Sulith died first.
Perhaps that wasn't so surprising. He-sometimes-she was always so determined to shield those considered friends or innocents. To be the one taking the hits so others didn't have to.
Sulith's fur had stunk when his lightsaber carved right through it. He nearly had the urge to wipe the blade clean, as one would maintain a more traditional weapon, but of course plasma had no such needs. And, of course, the mess had only just begun.
Jax was next — would have been first, really, as he had tried to talk to his Captain in the language of the dune seas that raised the Zabrak, to plead with him, but Sulith had thrown himself between the hybrid and the killing blow. Instead, the many-tongued old Mandalorian had fallen second, his bulk following his severed lower jaw to the floor.
Alaisy had been tricky. She had nearly escaped him, bound him in living shadows and enslaved him to blood magicks by the jewelry she'd gifted him. But no such luck. And latex really was even worse than fur, exposed to heat. It boiled, and for the first and last time he heard the alchemist's modulated scream while her suit turned to molten liquid and melted to her skin, and then through her skin, to bone, and...
Unfortunately, between the time those three bought and Zig's skillful slicing, he was cut off from the rest of his crew. Her tear-wrecked, furious cursing had stormed through the intercoms as she remotely sealed various airlocks and blast doors on the ship, opening the cargo bay hatch to vent him into the void. But even that could not stop him. As the bodies of his former crewmates drifted past, frozen, he moved on, using the Force to sustain himself and safely reenter the vessel, where he watched their escape shuttle flee uselessly.
He would hunt them to the ends of the Galaxy, and he would give them each a choice: remain the family they so claimed to be, or die like the traitors. No in between.
Only absolutes.
What if they weren't fast enough?
The gunship rattled around them as it broke through Felucia's atmosphere. Ruka clutched for purchase at a strap above, having been too anxious to do anything but pace and fiddle with his gear the entire trip. Corazon watched him worriedly from the co-pilot's seat while their droid managed the controls, but didn't spare any more assurances than he already had beyond a brush of their minds.
They'd moved as fast as they could, but what if it wasn't fast enough? Ruka needed to be there. He needed to help, he needed to see—
Sera's shaken voice, normally so bright and strong, its enthusiasm impossible to extinguish just like her light, replayed in his mind for the hundredth time.
"We don't know what's safe, if he's using the Clan channels, or— please, hurry. Where we first fought," she'd said in her message, and he'd never heard her sound so desperate. "Please hurry."
He'd known Karran was stressed, but this? He didn't want to believe it. He didn't want to believe that his friend, his apprentice, had truly snapped. Had hurt his friends and subordinates.
But that's always how it works, his own words reminded him, haunting, with the Dark. Everything you want, it comes with a price.
He didn't want to believe Karran's was his humanity.
Ashla and Bogan, if it were true, what if they weren't fast enough? What if they didn't get there in time? What if Sera and the others were already dea—
His knuckles whitened on the back of the co-pilot's chair, and he heard the metal creak.
They quickly descended through low, pallid green clouds churning up an incoming storm. Ruka leaned forward, staying all but pressed up to the viewport, violet eyes searching while the droid began navigating a landing it had performed once before, and—
There they were.
A wide, gray clearing, ringed by cliffs and haggard jungle trees that dared go no further. A shuttle there in the mist and bones, the ramp open. The obviously more able bodied of the crew had weapons drawn, ready to go down defending their wounded or less able comrades. Movement caught his gaze, tracking it sideways.
Sera was fighting.
Sera was fighting Karran. And even as he watched, the larger Zabrak struck out his hand and loosed a short, cruel torrent of lightning that Sera barely grounded with her golden saber, barely fast enough—
Ruka was at the hatch before he'd loosed a breath.
"Get the others onboard!" he barked to his partner, trusting the Jedi who called after him, but as soon as the door lowered enough to force his body through, the Mirialan inhaled the Force and leapt.
