn’t’ve switched the setting.”
The Zeltron was on unsteady feet, but she was doing better than her human counterpart. Her eyes darted toward her ship further up the spider web of tiered platforms, then back at the recovering Arconae. Kark this noise. I’m going home. Snatching up her rifle, she started walking briskly in the direction of her ship, clutching at her shoulders as much to protect herself from the rain as to ease the soreness in her limbs.
She didn’t quite hear the wet slap of the Force user regaining his feet, but she was very acutely aware of her own feet being dragged out from under her. Shashar tugged at her ankles, hardly even needing to concentrate on invisibly tripping the Quaestor. It was oddly satisfying to be able to do such simple things just by grace of her being dumb to the Force.
“We’re not done with that beat down of yours.”
Qyreia grimaced, slapping the ground in frustration before pushing herself back up. “Seriously?!” She angrily swiped away the wet hair sticking to her face. “Who the Hutt-humping hell do you think you are?!”
“Sashar Erinos Arconae, in case your memory is as bad as your ability to lead the House.”
The mercenary rolled her eyes hard. “You say that like I give a bantha’s ass. Might as well be Grandmaster Whatshisfrack for all the good those titles mean.”
Shashar clicked his tongue, thoughtful as well as derisive. “And you…”
“You’re in my House, Sash! Don’t like it? Bring it up with Kordath. Otherwise cry me a river, build a bridge, and get the kark over it.”
Qyreia turned to walk away, pinging her droid to get the ship started, only to feel that all too familiar tug. The thought, Not this crap again, barely had time to cross her mind before being thrown backward. She would have lost her rifle yet again were it not slung across her chest. Rather than let her fly into a wall again, the Mandalorian let her fly into his waiting hand, snatching her by the shoulder and flipping her forcefully onto her back. The wind quickly left her lungs, and she was left gasping for air as the Arconae leveraged one leg to pin both her blasters, a wrist-mounted blade hovering not far from her throat.
“You might want to listen when your betters are talking. Tameike had the same problem.” Qyreia tried to pull her pistol again, but he just locked his leg tighter. “Your stubbornness at this point isn’t even admirable; it’s just foolhardy.”
The Zeltron coughed, her diaphragm allowing air once again into her lungs. “Frack you.”
Her knee cemented the sentiment. When it connected with Sashar’s groin, leveraged by the ground, Qyreia was able to follow up with a rough kick to knock the stunned human away. He recovered quickly enough, much to her chagrin, but she was at least able to regain her feet.
Lightning flashed and the thunder rolled louder as the heavier part of the storm surged ever closer, following the wind which likewise blew all the stronger. Even the rain began to sting their faces as it pelted them. It made everything very dramatic as the Mandalorian rushed forward yet again, though with a slightly altered gait. I just need to get in close, he thought as he pulled his pistol and fired. The shot zinged her side, leaving a searing streak in her red skin that made her yelp and miss her own return shot. Her gaze seemed distracted though, and Sashar’s rush brought him within striking range.
Qyreia sidestepped, her rifle butt barely deflecting the impact of his fist. He spun around ready to finish the charge, and saw his vision filled by shining metal.
“Wheeeoo bleep-doot!”
The R3 unit’s battlecry, such as it was, carried loudly through the air just as the jets in the droid’s legs carried it through the air and straight into Shashar’s face. With all of the electromagnetic activity in the air, its sensors couldn’t quite tell where the ground was in relation to the man’s skull, but refrained from squishing the fleshbag as soon as the meaty sound of impact with the floor reached its microphone node. In an instant, the human was out cold, bleeding profusely from the head wound, but he would live.
“What’re you doing here, Remee?” Qyreia asked as the droid wheeled over.
“Bleeet breep-dootdoot beep brrt.”
“I do not always ‘get in over my head.’”
“Brrt brrt wreeeow.”
“Okay, sometimes. Yes. I’ll give you that.” She looked back at the Arconae lying in the rain. “He’ll be fine. C’mon. Let’s get home before this schutta wakes up.”
As the Zeltron made her way up the ramps and stairways to her ship’s platform, the droid paused, turned around, and offered a quick poke of its shock prod on the supine Force user. While it was spared a return current by grace of its wheels, the R3 was hardly spared the slap on the dome once its master realized what had happened. The fight was over, she told the droid, and there was no need to rub salt in the wound. The Arconae would have plenty of that once he got back to Selen.
Positive Takeaways
I felt this post did a really good job at setting up an underlying ideological conflict to the story. All to often in the ACC characters fight just for the sake of fighting, but here it's made clear this is more than a test of fists. it's a test of ideologies, of personalities, of ways of looking at the world and proving which one is better. I felt this gave the fight a lot of gravity that it wouldn't have had otherwise
Can be Improved
A few syntax mistakes were noted, but nothing major.
In my opinion I felt the set-up to the fight was rather weak here. Qyreia has a well-established reason to be on Kamino, but Sashar showing up feels really out of place. He’s given no reason to be there other than to pick to insult Qyreia and pick a fight. While this isn’t necessarily out of character, it’s not a particularly interesting or dynamic way to start a battle either.
In general I felt the battle was lacking any real dynamism or sense of energy. It plays out very simple. The two taunt each other, Qyreia fires a spray of blaster bolts at Sashar, they taunt some more, another spray of blaster bolts, and then she throws explosives. Picturing it in my head, it’s just not very interesting. They just stand there and trade blows.
The loss of Sashar’s lightsaber was really strange. He has Barrier at +4, he can throw it up on instinct without really any thought or effort. The fact he somehow had to drop his lightsaber to do it is super strange and feels like it was only put in for convenience sake, rather than flowing naturally out of the story.