By the Force, it's dark in here.
That was the initial first thought of the Kel Dor known as Trenkyp Zkig. The newly initiated Clan Vizsla member and specialised Defender.
The tunnels of Daleem were notoriously devoid of light. Droplets of water poured down the walls and splashed onto the steel grates beneath his feet, creating thunderous, yet quick echoes that rang through his ears. What little light presented itself was provided by old monitors that clung to life against the walls, eroded by the harshness of time and the corruption of the water that leaked into their systems. Power cables hung above his head, some sparked ominously having been dissected and cut.
Of all the places the young defender imagined to meet the man that would be his master for the first time, this was not one of them.
Of course, why would I expect anything else?
He mused to himself as he cautiously stepped through the dank corridors. There was no doubt in his mind that given the condition of the place it probably smelled worse than a wampa's backside. At least he had his breathing apparatus to rely on. It neutralised the stench, it was one of the few perks of not being able to breathe normal oxygen. Granted, life would be much easier if he actually could breathe the air without the device strapped to his face.
He tapped into the power of the Force to try and pick up on any trace of the man he was searching for. Thankfully, other than the myriad of insects that made these tunnels their home the area seemed completely abandoned. What purpose these tunnels served at one point was a mystery to him, but that was something he could address at another time. For now, he picked up the presence of two individuals down a passage to his right. He was close now, he could feel it.
"Whatever they're paying you, I'll double it!"
He could also hear it. A loud yell boomed down the hallways and chambers and as he gazed down the tunnel the silhouettes of two individuals appeared to him. He retreated back, trying his best not to be seen.
"I'll triple it, anything you want. Please, I have a family!"
"You should have thought about that before you went on a killing spree, Kalim. You attracted the attention of Clan Vizsla and my job is to bring you in. After that, it's up to the Living Force to decide your fate."
Out of the two voices he could hear one sounded relatively normal whilst the other sounded almost artificial, like it was altered and made deeper in some strange way.
Two individuals then appeared before him out of the passage. The first was an old human man with a skinny frame and white hair, disheveled and crazed. The other was a tall, slender looking male wearing what appeared to Trenkyp to be Mandalorian armor of some description. Black in colour with grey streaks to it, what stood out most was the red symbol on his chest.
Silence occurred between the three for the briefest of seconds before the man now identified as Kalim took a step towards him. Trenkyp recoiled back and grabbed hold of his lightsaber. He didn't activate it, however. Merely held it in his right hand by his waist.
"Please, please help me. I'll give you anything you want," pleaded Kalim. But almost as soon as he spoke his concerned and frightened face etched into a sadistic grin, his pupils dilated and he winked at the Kel Dor. Trenkyp's heart pounded fast in his chest as he activated his weapon. A sapphire blade erupted out of his Novitiate Armory Lightsaber.
"Look out!" The Jedi called as his voice boomed and his lightsaber hummed through the sound consuming tunnels. He held the hilt in both hands and downwards from his right hip.
Kalim spun and readied himself to deliver a cheap shot to the Mandalorians groin. He pulled his leg back but this setup provided his captor the moment he needed to act. Instantly, he thrust his arm forward and it felt like a strong gust of wind roared out of the palm of his hand and pushed Kalim back into the path of Trenkyp's lightsaber. It cut through Kalim's abdomen seamlessly as blood poured from the now two pieces of the man's body into a small puddle of water and only cauterized after a few moments.
Trenkyp's glared at the man's body before slowly turning his gaze to his blade. He hadn't moved and yet, his blade was the responsible weapon for his death.
"I'd hoped to avoid killing him. He's worth as much dead as he was alive but still… that's besides the point. Two wrongs don't make a right."
The deep voice of the Mandalorian armor wearing man echoed through the tunnels. It was then that Trenkyp suddenly realised. This Mandalorian, whoever he was, had just used the Force.
Trenkyp deactivated his lightsaber but kept it in his hands, one could never be too careful.
"I'm sorry about that. I didn't mean to get you involved. It just kind of… happened," the Mandalorian spoke regretfully.
"So what's your name? Kind of strange to see another Force User here. Were you sent by Vizsla? Or are you a member of Odan Urr?"
The Daleem tunnels were, at least at one time, home to a house of Clan Odan Urr. But that seemed to be a thing of the past now.
"Trenkyp Zkig. I'm looking for someone. Appius Wight," the Defender spoke bluntly and never took his eyes off the Force User stood in front of him. Naturally, he expected the worst.
The Mandalorian raised his hands to his helmet and slowly took it off. He held it under his left arm and the sight that greeted the young Kel Dor was that of a young human male with blue eyes and short buzz-cut brown hair. His skin was pale in colour, nothing like the orange of his own.
"Well, look no further, you've found him."
Appius smiled at Trenkyp, though it did nothing to settle the young defender’s nerves.
