"What, you couldn't cut it on your own," the Kiffar scoffed, "so you brought your groupies?"
Selika kept her gaze level and locked with Terran's. "I must have hit you harder than I thought," she replied. "Seeing double?"
"No," he said, pointing beyond her. "I was talking about them."
"Just how stupid do I look to you, Terran?" Selika asked coyly. "You must think I was born yesterday if you think I'm going to fall for 'look behind you'."
Before Selika could close the remaining distance that separated the two combatants, a stone figure that vaguely suggested an Ithorian lashed out with its fist. The blow landed between Selika's shoulder blades, knocking her to the dirt. Rolling over to face her attacker, Selika summoned the Force to her, delivering an invisible blow that shattered the stone figure into gravel.
"What did you do!" Selika shrieked at Terran.
"Me?" the Arconan shot back, "You probably woke them up with all of your showy powers!"
Now even more of the figures moved towards the two living combatants, some carrying weapons, others with nothing by their fists. Selika's eyes darted back and forth, counting the opponents that now faced her.
"How about a truce?" she offered Terran. "Join me and you can take whatever bauble that you wanted."
Terran's eyes narrowed, but he nodded. "Truce, then."
Selika turned her back on her tenuous new ally. The figures hit them like a wave, flickering saber blades and stone hands slashing at the pair. It was all Selika could do to keep them at bay, each one that fell was seemingly instantly replaced by two more.
"Maybe we should cut our losses," Terran suggested.
"You might be right," Selika answered as her blade cleaved another head from its body.
"Your ship or mine?" Terran asked with a mischievous grin painting his features.
"Yours," Selika snapped back. "It's closer."
The two moved as one, exhibiting a coordination that belied how little experience they had with one another. It was probably more Terran's precognitive abilities allowing him to feel Selika's movements and react accordingly than it was any inherent skill or bond between them. Only once did Selika's blade nearly intersect Terran as the latter blocked a blow intended for her chest. Selika quickly toggled her blade off as it would have slashed through his arm, reigniting it to meet the crimson blade of one of their adversaries.
"You burned my coat!" Terran exclaimed.
"Better your coat," she called back, "than the arm underneath!"
They were just reaching the edge of the crowd of assailants when Selika stumbled, dropping down to one knee as she held her blade in a makeshift guard above her head. It was a moment before Terran noticed that she was lagging behind, and the press of bodies had begun to seperate them.
"Terran!" Selika screamed out as their enemies moved ever closer.
The Kiffar looked behind him, then back to the path he was following. There were only three of them between him and his escape. The choice wasn't hard.
"Not today," he said, turning his back on her and mading his move toward freedom.
Selika shrieked wordlessly as the storm once again filled her eyes. Lightning shot out from her hands, first once and then again. The blue tinged energy crackled across the stone skin of the petrified corpses, doing little to slow them down. They crashed down upon her, finally blocking view of her body as dust billowed out from the pile of bodies.
Terran was moving quickly now, heading back towards the landing zone where he had arrived. As his echoing footfalls finally faded, a stillness settled back down upon the dead world. Then, suddenly, the image of billowing dust and piled bodies shimmered and then faded, leaving behind the immovable stone statues just as they had been for centuries. In the midst of them stood one living being, the Herald's breath rasping in her chest as sweat plastered her hair to her head. No longer able to stand, Selika dropped to the ground and was left to stare up at the rocky ceiling.
Maintaining such a powerful illusion, made all the more real with momentary applications of creative telekinesis, had taxed her more than she had thought it would. Even projecting it into the mind of one person alone had drained her past her ability to move. All she could do was breath, barely. Her limbs hardly responded to her commands to move, only her fingers twitching slightly as she tried.
Well, she thought to herself, it worked.
So it did, little one.
Selika's mind froze at the sound of a voice that was not her own in her mind. Her eyes widened as a phantasm of Force energy seemed to coalesce from the air and dust before her. The form was that of a woman, some long dead Sith witch that had perished during the Great Scourge.
You didn't think you did all of that on your own? it asked. I haven't had that much fun in centuries. I'm so glad that you are here...
Selika could only shriek in terror as the phantom descended towards her, it's outstretched hand coming ever closer to her face.
What Went Well
So first off, you write beautifully. The characterization and the descriptions in this post pop from the very first word. Your description of smells in the first full paragraph was a stroke of brilliance.
You’re obviously familiar with the setting, with the Brotherhood lore, with Terran and Arcona and past matches, and all of that gives your writing a strong sense of place. Sometimes I see matches where it feels like both characters blinked into existence into a 250-word description of an ACC venue, so I do appreciate little notes like telling Terran to piss off back to Ol’val.
I also just really liked this sentence, even if it’s a little ironic from Ms. Krath:
Food for Thought
There were some very minimal syntax issues in this post:
Subject/verb agreement in the above. The below was somewhat awkwardly phrased.
While I really enjoyed your description of the venue, you did get a little carried away with rehashing Terran’s last match and the planet’s history. It’s past the halfway point of your post before our opponents even lay eyes on each other. There was just barely some action at the end, and it felt like a token gesture.