She tore the knife from the twitching hunter, several fresh orifices ventilating its insides while green blood pooled around its body. The ejaculation about her ship had caught the attention of Strong’s assailants almost as much as the Dosh death keen. The Trandoshan tugging at his leg hesitated on seeing the red woman approaching, green gore dripping from her blade. Its partner hurriedly growled out something, likely trying to refocus their efforts, but the lapse in attention allowed the Chiss an opening. Pivoting on his unhindered leg, Strong slipped from the distracted Trandoshan’s catch-pole and leaned in toward the one hooked in his arm.
The distracted Trandoshan’s attention was suddenly torn between the Zeltron and his compatriot. This was soon remedied.
“Hiyaaaaah!”
The scream tore through the grunts and groans of the melee as Qyreia leaped through the air, knife held high as she came at the skittish hunter. However, while it may not have been a large creature compared to some, it was certainly not small either, sporting the same stocky frame as other reptilians of their race. The merc was thus caught in the chest mid-leap and, with a sweep of the Trandoshan’s arm, was flung into a nearby tree, luckily bare of the large spines protruding from so much of the wood.
With only one opponent to contend with — at least for the moment — the tables had turned in the Chiss’ favor. He rapidly advanced, with the one Trandoshan still hooking him backpedaling to maintain the grip on his arm. With that, though, the reptilian’s grip slackened as it overcompensated for Strong’s maneuvers; a grip that the Chiss warrior promptly tested by halting in his tracks and throwing his arm back.
The pole slipped free of the Trandoshan’s grip with only minor resistance as it realized, too late, its error.
Still hesitant despite having thrown the Zeltron so easily, the other hunter saw his compatriot struggle and then swiftly be outmatched, with the big blue man now in possession of the hefty polearm. Strong could see the inexperience in the creature’s stance — likely its first hunt — even as it lashed out with its own catch-pole. He responded by spinning about and knocking the attempt aside with his own newly-acquired armament, only to have the other renew its assault with the knife in its belt.
“Miss Arronen?!” Strong grunted out as he parried the knife. “Are you alright?!”
As if in answer, he saw the flash of red as the Zeltron charged into the scene from his peripheries with the spear of her previous foe in-hand. Her target, the more skittish of the hunters that had previously thrown her aside, turned in response to the outcry, just enough for the spearhead to bury into its hip at a shallow angle. The Trandoshan lashed out with his catch-pole, only for Qyreia to slip beneath the strike, yanking the spear out in the process.
While the red woman danced with her opponent, Strong’s red eyes caught the more seasoned hunter drawing the blaster from its holster, with clear intent to avail its compatriot of the smaller prey.
“Remember who your opponent is!” Strong swiped at the reptile’s arm, knocking the gun to the ground, and breaking both the heavy pole and the hunter’s arm with his knucklers in the process. While the Trandoshan struggled against the pain, the Chiss surged forward, knocking his opponent aside with a mighty right hook. “Qyreia!”
The break in his normal decorum was reason enough to grab the Zeltron’s attention. Seeing the hulking Chiss stoop in the course of his strike, grab the pistol, and toss it to her brought a certain fire to her gut.
Her opponent was too slow to intercept, and in an instant, the merc deftly caught the handgun, spinning it in her hand into a proper grip. Without skipping a beat, she extended her arm and fired, dropping the Garmis progeny’s foe with a pair of smoking holes to its chest. Then she turned the gun on the one she’d been so avidly fighting. A wild, devious grin crossed her features, and even the Chiss worried at what she might do.
“Alright schutta. You’re gonna tell me where my ship is.”
The Trandoshan hunter was clearly frightened, but only replied in Dosh.
“I am not sure he knows how to speak Basic, Miss Arronen,” Strong said as he approached, still somewhat put off by the whole ordeal, but glad it was over.
“Then maybe he’ll understand this.” She took a big breath belted out what was clearly Shyriiwook, “Tell me where my karking ship is or I’m gonna take out your reptilian gonads, shove one down your throat, one up your ass, and see how long it takes before they meet in the middle!”
Despite that Qyreia was hardly of any stature or depth of voice to sound intimidating, the Trandoshan cringed nonetheless, dropping to its knees and hissing frantically in Dosh. Clearly, this one had had enough for one day.
“How did you know it would understand the Wookiee tongue?”
“Because I paid attention in history class?” she croaked, her throat clearly throttled by the violent Wookiee-speak. “Trandoshans and Wooks have bad blood between them.” She narrowed her eyes at their prisoner. “Something about hunting them for sport.”
The prisoner only spoke more frantically, pointing eastward — or at least what passed for east on the moon — in the same direction her ship had flown in the course of their fight. That left Qyreia with a difficult choice: kill the hunter and prevent him warning his fellow hunters, or do the less vile thing and let him live. She’d spent enough time with Grot, the sole Trandoshan member of Arcona and Galeres — at least that she was aware of — to hear him rambling on about the Scorekeeper and points to know this lizard was in a precarious cultural position.
Strong and the prisoner both watched warily as the Zeltron fidgeted with the dials on the blaster. “I can imagine what you are thinking, Miss Arronen. This one has acted dishonorably, but I am also not especially fond of killing the helpless.”
Qyreia nodded, finished playing with the dials, and leveled the gun at the creature’s head. It had hardly a second to screech in Dosh before she fired, much to the Chiss’ surprise; even more so when she fired again in its chest. Strong seemed beside himself, unable to articulate his own feelings on the matter, but attempting to remain stoic.
