The Kiffar ignored to blood escaping from his nose, instead he shook his arm out at his side, rolled his neck from side to side and then moved towards the Kel Dor. As he took a few steps his posture transformed back into that of someone fighting in the shockboxing ring, fists raised up to guard his face while he danced lightly on the palms of his feet.
Having already experienced what it felt like to get into close quarter combat with the professional boxer, TuQ’uan knew he somehow had to keep Tisto out of reach. Knowing exactly how ridiculous it would look, the mercenary drew his Sith Sword and pointed it at Tisto as a challenge.
“Let’s dance,” the Kel Dor whispered under his breath, the wind carried his words to the Kiffar’s ears who simply smirked in response.
TuQ’uan swung the sword in a wide arc aimed directly at the Odanite’s head. Tisto ducked quickly and the blade passed by, slicing off a stray hair from the top of his head. A series of rapid uppercuts pummelled into the Plagueian’s stomach, the force of which drove him back towards the cliff edge . Seething with anger, TuQ’uan dug his heel in and swung his blade again, this time feigning another high attack before swinging low. The attack caught the Kiffar off guard and caused him to stumble as the blade bit into the flesh on his calf.
Tisto dropped to his knees and dropped his head, TuQ’aun saw his opportunity for a killing blow and raised his sword one more time. Before the blade could complete its downward arc the shockboxer punched his balled fist into the stone ground sending out a powerful shockwave of energy. TuQ’uan felt his feet come out from underneath him as the ripple of energy threw him backwards and off the cliff’s edge.
The descent felt like an eternity to the Kel Dor but in reality he only fell two and a half metres. The landing was just as sudden as the take off and with a heavy thud the air rushed out of his lungs and his head cracked against stone, his sword fell a short distance away. TuQ’uan groaned and tried to focus his now blurry vision, standing on the ledge above him was an out of focus figure resembling the Kiffar.
“If you’re the best Plagueis has to offer then the clan has fallen a lot further than I thought,” Tisto said with a smug tone as he wiped the blood from his upper lip.
Taking a deep breath the Odanite drew the Force towards fresh wound. Suddenly the trickle of blood running down his calf stopped, the skin around the gash began to swell, and finally the skin puckered as the wound almost completely disappeared. While a dull throb still remained, it would not bother Tisto near as much as the open wound would have.
Taking advantage of the lull in the battle, TuQ’uan rolled over and tried to drag himself away from the imposing juggernaut, his head still swimming. He heard a thump off the ground behind him as Tisto landed behind the Kel Dor, a small tinge of pain shooting through his leg. The mercenary gathered his strength and pushed himself up and onto his feet, gathering up his hat and Sith Sword he stood up and gave his head a shake, still trying to clear the fog from his head.
Waves crashed up against the sides of the rocky cliffs. The commotion above had drawn the attention Tsw’ells, their tentacles whipped around in a frenzy, getting closer and closer to where the two combatants stood near the ledge. Tisto slowly and methodically walked forwards, like a Lothwolf stalking its prey, ready to pounce at any moment. TuQ’uan replaced his sword for his blaster and backed up, keeping the cliff to his right and drawing his opponent closer to the edge.
“One way or another, only one of us is leaving here alive,” Tisto chuckled.
“Are there any messages you want me to pass along for you?” The ground began to tremble as tentacles smashed angrily against the stone, water from the ocean below splashed all around.
The smirk on the Odanite’s face disappeared in an instant.
“You are bold, aren’t you?”
Tisto quickened his pace towards his quarry. TuQ’uan opened fire on the enclosing enemy while continuing his retreat backwards, the bump on his head seemed to effect his aim and the plasma bolts whizzed past the Kiffar, narrowly missing their target. The Tsw’ell tentacles slammed down with increasing frequency, swiping across the ground and flailing through the air. Drawing on the Force, Tisto launched himself up and over a tentacle that landed ahead blocking his path.
A massive thud came from behind TuQ’uan causing the Kel Dor’s legs to wobble. The mercenary’s feet slipped on the wet stone and he fell back onto the wet and squishy tentacle of a Tsw’ell. Suddenly TuQ’uan was rushing towards Tisto at a startling speed. As Tisto dove to the side and the Kel Dor continued moving forward he realized that it wasn’t the Force users doing, but that he was being swept away by a Tsw’ell.
“Oh. Frak.” the Plagueian thought to himself as the edge of the cliff rushed up to meet him.
“Well that was a little disappointing,” Tisto muttered to himself as watched his opponent disappear into the ocean, he wished that he could have finished off that cocky Kel Dor himself. The wind whipped around the Kiffar as he made his was back to his ship, this planet had been ruined for him now.
Positive Takeaways
Great opening to the battle. You subtly touch upon the surroundings and begin combat nice and simple. I do love your character’s attempt at talking his way around his opponent, making great use of his Subterfuge skill (even if his opponent does not fall for it, haha.) It added an amusing flare to your mercenary character.
Needs Improvement
Details. You have a couple of instances where perhaps a bit more could have gone a long way. The biggest instance of this is in your last paragraph when you write the two combatants were tangled together, exchanging blows in close range combat… It does not seem like much but, it comes across as a missed opportunity to get into the nitty-gritty of the fight. Your words should be working to create an image in the mind of your reader of what is transpiring, this also goes for setting up the scene… the purpose of the battle.