"SERA!" he screamed, streaking down like a star falling from on high, his lightsaber in hand a comet tail of blue. He crashed down between the Zabraks, felt dirt crater under his boots, bone dust erupting in plumes around them, the sound of sparking, spitting plasma ringing in his ears. His arms shook against the resistance his two-handed slash met.
The dust settled. Red and blue struggled. Violet met not warm desert brown but seething red; Karran's eyes were burning coals in the pitch pools of his tattooed face.
The other Sith actually smiled.
"I'd wondered why she'd run here, Master," Karran mocked, and shoved forward, always forward, persevering like the form he held dear. Ruka let himself be pushed away, jumping back, gaze darting to Sera while a thud announced their ship's landing.
"Are you okay?!" he barked, taking in her appearance. The smaller Zabrak woman, always so fierce, barely seemed to be on her feet. She was covered in burns and cuts, bleeding from more stab wounds than he could count, her legs bruised from her own kicking blows.
The Mirialan paid for his distraction, for thinking for even a second he could take his eyes off Karran, as if Karran wasn't the enemy here. A wide strike bringing all his force to bear swept for Ruka, and only his screeching senses saved him, moving his arms up and saber to bear in an overhead block instinctively. His apprentice's blade pummeled into the guard heartbeats later, an aggressive chain of attacks pressing forward, forward, pressing him back. Ruka bared his gritted teeth and held his ground as best he could, each step back an earthquake impact, each block and blow a tidal wave breaking against cliffs.
"Ankar, stop!" Sera plead behind them, stumbling, arms failing to raise both her dagger and saber.
"I'll come back to you, kashinka," Karran mocked.
"No!"
Snarling, Ruka let the Dark all around, seeped into the soil, surge into his bones. He leapt high, away from the next slash that came, twisted in midair, and aimed at Karran's right shoulder with his elbow. The sharp blow connected with enough amplified force to spin the Zabrak around, a shock of pain shooting up Ruka's arm and a muted, fleshy crack from issuing from Karran's.
The reprieve was enough; the Mirialan whipped around, caught Sera as she sagged, and kicked off the ground again in a bounding arc across the graveyard. He landed near to their gunship and cradled Sera but briefly before telekinetically easing her into the hold of his Jedi husband, who took over the duty.
"Everyone's on."
"Then go."
"Ruka," Corazon started to protest, but the Mirialan barked back.
"Go! She needs you. I'll hold him off."
The Pantoran's sunlight golden eyes met his before he nodded. "Come back to us, angel."
And then he was gone and the ship was taking off as the Adept turned back to his opponent to see Karran waiting for him.
"No more!" snarled Ruka, eyes bright, stance wide, hair and cape blown wild around him by the gunship's backblast. "I won't let you hurt one more person, do you hear me?!"
"Ruka...you won't let me do anything. You can't stop me," growled the Zabrak, sharp teeth bare in an expression that wasn't a smile.
Karran thrust out his hand, and the air itself shuddered, hot winds whipping as the ship above gave a metallic shriek, the thrusters straining against their arrested momentum. Ruka watched in horror only a heartbeat before snarling and closing his own telekinetic grip around the vessel, trying to push it free towards the atmosphere while Karran held it back.
The haul groaned, the thrusters sputtering, the vehicle swaying in midair as the two Sith battled for it, teeth bared, glares darting between their target and one another.
"Let...go!" Ruka shouted.
"Never!" Karran spat.
The Mirialan cursed and hissed, splitting his focus just long enough to lift his other hand and thrust out his saber, not in a whirlwind, but in a controlled strike as if he were wielding it himself. Above them, the ship twitched back towards the ground. Karran gave a victorious howl.
Ruka jerked his fingers, and his blade spun and stabbed at the Zabrak, right for his chest, forcing him to lift his own saber in startled counter. The ship rose again, and again Ruka mimed a slash, and the blade followed, dancing around Karran. The larger of the men growled while he parried and blocked blows, his movements with his right arm — his dominant hand — slightly slowed.
