A flurry of strikes. A shower of sparks. Two lightsabers flashed and danced around the two men wielding them.
Marick was not one who was prone to fits of anger or rage. Everything he did was calculated and surgical. But when he saw the one thing he had allowed himself to feel an attachment to fall into the sand and become buried, something snapped. It was crisp and clear, like stepping on a twig in a snow-covered forest. It echoed in his mind.
He moved quickly around the Zabrak, moving to outflank him, strike, then move again. He was quicker than the Sith. More agile. But his enemy seemed to have a honed knowledge of combat. Where he couldn’t block with his saber, he used the Force to augment his defense. So their dance continued, Marick maneuvering and Karran defending. That was when he saw it. His eyes scanned the Zabrak’s face, looking for tells in his next move, and there it was. For the first time since meeting him, which granted, was no longer than six minutes and twenty-three seconds, the Sith was smiling. Karran was a man built for battle. He did not fight because he was forced to. He sought it out because it was his true home.
Their sabers locked. Karran had brought his lightsaber down in both hands, and Marick had blocked it. Unable to parry or disengage, he was forced to plant his feet in the sand. The Zabrak’s muscles flexed, rivulets of sweat running down his biceps and across his tattoos. Marick had maintained his dagger palmed in his offhand, while wielding his saber in his right. Karran had not seen the dagger yet, and was now locked in with him, saber to saber. Now was his opportunity to gain the upper hand.
As Karran pushed his crimson blade down toward the Shadow’s unmarred face, there was a flash of movement from his opponent’s left hand. A cutting sensation sliced through the underside of the Zabrak’s right bicep, followed by a cold, numbing feeling that slowly spread through his arm. The Knight broke the engagement and stepped back. Holding his lightsaber in his right hand, he reached up with his left to touch the area where he had felt the blade cut in and pulled it away. Blood was smeared on the fingertips. The numbness in his arm continued to spread down his arm until it reached his right hand. Pins and needles stabbed into his entire limb as he lost feeling and strength in his arm.
He quickly took the lightsaber in his left hand and adjusted position. He turned his left side toward Marick and once again returned his blade to the prepared position.
“Poison? I should have expected as much from one of your reputation.” There was no disdain in the Zabrak’s voice, only a hint of disappointment as he regarded the dagger in Marick’s left hand.
“I had expected it to spread further and faster.”
Karran took a deep breath to center himself. “I apologize for removing your token. I hope you understand it was an accident.”
Marick blinked again. Apologize? Accident? Was he hearing Val’teo correctly? What kind of Sith was he? His research had not led him to believe that he was the type to do this. He was a Sith, and a warrior. Was he attempting to throw off his focus? Mindgames are not uncommon among Sith, but this Zabrak did not seem the type. That Tir’eivra, however, was a different story. These thoughts raced through the former Voice’s mind like a ship jumping to hyperspeed. He offered no more words to his enemy. He sheathed the dagger, its utility exhausted at its moment of revelation. With his hand behind his back, his fingers nimbly reached into a pouch and drew another dagger, this one perfectly balanced for throwing.
In an instant, Marick reached his arm out toward the Sith, allowing the small blade to leave his hand and fly through the air. The Zabrak moved to knock the blade away, but relying on his offhand proved difficult. As he slashed through the dagger, he overestimated his movement and lost his balance for a moment. Marick took this opportunity to dash forward, once again swinging at Val’teo; this time he sought to wound his leg. His strike landed true, exactly where he wanted it. The tip of the blade cut and burned through his left thigh, just above the crook of his knee. This brought the muscled Zabrak down to his knees. Just a flesh wound, but a painful one.
Karran roared as the lightsaber blade cut into the meat of his thigh. He struggled to maintain a grip on his weapon as he tried to turn to face the Shadow who had already passed by him and was preparing for another strike. He held his blade up toward the half-Hapan. The beast inside him clawed at his gut. It was desperate to get out. To brutally beat this enemy into the sand and leave him for the carrion birds to pick away at.
His hand shook. The red blade retracted into the emitter. The hilt dropped into the sand. Karran hung his head. Many times, he had been beaten. Ruka, Sera, Alaisy had all beaten him. But for the first time, he was defeated. Still, though, the beast clawed. It roared like a dragon in the dune sea of his homeworld.
