And that rage was what fueled his next action. As the sparks simmered into nothingness the Weapons Specialist let out an unholy roar and activated the Imperial Super Commando Jetpack strapped to his back. He soared towards the Force Disciple with the anger of a hungry rancor.
The Force whispered it's warnings to the Battleteam Leader and just before Kano had the chance to collide with him he sheathed his lightsaber, activated his own jetpack and leapt fifteen feet above him and hovered to the other side where Kano was moments prior. From his elevated position he withdrew Oppression, gripped his blaster rifle in both hands and began to release a clip of laser fire at his Deathwatch insubordinate who spun to face him from the landing platform below.
However, the harsh weather and storms of Kamino made it difficult to aim his weapon, especially in mid air. He landed after only a few moments and continued to fire his weapon, though due to a combination of his poor accuracy as a result of the rough weather he was finding it difficult to strike him. What few blows did land were simply shrugged off by the natural strength and durability of Kano's Beskar armor.
The pure Beskar wearing Mandalorian began to approach the Force Disciple, he reached within just a few short metres of Appius, caring very little for the blaster fire the Sorcerer was attempting to hit him with. He drew upon Merciless Glory once again and aimed his weapon straight at the Force Disciples Mandalorian visor.
Though as quickly as he did that the weapon was knocked directly out of his hand by what felt like a strong cross punch to his wrist. Pain entered the joint, making it limp and numb for a few moments before feeling returned to it again. In front of him stood Appius with an outstretched palm aimed exactly where his blaster was in his hand only a second prior.
"You call me a Jetii. (Jedi) Aruetyc. (Not Mandalorian) Well, I say you are the real Aruetyc here." This time it was Appius' turn to point at Kano. His tone of voice had suddenly become very confrontational.
"You take a ship without permission and go off to hunt a bounty not approved by House Wren or Clan Vizsla. Why? Because you are adenn (merciless), a demagolka (monster), hurnami. (honourless) You preach to me saying I wear our armor and yet do not know our ways? You couldn't be more wrong!" Lightning struck and thundered around them as Appius' voice pierced through it.
"I'm proud of where I've come from, both sides of it. Manda'yaim (Mandalore) and the Living Force flow through my veins. But what about you? What honour do you have? I adhere to the Resol'nare (Six actions) and you clearly don't." Appius looked back at the decapitated and mutilated head of the Kaminoan Kano walked out with before their confrontation started.
"I wonder what Mirdala would think of you right now…"
One would not have to be Force sensitive to feel the atmosphere on the landing platform thicken in an instant. Kano's hands twitched at his side and his breathing became deep and faint growls could be heard coming from behind his visor.
"Kano… I."
Appius never finished his sentence. Kano's arms flung forward and the Mandalorian Vambrace on his right arm activated to release a thin graphing line. It whirled around and tightened around his lower body before Kano pulled with all his might. Appius landed on his back, his jetpack doing very little to cushion his fall.
"You… laosr! (scum!) You dare mention her in front of me!" Kano spat with venom as he pulled the Sorcerer closer to him. He raised his right boot, intending to stomp it into the Sorcerer's solar plexus but in response Appius activated his own Mandalorian Vambrace and a flamethrower emerged, engulfing the standing Mandalorian almost entirely.
Positive Takeaways
Overall I really liked the set-up. It wasn't anything super fancy or complicated, just Kano stealing a ship to go run a bounty and Appius showing up to punish him. A clear-cut conflict that neatly establishes the reason for both of them to be there and fight each other.
The secondary conflict also really interests me. There's sort of a Mando culture war going on, where each side of the fight has a different idea of what it means to be Mandalorian. Personally I find that sort of ideological conflict fascinating.
Can be Improved
There were a bunch of minor, repeated syntax mistakes.
I appreciate the translations for the Mando words, but I'm not certain parentheses were the best way to work them into the story. Sort of broke up the flow of the dialogue. In any case, if you are going to do direct parenthetical translations, you should only provide the translation once to avoid repeating information and breaking up the story. You provide the translation for "aruetyc" twice.
One plot point that really puzzled me is what the heck happened to Kano's ship? Appius says that he took it back, and presumably he came alone to get Kano. So like an hour before the fight he would have had to break into the ship, fly it over to a different landing pad, then run back and wait in the rain for Kano to show up. A bit of a silly way to get a mysterious entrance. The ship could have easily been left on the pad, would have added a little color to the venue and something to fight around.