Well, he's karkin' dead!—
— was the thought that had passed through her mind roughly three minutes ago. Diy had snuck through the back, keeping low, when she came across the bulgy body of the Toydarian shopkeeper — with a smoking hole in his chest. Guess someone wanted to change the deal.
Spotting several suitcases behind the counter, she had shrugged under the sounds of violence and grabbed one. Hell, the Kiffar woman hadn't even known whether or not this was the transformer, but neither did they. Fast forward to a whistle and a taunt, to running out the door and stepping over guards that she shot.
Heavy, thunderous footfalls followed her out of the rickety, strewn together metal building. They were interrupted by a quick shuffle and a short stream of curses. Diy grinned as she realized the big guy nearly tripped over his dead buddies. No time to focus on that though, she ducked under a low hanging pipe, pushing through the clouds of steam to hop onto a closed trash compartment. The faux-Zelosian skidded across its lid, grime leaving a nice streak across her mostly bare thighs.
She kept on running through the narrow alley between the shops of Chute Town. The smuggler considered herself quite agile, usually able to outrun most trouble she digs herself into. So, it took her aback when the trash compartment crashed behind her, denting in the durasteel wall of a shop just a few meters behind her. “Frakin’ A’,” Diy cursed under her arms she had put up protectively. Whipping Wynetta from her right holster, she twisted about and leveled her gun towards the Human barreling closer. Three ruby bolts shot through the air, whizzing by him and burning holes into the walls behind. Diyrian didn’t wait to see if it slowed him down any and darted down a side alley, hoping it lead to a main corridor.
“Get back here, she-akk!” The Human bellowed after her, his dark gaze connected with her sea-green as he slammed against the far wall of the corner — not slowing down to maneuver the turn smoothly.
Diy turned around as she ran, sticking her tongue out and slapping the fang tattoo on her thigh — the symbol of the mostly dead Crimson Hound Gang. “Ya are whatcha eat—” The smuggler felt her heel caught on a stray piece of metal, propelling herself backward. She rolled just in time for a massive fist to slam into the spot her head had been. Sitting up into a crouch, Diy swung the briefcase around, connecting the corner of it against his temple with a resounding crack.
Tisto, ya best be gettin’ yer arse out here! Big karkin’ fun, this one! Diy mused, the gritting, sarcastic grin on her face as the huge man shook his noggin.
Shaking his red-dreads out of his eyes, Tisto leveled his fists protectively before him and had started to shift his right foot back when a jolt of warning lashed against his back. He barely avoided the sweeping leg of the Trandoshan beneath him. The reptiloid hissed, tongue flitting between two rows of sharp teeth as he lashed out, “Yesss, die!”
Sidestepping, the Kiffar knocked the blow to the side. His muscles coiled in his left arm before unleashing an intense jab towards the thug’s head. It was dodged, the Trandoshan ducking his shoulder under it and diving into Tisto. Grunting, the Juggernaut sunk into the balls of heels as they skidded backwards with the tackle. He grabbed a fist full of the man’s vest and started pummeling him intensely with both his elbow and shock-gloved covered fist. Why the frak you won’t drop?!
Scaled muscles bulged under the Black Sun tattoo on the Trandoshan’s biceps as he hoisted the leaner man off his feet, and drove him to the ground. Tisto gasped slightly as the breath was knocked out of him.
A bit tired of being tossed like a ragdoll! was all he could think before twisting his head to the side to avoid the gnashing maw of the Trandoshan — spittle splashing onto his face. He caught the thug’s arm, now catching the silver glint of the vibroknife in his grip. Tisto strained to hold the knife at bay, his opponent having the advantage of weight as leverage against him. If he didn’t get this bloody lizard off of him soon, it was going to off him. So he called upon the Force, draining it into his muscles. The Kiffar rotated the man’s fist till the knife was pointing back at him and with a quick thrust, plunged the dagger into his throat. The Trandoshan reared back, clutching at the wound as he screeched out. The sound slowly died to an unsettling gurgled before he fell, covered in his own pulsing, warm blood.