Marick strode toward the kneeling Zabrak. He looked down at him and saw something familiar. A simple leather thong around his neck. His gaze followed the strip down to what it held. A carved piece of bone with a symbol engraved into it. It was a line, with three points that rose off of it, getting taller as they spread from the center. The Shadow racked his brain for every symbol he had ever seen and was familiar with. He took it in his hand and took it away from the Sith’s chest.
“What is this?” his voice grew more curious than cold and calculating.
“A symbol. The last reminder I have of my family and my clan.”
Marick regarded it and straightened his posture, now looking down his nose at his opponent. With a quick pull, he broke the leather strap and threw the token into the sand in the distance. He held his violet blade at Karran’s shoulder, in line with his neck.
When Karran felt the leather break, it was as if all sound became muffled. It was like the aftermath of being too close to an explosion. He heard the wind, but it was overpowered by the rhythmic thump of his two hearts pounding in his ears. A ringing pierced his eardrums that quickly grew into a bestial roar. In an instant, the beast inside of him broke out of its prison. The fire that raged inside of his chest burned out of control. His vision narrowed into pinpoints as left arm drew back and he summoned a wave of telekinetic force and violently shoved Marick. The Shadow flew back, his lightsaber slipping from his grip as his body unceremoniously hit the dirt and tumbled across the sandy surface.
Karran stood, his wounded leg shook at the weight he put on it, but his fury pushed him on. His twin hearts pounded. His body flooded with adrenaline and rage. His Zabraki heritage held him on his feet. He reached out toward the prone half-Hapan and focused his rage and imagined the lithe man in his grip. He channeled his power in the Force and lifted the assassin up and summoned him back to his grip.
Marick struggled in the grip as he was forced down to his knees. He looked up at the Sith and where previously he had seen soft, light brown eyes, he now saw bloodshot whites and burning gold irises. Karran took the Elder’s hair in his left hand, kneeled down in front of them, and reared back his head before driving his horned forehead into the unmarked face of Marick. Over, and over again, he drove their heads together, until the Shadow went limp in his grip.
As Val’teo’s vision returned to normal, he looked down at his hands, which still held Marick in his grip. In a moment of shock, he let go, letting the man drop into the sand. The Zabrak backed away. His chest heaved, and his wounded leg gave out from under him.
When Marick awoke, he was laid out on a cloak that wasn’t his. A fire had been made, and he saw a kettle on it, its form curious, like that of a dragon. On the other side of the fire sat a familiar Zabrak, his wounds bound in makeshift bandages. Then he felt his face. It was suddenly as if he had been clotheslined by a durasteel beam while riding a swoop bike at full speed. He raised his hand to his face and after a quick jolt of additional pain, decided against further investigation. He looked down to the ground beside him and noted a completely used bacta canister.
Karran, now that his former opponent was awake, stood up, favoring his wounded leg. He limped to the fire and gingerly knelt down beside it. He took the teapot from over the fire and poured its contents into two cups. Once again, he stood and limped over to where Marick was laying. The Sith knelt down in the sand, placed a cup in front of the former Voice, and set the other beside himself. He then bowed deeply, touching his horns to the ground and stayed like that for a moment before he spoke.
“Master Marick, I must offer my deepest apologies for my actions. I have little to offer, but I hope you will accept this tea which I cultivated in my own garden. I know it is a paltry offering, but at the moment it is all I have besides these.” The Zabrak sat up before taking out his lightsaber and placing it next to the cup before he bowed again. “I offer my lightsaber as a symbol that I will not take up my weapon against you again.” Once again the Zabrak sat up and from inside of his robes presented a tuft of fur that once hung around Marick’s neck before he returned his gaze to the ground.
Marick blinked.
Positive Takeaways
Atmospheric, certainly not lacking in action, and gave a pretty clear reason behind the fight.
Can Be Improved
You had a handful of spelling errors (Afterall vs After all, Waiver vs Waver, Led vs Lead). The after all bit did require a dive into the dictionaries to confirm, but it’s not grammatically correct.
This is a very clear cut (heh) use of Trakata, almost textbook. I applaud the way it was written, the effort and cleanliness of the action. I’ll even use it as an example in the future for people who ask about Trakata. Unfortunately, you don’t have that feat on your sheet, so I had to ding you for Realism here.