“But you're right, so how do we get in?” Locke asked.
Sanguinius grinned and winked at his friend. “Let’s just say that my time spent at the Shadow Academy teaching all those headstrong Sith Lord wannabes wasn’t ill spent.”
Locke frowned slightly and crossed his arms as he questioned whether Sanguinius was bluffing or if he actually had a way to get in. “I think you’ve spent too much time around Macron and his crazy side has rubbed off on you.”
“Hey now!” the Entar protested, “Macron isn’t crazy, he’s energetic and full of vigour.”
The Ragnosian merely raised an eyebrow in response.
Sanguinius took it as a cue to continue. “Two must lift these stones, no more, no less.”
“Huh?” Locke stared at him.
“It’s an old quote I remembered from my time teaching about the history of the Sith Lords.” the Defender replied.
“And you think it relates to this place?”
“I could be wrong.” Sanguinius shrugged and gesticulated towards the pyramid. “What’s the worst that can happen?” He smiled and winked at his friend.
Locke sighed and shook his head, “Now you’ve done it.” he moved away slightly from the Anaxsi. “You’ve gone and jinxed us.”
“If I have, then you get first dibs on what we find.”
“Now you’re just begging for us to get killed.” Locke joked. “The only thing we’ll find is dust, dust and more dust.”
“How will dust kill us?” Sang replied mockingly.
Locke groaned in response and shook his head. “Come on, then. Let’s try and open these doors.”
The two Sadowans turned to face the temple, their minds reaching out with grasping tendrils of the Force, seeking a way into the forbidding Sith Temple. The Dark Side saturated the jet black stones, making them seem ice cold to the Entar, but boiling hot to Locke, who was not afraid of the Dark Side, as Sanguinius was.
The pair continued to concentrate and probed the entrance and surrounding archway for a way to enter. Locke gasped as he found something of interest, a kernel of darkness that beckoned him in further. The Ragnosian seized it and poured all of his will and strength into it, determined to find a way into the temple and seize its secrets for the Clan.
Sanguinius grimaced as his mind wandered over the temple’s entranceway. The Professor had spent years teaching about the Sith Lords and their past achievements, but Malachor had not been a high point for them. Empires crumbled and fell, yet their mark was left upon the galaxy. The Entar usually avoided drawing upon the Dark Side, as he felt the power was hollow and corruptive, having seen too many of the Sith of the Brotherhood fall due to their ideas of grandeur. The temple however, cared little for what Sanguinius thought; a beacon of the Dark Side, rejecting the Light.
The Augur drew tentatively on the Dark Side at first, a small stream that turned into a torrent as it blazed within him. The hollow power burned away at the Entar, who sought to unleash it outwards towards the temple. There, a second kernel of the Dark Side just within the entranceway. Sanguinius focused his new found power on it and it reacted, just as its counterpart did under Locke’s focus.
The stone doors began to grind open, the noise of rock upon rock was deafening, the sound echoing across the empty caldera.
Sanguinius attempted to dam the torrent of the Dark Side within him, cutting off the source and expelling the remains of it out into their surroundings. He panted heavily, sweat dripping from him as he fell to one knee.
Locke was there, hand on his shoulder as his concern for his friend manifested. “Are you okay, brother?” the Sadow enquired.
“I’m... I’m okay.” Sanguinius replied between panting breaths. “It’ll pass, but it doesn’t get any easier.”
“Why do you torture yourself like this?” Locke asked, “Why do you turn away from the font of power?”
“Because I’m afraid, Locke.” the Entar replied. “Afraid of what I might become. Who I might hurt.”
He looked up at his friend, who offered a hand up to Sanguinius. “I can’t risk it. I won’t allow myself to hurt anymore of those I love.”
Locke grinned in response, “Thanks for the confession, old friend, but I think our friendship can survive a few bumps on the head, so to say.”
Sanguinius shook his head in resignation as Locke helped him up and the pair looked towards the darkness beckoning them within the temple.
“Shall we find what we came to seek?” Locke gestured towards the archway. He unclasped his lightsaber from his belt and ignited it, “We really should have bought some flares or other lighting equipment.”
“The benefit of hindsight.” the Defender replied, exhausted from the Dark Side raging within him only moments before. He too unclasped one of his lightsabers and ignited it, a blue light warred with an acid yellow, bathing the stone in a strange kind of greenish light.
The pair looked at each other one more time and nodded to fortify themselves. Whatever they found down here, they would be ready to face it together.
The two Sadowans stalked forth, refusing to be tied down to a snail’s pace in case there were traps. The Augurs had enough experience to see a trap coming, having visited several other Sith-related locales over the years. Their main concern was guard creatures and spooky Sith ghosts that liked to mess with enterprising archaeologists.
Sanguinius and Locke considered themselves amateur archaeologists, rather than the grave robbers they truly were. Whatever artifacts they found always wound up in their possession, rather than in the museum where they belonged.
After 2 very uneventful hours travelling through the pyramid, the pair called a stop and rested briefly.
“This is getting pretty boring now, Locke.” Sanguinius looked around at the empty corridor.
“Yes, yes.” Locke replied, exasperatingly.
“I still have dibs on the first thing we find.” the Entar joked. “As I didn’t jinx us.”
“Didn’t jinx us? I’d say not finding anything yet is a jinx.” the Ragnosian rolled his eyes and took up a martial stance with his lightsaber.
“What are you doing that for?” Sanguinius asked.
“Because the next words out of your mouth are going to be yet another challenge for first dibs and I’m waiting for them.” Locke winked.
“Oh.” Sanguinius replied, “First one to get a potential hit wins?”
Locke charged forwards, his acid yellow blade arching through the darkness towards the Entar. “Done!” he shouted.
Sanguinius quickly gestured, and a barrier sprung up to deflect the swing. The Augur scrambled away and prepared himself to face his best friend. “You really do want first dibs.” he grinned.
The Arcanist simply laughed in response and began to probe Sanguinius’ defences. The pair both knew that the Dakhani was better at defending than attacking, being a master of Soresu. But it was simply a matter of whether he grew bored enough to let Locke through and get a potential hit or he moved into the attack.
Locke knew Sanguinius well enough that that moment would come soon, and he had no intention of losing. As his lightsaber lashed out, being deflected and parried by his fellow Sadow, Locke drew upon the Dark Side, and knelt to punch the ground with his free hand. A wave of telekinetic force erupted outwards and drove Sanguinius stumbling back to land flat on his behind.
“Oh, damn it.” Sanguinius complained, “You’ve gone and ruined my dinner.” The Entar was sat in a mess of his ration pack, having exploded underneath him from the weight that had collided with it.
Locke began to laugh as he saw his friend trying in vain to wipe the wasted food off his trousers.
“I guess I’ve got first dibs then?” he questioned.
Sanguinius simply looked up at him and groaned, “Fine, but what about my dinner?”
Locke paused for a moment and then volunteered a response. “Dibs?”
Positive Takeaways
This post had fantastic prose and presented a smooth reading experience. You integrated the character personalities and their histories well into the story without being too obtrusive.
Can Be Improved
While this post technically had conflict and physical combat between the characters, the action was barely present. Even with a race premise you could have extended the action a little more.
You had a lot of unnecessary capitalization like “The Collective” instead of “the Collective.”