A feral grin split Kul’tak’s face as he sensed the end was nearing. The redhead’s movements were slowing, a sure sign that fatigue was setting in. He could feel his bloodlust rise to a feverish intensity, knowing that the Arconan would soon be dead at his feet. Behind him, he could hear his massifs starting to growl and snap at each other, feeling his bloodlust and reacting in kind.
“Just as well,” he growled, ignoring snarls of the fighting massifs. “Words are the weapons of prey!” He punctuated his statement with a devastating overhead blow. Knowing that she would not have the strength to block his attack, Lucine leaped to the side. As she moved, she used her anger and fear to draw upon the dark energy of the Force to weave an illusion.
As Kul’tak watched, one woman split in two, one leaping to the left of where she had been standing while the other moved to the right. Both immediately shifted a few steps away from each other, twin sets of scarlet lips curved into a mocking smile at him.
His eyes darted back and forth, trying to determine which one was the real Lucine. At last, he noticed a difference: the one to his left moved more slowly than the one on the right. The difference was subtle but noticeable. But which one was the illusion?
The two redheads moved nearly simultaneously, closing the distance and attacking with a quick thrust aimed at his abdomen. The Zabrak used his shoto blade to sweep the blows aside, before responding with a slash toward the woman on the left. The crimson blade passed harmlessly through her. There, he decided. That one is the illusion.
Lucine frowned, and the second woman vanished. She took a step to the side and a second redhead once again split off from her. Both moved in opposite directions, flanking him. This time, Kul’tak could spot the difference immediately. Though fatigue showed on the faces of both of the redheads, the one moving to his right moved more slowly. He turned his head slightly toward the slower one, hoping to trick the real Lucine into believing he thought her double was actually her.
Both redheads attacked at roughly the same time. Kul’tak turned his body at the last possible minute, moving to block the attack of the one he thought was the real Lucine. But her lightsaber passed right through his defense. His eyes widened as he realized that he had guessed wrong, moments before her plasma blade seared through armor, flesh, bone, and the throbbing muscle that was his heart.
The heavy thud of the Zabrak’s lifeless body hitting the ground was punctuated by a high-pitched whine. Lucine turned to see that one of the massifs had wrestled the other to the ground, its jaws locked around its throat. It jerked its head, wrenching the other massif’s body violently from side to side. Abruptly, the downed creature’s whines ceased.
But the creature’s bloodlust was not sated. It slowly lifted its head and locked its eyes on the person standing nearest to it: Lucine. The Sith’s eyes widened as she realized its intent, and she brought her lightsaber around to defend herself.
Fueled by Kul’tak’s rage but no longer tethered to his will, it sprang toward the redhead. This was what the Royal Guard was waiting for, and they filled the air with blaster fire aimed toward the charging beast. But the massif was much faster than anyone had realized, and the blaster bolts missed their mark.
It crossed the distance between them in less than two heartbeats and leaped at her. She had no time to think, only to thrust her lightsaber forward as the beast used its bulk to knock her to the ground. The breath exploded from her lungs as the massif landed heavily on top of her.
Black stars exploded in front of Lucine’s eyes as she struggled to draw in a breath. She was dimly aware of the massif’s claws rending her flesh, leaving trails of fire in their wake. But that pain was nothing compared to the agony she felt when the massif buried its teeth into the soft flesh of her throat. She tried to scream, but could only manage a wet gurgle as she felt her throat get torn open.
Mere seconds seemed like an eternity as she waited for the beast to break her neck. But it merely gave a low growl, before collapsing on top of her.
She felt the weight being pushed off of her. Through the gathering shadows of unconsciousness, she saw the hole that seared the massif’s chest. Her lightsaber clattered from nerveless fingers as she reached on hand up to clutch at the ruins of her throat. Blood flowed freely between her fingers. Her mouth moved, but the only thing that emerged from her lips was a crimson froth. Her vision swam as she saw the Guard Captain turn, snapping out orders. Abruptly, the gathering shadows rushed in. There was no more pain, only darkness.
Queen Sosha rose from her throne and moved at a stately pace until she stood over the redhead’s supine form. Moments later, a medic appeared and began trying to administer aid to the fallen woman.
“You will live,” she told the unconscious Force-user. “Indeed, I insist on it. I have many questions for you. In particular, I would like to know why another Force-User would stage a frontal assault on my palace. He killed many of my people, and I want to know why.”
The medic glanced around at the carnage that Kul’tak had caused. “Forgive me, my Queen, but what happens if you’re not satisfied with her answers?” he asked, as he returned his attention to keeping the redhead alive.
“Then we shall see what representatives from the Collective have to say,” Sosha replied. “One way or the other, someone is going to answer for the lives lost here today.”
Positive Feedback
I really enjoy this set-up. It's quite honestly pone of the best I've seen in the ACC. The whole court panopoly in attendance as Lucine entreats with the Queen of Naboo, Kul’s dramatic entrance and the tense stand-off in the throne room, the intimidating Massiffs at his heels as he marches without heed into the throne room, It’s just all so cinematic and interesting. It’s something that does credit to both characters, giving each of them a reason to be there, and fully incorporates the setting seamlessly. Truly something worthy of praise.
Can be Improved
As much as I do like the setting, and the Massiffs, I thought just having them run up and maul a few guards was overwrought and dramatic, the sheer over-the-topness of it taking me out of the story. The Massiffs just charge through a hail of blaster fire, mauling like three or four guards without retribution, and quietly retreat back to their master while the rest of the security detail just… stops firing. Kul’s Intimidation score or Terror ability isn’t nearly enough to justify this sort of reaction, it’s just kind of stupidity on the part of the security force. No competent guards would act this way, they’d keep firing as they escorted the queen out of the room, killing the Massiffs if they could or at least buying time for the queen to escape while they got mauled. This whole scene should have been dropped in my opinion, it’s slaughter simply for the sake of slaughter so much that it distracts from the real meat of the story. Just having the guards draw back when they realize Kul is a Force-user would have been enough.
Continuing on this point, the pacing in this first post is also extremely slow, in part because of Kul’s intimidating entrance. There’s so much time spent pontificating on Kul’s dramatic entrance, the slaughter of the guards, and the massiff’s that there’s not actually any combat between Kul and his opponent, only between some NPC’s. All of this extra, unnecessary slaughter and such should have probably been cut in favor of an initial clash between Lucine and Kul, especially as the post had a word limit. As it stands this really skews the story's pacing.