She felt the lightning before it came, the Force screaming out a warning in the form of a painful wave of static, coursing through her musculature and jolting her into motion. She instinctively snapped her blade upwards just in time.
Hissing tongues of cobalt energy burst forth from Karran’s fingers, the harsh blue glow searing into Sera’s eyes. But they stopped short of her flesh, locking around her saber’s golden blade. Destabilized plasma burned into life, sparks flying, steaming in the swamp’s muggy air. The light bathed the two Zabraks’ faces; stormy blue and sunny yellow, clashing, swirling and melting into a pure, blinding white.
Their gazes met in unison, icy blue locking onto virulent green eyes that had once been brown, soft, full of life and vigor. She thought she saw of flash of them, the old color shining warmly out at her. But when she reached out with the Force, trying to find him, they retreated, returning to the evil, emotionless pits. With a snarl of pain and rage, Karran released the lightning and struck, his crimson saber burning through the air as night fell on Dathomir.
Blade against blade, Karran had her outmatched. His strikes came like the blows of a hammer onto an anvil, hard and steady, breaking her meager defenses apart. Her only saving grace was that he was exhausted, his breath ragged and torturous. The lightning had taken a good deal out of him. But that was only good if she was trying to kill him, which she wasn’t. She struck three blows for every one of his, but it wasn’t enough. She tried everything; wheeling around his guard, cutting chunks out of his armor, trying to dodge or roll or leap. Anything to get to the chest behind him. But there just wasn’t enough room.
Still, she persevered. Gathering her strength for a final attempt, Sera poured everything that she had into her core and legs. She dropped into a loose, ready stance, her feet wide and her eyes on Karran’s saber. She darted forward. He swung, a sweeping, two-handed blow that would have bisected her at the hip.She quickly dropped, sliding in the thick mud of the swamp. The blood-red blade passed over her horns by an inch.
That left her behind him, finally, with an opening on the chest. Scrambling to her feet, Sera brought her saber up even as the witch’s ghostly image coalesced before her once more. The zabrak snarled and thrust her saber forward, aiming for the woman’s heart—
—only for her blade to glance off of a barrier that she couldn’t see.
Sera’s hearts fell as an icy tide of cold washed over her. Her attack had left a mark, a glowing crack in the invisible dome, but beyond that there was nothing. She attacked again, stabbing down with the dagger in her off-hand. Nothing...nothing, nothing, nothing. The ghost of the witch cackled and spoke, her voice echoing like a yawning grave in Sera’s mind.
”He’s mine, flesh. He was meant to be. You will be too. I will let him wake, once he has killed you. I will let him see what he has done, as your blood dries on his hands. His mind will break, flesh, and I will see that he never leaves.”
A grip closed over Sera’s throat, lifting her into the air; choking, strangling, crushing. This time, the touch was all too real; not an invisible vice, but Karran’s hand, squeezing down hard. Her vision flashing white, the zabrak twisted in her friend’s grip and did the one thing that she could think of. Her dagger was still clutched in her off-hand; it was her last resort. Without a target, she flailed, slicing backwards.
Karran grunted in pain, and his grip released. Sera felt a warm fluid spray onto the back of her neck as she scrambled away, clambering to her feet. Turning, she saw the wound that she had inflicted. Her friend’s left ring-finger had been cleanly severed, dark blood seeping from the wound.
It didn’t stop him for long. As Sera watched, her friend straightened and flexed the wounded hand. The blackened sockets around his eyes had grown darker as the venom that had poisoned his mind spread outward, creating a gangrenous rot on his features. Zabraki resilience was a double-edged sword. Even as it allowed her to keep fighting after being half-throttled by a hulking juggernaut, it also dulled the pain of Karran’s wound, driving him forward, even missing his damned finger.
Extending his good hand, Karran pulled his weapon back through the air, blood smearing across the hilt as the ruddy blade hissed to life. He raised it up, preparing to land a killing blow.
This was where anyone else might have cut and run. She could have bolted into the swamp, called the Voidbreaker to send reinforcements, and waited for help. When they came, she could return and see him freed… but she wouldn’t leave him here. She couldn’t leave him here. He was one of her closest friends, her Captain, her family. She refused to abandon him to one of the witches that had haunted their childhood nightmares.
When Karran’s strike finally came down, it passed through open air. Sera had dodged backwards, circling around her target. Karran followed her closely, putting his back to the chest. The green, glowing eyes never left her face
The smaller zabrak squared her jaw. She was going to destroy that damned karking witch. But, that would require a change of tactics. It had already been demonstrated that she couldn’t just run around him. She had to go through him, put him out of commission long enough to destroy the chest. The thought pained her, but she didn’t see what other choice she had.