The distant rush of something breaking through the stratosphere was the most beautiful and awful thing he'd heard in ages, because his friends were safe, but—
But now it was just them, and he couldn't avoid this any longer.
"Why, Karran?" Ruka shouted, summoning his blade back to his palm. "Why would you do this?! Are you out of your mind?! Is someone controlling you? Is it the Dark corruption? Dammit, these are your family! You're their captain and you turned on them! What about your oath, your honor?"
"Captain?" the Zabrak scoffed. "And what did that accomplish me? Nothing. Not enough. Never enough. Not with Vasano's simperings and machinations, not with Garmis' insolence. And not just her. This evil goes all the way up, every branch, every thorn, every infected root. Captain is nothing. Consul? Don't make me laugh. No... No I will be...I am...an Emperor. THE Emperor. I am Darth Krayt now, no son of Kar."
"You're a kriffing idiot is what you are, you franger! Don't you give me that Darth sithspit! Your name is Karran, and you— you killed your friends. You killed OUR friends! You're betraying everything, everyone— why?"
"BECAUSE THAT IS WHAT IT WILL TAKE!" bellowed his fellow Sith, advancing across the space, bones crunching underfoot. Ruka retreated, matching his pace step for step, a dance amidst ancient death. "I am powerful now, I will be powerful, I have earned it, I deserve it! I will have my vengeance and I will have the respect of those around me and no more will I be blocked or belittled at every turn by any of these fools— not by Vasano, not by my dragon, not by you."
"All this suffering, just for your pride?!" the Mirialan cried, and his own rage welled up in his chest, the hurt and fury and terror, and his hand lifted and lightning burst from his fingertips. The storm tendrils coruscated into an instantaneous, protective corona of energy around Karran. Even as he let the furious charge continue, it dispersed finely over his opponent's barrier, and Ruka clenched his fist, ceasing the attempt.
"For my everything," Karran shot back, wild, sneering. "For that, I will do anything I must, nevermind the cost. They will pay it. They will join me or they will perish like the traitors they are."
"No! Karran, stop this! Just let them go!"
"I won't."
"And I won't ask you again!" The Mirialan leveled his blue saber at the Zabrak from across the distance between them. For but a few meters, it may as well have been a chasm. "Stop this! Let my people go!"
"They are MY PEOPLE, MINE!" snarled Karran back, face contorting in rage, tattoos like the pits of a skull, lit in red plasma flame. "I will never let them go!"
He charged. Ruka did too. They connected with an explosive gust of air that sent skeletons rattling and mist swirling, the strength of a thousand men before them flowing through their bodies, dark and roaring. Their blades snapped round and round, over and over, high then low, chained slashes and unrelenting, determined strikes.
Each blow echoed, but not with the shriek of plasma meeting plasma; it was with memory. Their first meeting in the Citadel courtyard, beneath an age old tree. Their first spar there turned judgement, then turned challenge. Their later rematches, Karran asking Ruka to train him. Ruka pressing Karran's kyber crystal into Karran's hand, telling him he was worthy, that he was what it meant to be a knight. Shared meditation, grueling practice sessions, quiet talking. The buzz of a needle and the smell of ink, and black petals; Karran matching Ruka. Fighting side by side, trusting one another implicitly. Parties and drinks and dares, fevers and gentle, firm hands tending sickness, gifts and promises between brothers in arms, helping each other, because that was what family was for. Karran and Ruka. Ruka and Karran.
"This isn't you," Ruka whispered as their lightsabers locked, keening. "Just stop, please, just tell me what's wrong, let me help, please, Karran, this isn't you. You're my friend."
"Friend? Then you wouldn't be begging me to stop like some pathetic child crying in the sand. You wouldn't be fighting me. You would be standing beside me."
