Aiden Lee Deshra stalked carefully through the ruins, checking his steps before lowering his feet to avoid shifting rubble and alerting any scavengers who might be looting the destroyed castle. Takodana was a pleasant place to search for objects of power, and rumors had surfaced that the proprietor of the fortress-turned-bar had been in possession of several artifacts. That was before the First Order had turned much of the place to a smoking pit, if the occasional armor-clad body was any indication. Still, there was always a chance that the Force would guide his hand.s long as he stayed on task and could focus, he would—
”AIDEN!” came a booming shout, causing the Seeker to misstep and knock over a precarious column. Small creatures covered in fur scurried away towards the surrounding forest in panic, and Aiden winced, holding his breath and listening for any scavengers. A quick sweep with his Force-fueled senses suggested he was alone, aside from wildlife that cowered in hiding and whoever had just bellowed his name.
”Master Deshra! I would have words with you, good sir!”
“Oh no,” sighed the Human as he caught sight of the massive, chrome-clad figure strolling casually through the ruins, helmet tucked underarm. “Why? Why is he here?” he asked himself, then, “Stres’tron’garmis, what brings you to Takodana?”Aiden called out, knowing that trying to ignore his Consul’s bodyguard was pointless. He couldn’t focus with all this shouting, and would never accomplish his goal.
The armored Chiss turned to face the Seeker, a smile on his broad face.
”Ah! There you are! Excellent!”
Aiden sighed, “What do you want, Strong?”
”Why, to fight, of course!”
This caused the Human to blink, though in the depths of his soul he felt himself rising to the challenge already. He fought it back, maintaining control of the situation.
“Pardon? Did I offend your...noble sensibilities at some point?” asked the man, sarcasm dripping from his tone.
Strong laughed, a sonorous sound, while shaking his head. When he finished, his expression turned more serious, his red eyes steeling themselves.
”I bear no ill will to you, Master Deshra. Rather, I have heard tell of your debt, and devotion, to our good Rollmaster.”
“Zujenia? She saved my life, yes, but what does that have to do with you?” Aiden shifted his stance, hands dropping to the saber hilt at his side. The other in his sleeve was a comforting presence as well as he sized up the larger man. Behind the Chiss, in the shadows of what remained of a wall, he could just pick out the red photoreceptors of his infiltration droid, crouched and locked on to the bodyguard.
Strong nodded, not unaware of his fellow Arconan’s movements. He was less subtle, placing his helmet over his head and pulling his riot shield and batons forth. Aiden spotted a parting smile as the helm clicked into place. The man spoke back to the Seeker once more, this time his voice somehow even louder through the helmet.
”Indeed! Miss Zujenia is very dear to my Master, as you may know. Her companion Diy is quite dear to myself, as well,” rumbled the Chiss.
Blue-green eyes narrowed at Strong, “From anyone else I’d assume some implication in that statement, but your reputation suggests you don’t hide your meaning. What is this about, Garmis?”
The Reaver took a single step in Aiden’s direction, and the EX-625 pounced, beskads flaring to life with a crackle. Strong barely managed to turn and catch the double over-head strikes with his shield, the power fields filling the area with the smell of burnt ozone. The Chiss shouted and used his powerful strength to push the droid back, riot baton spinning to thrust forward. Electricity ran over the infiltration droid’s frame, causing it to stagger and twitch before going still. Strong let out a discontented grunt.
”I somehow expected it to be more capable,” he remarked aloud, before turning back to Aiden. ”My purpose, Master Deshra, is to ensure that your presence will not endanger those lovely women my Master and I are so enamored with!”
“You want to make sure I’m capable of fighting!?” asked the incredulous Seeker. He cursed under his breath when the Chiss didn’t respond verbally; instead, the Reaver charged towards the Human.
Guess he’s done explaining his intentions, thought Aiden, letting the intense silvery blade of his saber spring to life. He parried away the baton that sought his midsection, much as it had his droid, and felt his arm almost go numb from the force behind it. Well, that’s not good.
With a twist of his wrist, his shoto-saber fell into his left palm, activating with a snap-hiss. He spun the amethyst blade in hand, emitter facing down, and used it to redirect the next blow, turning his body with the strike to lessen the impact. With the momentum of this, he used his right hand to drive his saber towards the Reaver, hoping to injure the Chiss and end things decisively. The silver saber skipped off the riot shield’s energy field, marring the yellow trim and causing it to flicker.
It wasn’t designed for this, mused the Seeker, narrowing his eyes once more. The two men circled, exchanging ineffectual attacks to feel one another’s defenses out. Behind Strong, Aiden’s luminescent gaze caught sight of his droid straightening, swords rising as the EX-625 began to stalk at the bodyguard’s back.
Positive Takeaways
Your use of character perspective in this post was outstanding. As a reader I felt a bond with Aiden as a character through him asking questions about what was going that I was asking. This was a nice compliment to your use of bold font and descriptive emotes to paint a vivid picture of Strong’s character.
Can Be Improved
This is a typo.
This passage is slightly ambiguous as to whether the saber or the riot shield is flickering. I’m reading it as the riot shield flickering which would be consistent with a glancing blow from a lightsaber. This is not a realism error as I read it, but be careful in future matches with how you describe action scenes.