The two stood still for a moment, watching each other. Sera inhaled and released, her core tightening, her stance spreading wide and loose. Slowly, she rolled her neck, back and forth. Her grip on her weapons grew tighter; saber in one hand, dagger in the other. Again, she took a slow breath, in and out. Her mind opened, calling to the Force. Seconds passed, time flowing as thick and slow as the soupy fog, before energy flowed into her, driving out the weariness in her musculature and filling her with strength.
Ancestors, help us both.
With that, Sera charged. This time she didn’t try to dodge around Karran. Instead, she barreled into him straight on, her blade blurring through the air. Sera pushed inwards, shoving aside Karran’s sweeping blow to push inside his guard. A Force-amplified kick to her friend’s left knee drove him downwards, but she hadn’t won yet. Twisting his body, he brought his saber back around, angling right for a crushing blow that would have taken Sera’s head off at her shoulders.
She felt the attack coming, a twitch-instinct raising her right-hand to stop the blow. It would have been pure folly, if it wasn’t for the glowing shield that issued forth from her gauntlet at the very last moment.
The saber smashed into the barrier and rebounded hard, recoiling out of Karran’s grip. Snarling, the maddened zabrak clenched the now empty hand into a fist, curving upward into a hammer blow that connected with Sera’s side. She grunted in pain, the shock driving her breath from her lungs as her dagger skittered from her right hand. But it pulled him off balance. He was already on his knees and she was not going to let him get up again. She countered instantly, pressing in for a cutting blow across his chin. She then spun right and planted an elbow in the center of his face, knocking him onto his back.
The blows barely seemed to pain him. Even as hot blood poured down his face from the new split in his nose, Karran flexed his core, driving both legs upwards to spear into her gut, pushing her backwards. That gave him time, his free hand rising. There was only a moment of warning before Sera felt a vice begin to close around her throat once more. Her own hand rose, taking aim, even as her vision blurred...
The saber dart shot out with a sharp hiss, digging deep into Karran’s throat. The invisible stranglehold began to fade, before dropping away altogether. Her friend’s gauntleted hand sank to the mud. The venom acted fast, it seemed. But, she wasn’t going to take any chances. Choking the muggy air into her lungs, Sera knelt. The grappling line in her vambraces would do well for a hog-tie, on the off-chance that the larger zabrak awoke.
Panting, Sera stumbled backwards, teeth baring in a snarl. Her boots sloshed heavily through the marsh, past the bodies of the dead mercenaries and the wreckage of her own battle. The chest seemed almost lonely. Where the witch had once been, there was now only empty air, the mark of Sera’s saber marking the invisible barrier. Perhaps she had retreated, sensing the end coming? The ghost of Dathomir had made a grievous mistake, afterall. She had messed with Sera’s friend. Her family.
Now she had a wet, blood-soaked, beaten and incredibly pissed zabraki limping towards her, a glower on her tattooed face and a glowing saber in her hand. If there was one thing that could drive a witch of Dathomir to fear, that was it.
Sera stopped, her chest heaving. Her saber rose up high above her head and came down hard, scoring a new scar in the barrier. The zabrak paused, examining the invisible dome before repeating the blow… and then again… and then again. The blows fell, one after another, until the barrier was cut to ribbons, cracks spreading over the dome. Her saber rose once more and fell, shattering through the barrier.
A whispering laughter filled her mind, jarring her from the course. Sera stopped, adjusting her grip on the weapon. Just the chest now. Just one more strike.
She felt the Force’s shrieking warning, a knife twisting in her guts, just a moment too late. A saber hissed to life behind her and she tried to dodge away. The bare tip of Karran’s saber caught her, burning away her front-right horn. Crying out at the sudden pain, Sera stumbled backwards, raising her own blade up to defend herself… just slightly too late.
“I have it, Sera! I’ll protect you!” her friend cried as he thrust his blood-red blade through her thigh, the burning saber parting flesh and bone. The terrible scent of cooking flesh — her own flesh — crossed her mind. Then his hand was on her throat, throwing her backwards to the mud. The larger zabrak stepped over her, throwing his saber to the side as he planted a crushing, Force amplified kick in Sera’s ribs. She felt something crack.
Then he was kneeling on top of her, and blows were raining down. She fought back, battering him, driving a knee into his gut. But, she was the exhausted one now, her breath coming raggedly. The taste of blood coated her tongue, her cracked rib seeming to dig into her lungs. The venom hadn’t seemed to affect him at all. Not for long, at least.
He’s been dosing himself. The damned, paranoid fool told you he was, just in case. He must have recovered, snapped the cable...with the Force, he could have...
The thought was interrupted by another blow crossing Sera’s face, her vision flashing white. Karran paused then, panting, his green-tinged eyes wide and filled with hate. He was going to kill her.
Sera felt something to her side, brushing against the fingertips of her left hand. She glanced that way and saw it: her dagger, gleaming in the mud. Slowly her fingers closed over it. He was going to kill her. She didn’t have any other choice.
No.