"Is something wrong?" The Sorcerer asked as he tilted his head slightly to the side.
"You aren't exactly what I was expecting…" responded Trenkyp, the deflection in his voice was apparent. He was expecting to be trained by a fellow Jedi, to learn the ways of the old order but Appius was… not a Jedi. Or at least it certainly didn't look like it. Suddenly, Appius' lips turned into a slight grin.
"And that, my apprentice, is your first lesson. Never jump to conclusions."
The Force screamed it's warning to Trenkyp and instinctively he activated his weapon once again. Electricity crackled between the fingertips of Appius' right hand before shooting at him like a javelin, illuminating everything around it like deadly neon. Thankfully, Trenkyp was able to roll out of the way of the frightening attack just in time. He steadied his weapon once again and prepared himself for whatever Appius would try next. He called upon the Force to protect him from whatever may come, knowing the narrow tunnels didn't provide much for him in the way of mobility.
He felt it once again, the impulse of danger probed the back of his mind. Electricity surged and lanced towards him but this time it seemed to be stopped by what appeared to be some kind of invisible shield just inches in front of him. Unfortunately the protection he called upon wasn't able to stop what felt like gravity pushing him off his feet and backwards down the tunnel from which he came. His lightsaber rolled away a couple of feet next to him and clanged against the nearby wall.
The hard steel of the Daleem tunnel floors did very little to cushion his landing and the dampness clung to his cloak and Jedi Robes. Nevertheless, he steadied himself and quickly grabbed his lightsaber, activating it once again. He was immediately greeted by the sight of Appius approaching him, his right arm extended towards him as his footsteps echoed loudly down the confined hallways.
"Montresor has perfect timing, doesn't he? He could have at least told me you were coming," the Sorcerer said with evident annoyance in his voice. He dropped his arm back to his side.
"No matter, he assigned me to be your master and be your master I shall. Seems you are pretty capable at least."
Appius glanced back momentarily at the severed body of Kalim several feet behind him. His heart sank at the sight.
Suddenly, the Force User felt a shift in the Force as a warning sparked within his own brain. The Sorcerer called upon the Force and his own lightsaber floated to his right hand from his waist. He dropped his helmet as it crashed to the floor, timed perfectly with the activation of his own lightsaber. He held his hand high on the hilt, almost on top of the emitter. He then pulled his blade back in a one-handed grip, angled forwards with his blade arm held parallel, the other hand was held up in front of him and his dominant right foot was positioned back behind him. His heart pounded in his chest as he attempted to steady his breathing.
Trenkyp tried to control his own anger at the circumstances surrounding Kalim's death. But he was forced to kill a man against his will and as a Jedi, that was something that would not stand. Not only that, but Appius started the confrontation by using the Force against him. Could he win though? He certainly had to try. Justice demanded it.
Trenkyp gripped his own blade with both his hands and called upon the Force to increase his speed, he was within Appius' proximity within moments as he instantly he aimed a strike at his would-be master's right shin. Despite his enhanced speed, the Sorcerer was able to deflect the blow. He tried once again, a horizontal strike at his torso but the careful and deliberate strike was once again met by the resistance of Appius' blade. He continued a series of strikes that were slow and careful. However, Trenkyp didn't specialise in a more advanced lightsaber form so against Appius' defence focused style he could not find an opening to land a strike. What was worse, is that the Mandalorian Force User seemed to be barely trying. Like he was testing him.
Blue clashed against blue for a few moments before Appius took his moment to concentrate the power of the Force into the palm of his hand and slammed it into the ground between them, causing the Defender to stagger back several places.
"Very good, but let's see how you handle this," The Sorcerer said defiantly.
The Force alarmed Trenkyp once again as Appius raised his right hand towards one of the loose power cables that sparked and sizzled above their heads and it launched it towards the Kel Dor's head.
What Went Well
You certainly had no lack of action in this post. The combat was definitely the highlight here. I also particularly enjoyed your depiction of Force powers.
Room for Growth
There were several minor syntax issues in this post, most of which could have been caught in thorough proofing, e.g. apostrophe issues. The one item that was fairly consistent here is that you should either capitalize discipline names or not. You were pretty consistent here with ‘Sorcerer’ but you kept bouncing between ‘Defender’ and ‘defender.’
The major issue with your story in this post is that, at about a thousand words in, I had to scroll back up to confirm that this was in the Duelist Hall. The back half of this post had plenty of combat, but what felt off to me is that it came out of nowhere. You spent so much of your word count on the Kalim stuff that I expected it to form the basis for this story, but ultimately he was quickly dispatched and we settled into the familiar “someone said I have to train you, so dodge” narrative.
On the nitpickier side, the CS Guide specifically notes that Barrier protects against Force powers, yet you have Appius send Trenkyp flying through the barrier, either through some push effect from Lighting or perhaps Telekinesis.