“Relax,” she said consolingly as she re-dialed the pistol. “I put it on a stun setting. A heavy stun, but… yeah, he’s not dead. I think.” It seemed to console her blue companion, if only just.
They collected the salvageable weapons, largely relegated to the knives and one good spear, and moved on after finding little else of practical value on the bodies. There was only one indicator left to them: go east.
So, keeping an eye on the general rotation of the moon against that of the planet and sun, they walked at a steady pace, making sure to not over-exert themselves. Two fights in, with plenty of cuts and bruises, and with no water to really speak of, they were at a loss for supplies. None of the hunters had brought water with them when they landed. Either they thought the hunt would be short, and thus did not need the supplies, or they had built up their internal stores prior to departing for the forest. Both options left the Arconans in something of a dilemma.
Their relaxed exertions paid off. By nightfall, they were footsore, but otherwise not completely lacking for energy. Strong was subtly excited by the prospect of greater glory in combat, while Qyreia only grew more and more invigorated as they inexorably neared the Katurno’s location. As the sun dimmed against the horizon behind them, and the planet’s reflected light likewise gone, they were met by the sounds of hisses and trills of Dosh speech, and the flickering light of several fire pits. Qyreia and Strong crouched low and approached from the concealment of the twisting, thorn-ridden trees, in an effort to see what they were truly up against. Even when the hulking Chiss tried to speak, his Zeltron companion instinctively covered his mouth, knowing his default volume was less-than-stealthy.
Several campfires were dispersed throughout the small clearing, with stylized lean-tos sheltering the dozen or so Trandoshan hunters huddled about the dancing flames. Most were armed with a bladed weapon of some sort — a sword or knife being the most common — with spears and clubs intermixed among the population. Judging by the intricacy of the tent patterns and adornments, only the most senior had firearms of any kind, with pistols going to the experienced hunters, and the elites toting rifles of various makes and models. The better the hunter, the better the gear.
Situated on a small dais, in clear view to all the hunters and the two intended prey, were the arms and armor of both Arconans: a blaster pistol, rifle, greathammer, and a large set of armor that none of the Trandoshans could wear without a good deal of modification.
A few whispered words and an amalgam of hand signals was all Strong had of the mercenary’s plan. It was simple, it was bold, and if it didn’t work it would likely get them killed or badly maimed.
When they confidently strolled out of the forest, brazenly displaying their scavenged weaponry, the hunters seemed momentarily aghast. Qyreia tried to ignore the Garmis Hammer’s potent presence.
“I want my ship back! Now!”
In a flash, the hunters rushed for their weapons. The duo had anticipated this. Strong rushed the nearest troupe, toppling them with a near-comical clotheslining with the spear haft, while the Zeltron shot in rapid succession, striking down two of the blaster-armed reptilians before they could even draw their firearms. The less experienced hunters hesitated, prompting a wave of pacifism among the ranks, until even the hunter chief had to settle back into his seat in acknowledgement. The hunt was over.
“Wherre arre the otherrsz?” he snarled in rough Basic. “The hunterrsz drropped into the forreszt.”
“I’ll tell you where they’re not.” Qyreia approached the chief, tipping the muzzle of the pistol at him pointedly. “Safe.”
“Miss Arronen. I believe we can board the ship without further issue.” Strong’s words were firm but, for the Zeltron, they were an admonition. They had won. There was no need for further retribution, even despite his disdain for the thus-far dishonorable conduct of the Trandoshans.
The Zeltron clicked her tongue, circling around the lead hunter toward the dais, slinging her weapons and covering Strong so that he could do the same. While she covered their approach up the boarding ramp, the Chiss entered the vessel with mild gusto, ensuring there would be no stowaways upon their takeoff. Once she heard his “all-clear,” she offered a sarcastic salute with the pistol, tossing it to the ground in favor of her own.
“Been fun, schuttas. Don’t recommend trying anything. We’ll have our guns pointed at this camp until we’ve hit hyperspace.”
The boarding ramp closed slowly, her gun aimed at the assembly until there was little more than a sliver of view. Strong was waiting for her in the cockpit, hand resting on the remote controls for the laser cannon turrets. With an appreciative smile, she settled into her seat and prepped the ship for takeoff. Despite the short time actually spent on the moon as prey for the Trandoshans, it felt like it had been a long time since she had seen her Katurno and held its controls.
The engines roared to life — hardly the whine of the inexperienced pilot that controlled her as part of the hunters’ arsenal — and they shot through the atmosphere and into the void of space in a hurry. Before long, they were enveloped by the white streaks of hyperspace. Only then did they both finally relax.
“What now, Miss Arronen?”
She stared out at the comforting dance of light just beyond the viewport. “I’m thinking food, water, nap, shower. Not necessarily in that order.”
“I like the sound of that.”
What Went Well
The story in this post was well-paced and genuinely interesting to read. It was easy to get a good idea of both characters’ personalities despite not being familiar with either of them, which is always a good sign.
Room for Growth
You had a handful of minor syntax errors; one paragraph referenced a “shock ballplayer” instead of a “shockball player” (which could very well have been a spellcheck/autocorrect issue), there was a “was if” in place of a “was as if”, and “stow away” is a verb while “stowaway” is a noun.
Story-wise, the only hiccup was that you ran afoul of the Turel Rule. I personally think this post was perfectly interesting without any combat in it, but ACC gotta ACC.
Suggestions
Just the usual “more proofreading” and “more combat” lines, while knowing full well that you didn’t really need me to tell you either of those things. :P