She glanced back up at him and opened her mind to the Force, feelers of sense reaching out, touching his mind. Where before she had felt a wall, a block that she couldn’t even begin to move. Now, there was weakness, a crack; if she could just push...
His fingers closed over her throat. She was running out of time.
Her mind shoved against the barrier, and felt it begin to fall away. A flash of brown shined out through the green.
His grip tightened. It was now or never. She had to kill him or he was going to kill her.
No choice. No choice. No…
No.
She wouldn’t. He was her Captain. Her friend. Her family.
If she died, she died, but she wouldn’t kill him. Never.
Black began to slid over her vision. But as she went, Sera managed to sneak one message into her friend’s mind.
Fight her, Karran.
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Karran froze, his grip releasing.
”Kill it, Karran. Kill it please.”
The zabrak nodded, staring down at the creature’s still form, gasping for breath beneath him. That was Sera’s voice, speaking from behind him. He had to help her, had to save her. And yet…
Fight her, Karran.
His vision flashed and the beast was gone. Sera lay in its place, struggling to breathe and writhing in pain. Karran recoiled, his hearts freezing. Then the image was gone, replaced by the rotten beast once more.
*”I’m… begging, Karran. It hurts…”
The zabrak looked down, his face twisting. Then, slowly and painfully he stood, summoning his saber to his hand. The blood red blade extended before him. He would make it quick. Easy. Painless.
The metal of his boot clanked against something, and he looked down. It was Sera’s dagger.
Fight her, Karran.
The image burned before him once again and Karran’s brain seemed to split, a thunderous pain shooting through his flesh and his eyes. Groaning, he fell to his knees and pressed his hands to his horns.
Suddenly he was aware of every wound on his body. The slice across his cheek, his severed finger, the crushed nose, every bruise, every cut, every ache. The Force left him, the amplification falling away…
Karran opened his eyes, saw what he had done to Sera, and screamed.
He no longer had a family. Not for years. Everything that he had, he gave to his crew, his family. Everything.
Fight her, Karran.
Karran pushed himself upwards, fighting against the exhaustion that threatened to take him. The wind seemed to hiss, the sky turning black as the sun fell across the horizon. His steps faltered… but he drove on.
Fight her.
He would do anything for his crew. They came before him; before his own life. It was an easy choice.
Fight her.
And now what? What had he done? He’d let himself be duped. He’d nearly killed one of his crew. One of his friends. Sera.
The zabrak snarled, and drew his saber once more, the blood-red blade burning before him as he advanced towards the chest. He saw the witch — a ghostly snatch of pale green light against the night— and that was enough to set him bellowing, screaming his rage into the Dathomirian swamp.
His friend. He’d nearly killed his friend.
Fight her, Karran.
He raised his saber over the chest, the emerald brilliance glowing, filling his vision. A ruby-red pierced it, overpowered it, and drove it back.
The blade came down, and the chest split in two. There was silence, and then a scream cut through the night, a pillar of green flame coursing into the sky, illuminating the whole of the swamp. The scream was of rage, pain, hate… and grief. A terrible, melancholy wail; a song of mourning, for all the nightsisters, now passed on.
Sera.
Karran didn’t pause. Whirling, he sprinted back to his friend, dropping by her side. In an instant, he had issued an emergency call on his com-link; help would be here in moments to pick them both up, to return them to the Voidbreaker.
If they lasted that long.
Sera’s form was still and ashen, her eyes shut, blood and mud caking her body. Karran knelt by her side, dumbfounded, unsure of what to do. She didn’t seem to be breathing.
“You… aren’t going to do this to me. I… I refuse. You are not going to…”
He couldn’t finish the thought, trailing into silence. Slowly, he squeezed his eyes shut, trying to cut off the tide he felt coming.
He didn’t see her blue eyes flutter open. Didn't see her chest rise with a hitch. All he got was a poke in the ribs. “...Karran?”
Her strangled voice was like glass on gravel, but it snapped Karran’s eyes open like a firecracker nonetheless. “Sera!”
There was a pause as the pair just looked at eachother, an ocular pat down of wounds and dishevelment. They both looked like zombies, or mudpeople. Maybe both.
Sera broke the silence. “You… look like kriffing bantha kark, Captain.”
He just looked at her, brown eyes locking on dancing, glittering blue. Then he couldn’t help but laugh. They were both a little worse for the wear, sure. But, the laughter was a sign.
As Sera always liked to believe… everything was going to turn out just fine.
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Positive Takeaways
Awesome job with creating a clear incentive as to why Sera and Karran are there. You have lots of great detail and action. The introduction of the Dathomir ‘specter’ witch as an antagonist was great. I liked that.
Can be Improved
There were a few Syntax errors, such as misspellings, missing words, and grammar. Twi'lek was capitalized, but Zabrak wasn't, species names are always capitalized. I will say that at least you were consistent with this error, and didn’t jump back and forth.
The missing word:
[...]stand it in his heavy plate (armor).