Tisto laid panting, the durasteel cool against his pounding head. It took a moment before he remembered what he was doing, his purpose here, and what his partner was facing. Shit, Diy!
Her feet kicked at nothing, only managing to knock over the dropped briefcase. Her hands grasped at the giant’s thumb, trying to pry it from her throat to no avail. She gasped, choking upon the lack of air in her lungs. Diy could feel her limbs growing weaker, the familiar darkness encroaching upon her sight, threatening to lose consciousness. Kark...Tis...to…
“Tisto?”
She must’ve managed to croak his name out loud. The Human laughed a deep chuckle that hinted at some nostalgic reminiscence. He ran a hand through his disheveled grey-brown hair before pulling her closer, dark brown eyes narrowing gleefully.
“Tisto Kingang? That’s a pleasure,” he uttered more to himself as he dropped her to the durasteel street to cough on the filtered air of the Matron. Picking up the briefcase, he smoothed out his shirt, now covered in the grime that coated the streets and a few tears from where her pistol had caught on the fabric.
Diy didn’t pay too much attention as he pivoted around to leave, presumably to find Tisto, with her lungs feeling like they were on fire. So she didn’t notice when he halted in his tracks, the twitch of the corner of his mouth in amusement.
“Just the man I wanted to see, all grown up little Nameless?”
Tisto stalked closer towards the Human, his hazel eyes lightening as he heard the name of his former gang — his home for much of his life. They narrowed to angry slits when they fell upon the azure tattoo of an akul, now exposed on the man’s chest from his ripped shirt. An Azure Akul, rivals of his from once upon a time. That’s why this man looked familiar. He had seen him pummeling his mates to death, watching from behind fiery explosions. Why he wanted terraformers no longer mattered to him.
“Kurgave Bandhugh,” he growled, gloved fists clenching tightly.
The Force licked at his anger, beckoning vengeance — dead men are the best enemies. It fueled his steps as his stalk turned into a sprint. Kurgave followed suit, shedding the briefcase to pull out a serrated vibroblade. They raised their arms, prepared to strike the other down when two shots rang out.
And Kurgave stumbled. He gave a look of surprise, touching the burnt hole in his side — a second in his shoulder — before collapsing to the ground. Tisto’s gaze darted from the body to the outstretched arm of his fellow Kiffar. She gave him a look, face scraped up but still, a grin wore on.
“Finish yer sloppy seconds later,” Diy panted, pulling herself up to her feet and limping over to the briefcase.
“You killed him!” Tisto exclaimed, his teeth gritting as all that rage within had nowhere else to go.
Green dreads bounced as she rolled her eyes. Walking up to him, Diy flipped her pistol around offering the hilt towards him, an act she doesn’t do lightly. “He’s not dead yet.”
Tisto stared at her and the pistol. Finally, he grasped the weapon and turned back towards Kurgave.
“Right, point it at ‘im and pull the trigger!” she called over her shoulder as she unlatched the briefcase.
“I know how to fracking,” he pulled the trigger, “use a gun!”
“Sure ya do, Green Cheeks. Can we go now?” Diy whined playfully, showing him the transformer. Lucky choice. “I want to get paid and soak in the bath. Wanna join?”
Tisto stared firmly down at her as she leaned in, keeping herself a couple of inches from touching him as asked. He reached out and grabbed the briefcase. “No.”
“Boo, yer so fun,” she drawled sarcastically stretching her aching limbs as they walked through Chute Town leaving the slew of bodies behind them.
Positive Takeaways
Your characterization through dialogue was excellent in this post as was your use of emote adjectives in those sentences.
Can Be Improved
You had some issues with possessives in this post. Fools should be “fool’s” in this sentence.
The passage of time is a little unclear in the ending of the post. You had Diy shoot a soldier, then Tisto shouted his demand and the soldiers were still confused at that point? This isn’t a realism error per se but it did give me pause. Soldiers are trained to react to incoming fire almost reflexively, they wouldn’t have been standing around after the first shot was fired. It’s also not the best storytelling to portray your adversaries in such an incompentent light. In future coop matches try to think of how to create real stakes for your characters in each post.