"I am beside you! You! Not this, not whatever this is! It's not you, YOU wouldn't have hurt them, not Sera, no one who you cared for. You'd have died first. So tell me what's wrong—"
"SHUT UP!" screeched Karran, and hammered a blow so hard that Ruka's weapon flew from his grasp and clattered across the clearing. Hissing, the Mirialan jerked back, quick enough to avoid being bisected but not enough to avoid the glancing rake over his chest. He yowled in pain as his armor seared to his skin and reached out around him with his mind, not even needing to move his hands. Chunks of crumbling, packed earth and stone and pieces of bone all rose into the air and hovered a moment before blasting forward like a scatter shot.
The debris pelted the Zabrak, slicing into his flesh and robes and throwing him down to the earth. He didn't stay there even for a second though, somersaulting back to his feet with his own momentum and screaming out as blood poured from a multitude of shallow wounds, red bleeding over the black lines of his ancestors' heritage.
"What do you care?! You never loved me! It was never me!"
"Of course I care! You're my brother! Karran, plea—"
The Zabrak spun towards him, and between one circling step and another, he kicked off the ground, spinning forward. His arms tucked tight into his body, one leg planted, the other swinging up high and carrying the momentum of its weight like a pendulum. It cracked into the Mirialan's jaw so hard his ears rang, pain blooming in a whitewash over his vision.
But Karran kept moving, only mid-step in a brutal dance.
The Zabrak dropped, planting both hands, and swept his leg at Ruka's. Dazed, the Mirialan wasn't fast enough to brace when a knee as solid as any tree trunk swept into the back of his, dropping him hard and fast. His breath huffed out of him in a gasp when his back connected with the ground. Before he got the chance to gasp in, Karran was on him.
"You couldn't even love me," hissed the Zabrak.
Stronger arms, a wider, larger frame, pinned his. He struggled uselessly, unable to gain any leverage to even attempt a grapple. His friend, his brother, stared down at him with curled lips.
"Maybe I'll make you. Keep you like the others. Maybe you can be the Emperor's consort."
One of the hands that pinned his was replaced by Karran's entire body weight bearing down, and fingers dug into the wound across his chest, ripping burnt-shut flesh open. Ruka wailed, but the sound was choked off as another hand knotted in his dreadlocks and yanked his head aside, teeth clamping onto his throat. Another flash of pain came, hot and sharp when they broke skin, sank into muscle, started to rip back. He nearly bit his tongue in two and struggled harder.
"No, Karran— stop."
"Will you really be with me, or do I have to kill you too? Hmm? Join me."
"Stop this," Ruka croaked at him, cracking in the middle.
He writhed again, and Karran just pressed down harder, nails breaking skin, fingers bruising. Painting in reds and purples to smear over the green of him. The Zabrak pulled back and then smashed their mouths together, all teeth and force, and Ruka's eyes screwed shut against it, against the legs trying to part his.
NO! shouted the Mirialan, a mental scream of defiance, disgust, of broken trust. When his eyes opened again they burned bright gold, glaring at the other Sith, and with a heave of Force-enhanced muscles he twisted his hips and rammed his knee up between the Zabrak's own. Karran's breath left him in a wet gust, spewing over Ruka's face, the pain evident in his features for only a moment before a telekinetic hammer was slamming him away.
Positive Takeaways
Your descriptive language in this post was nothing short of poetic and downright visceral, especially the combat between the characters. As a reader, I could almost hear the bones cracking and feel the pain, which is precisely what you want in combat writing. You also did an excellent job of punctuating your dialogue with emotes that deftly conveyed the scene’s emotion.
Can Be Improved
Scattershot should be one word or hyphenated unless you meant the Star Wars term scatter gun.
So I’m going to address the proverbial elephant in the room of this post being almost 3000 words. Overall, you executed the post well and maintained dramatic tension throughout, which is no small feat for a post of that length. While there was nothing wrong with the structure or length of your post from a technical sense it felt like it crammed a match’s worth of plot points into an intro post. A match should be a back and forth between the authors and this felt like a complete story unto itself rather than a setup for more story.