The Chiss coughed, waving away the foul cloud and backing away. He could admire the tenacity, and even the resourcefulness, of Aru. This was proving more interesting then he’d expected of the Knight, though considering the lad was part of a ship that seemed to fetishize sparring, it should not have surprised him. As the smoke dissipated, his gaze sought out the Human, scouring the immediate area. He was growing more familiar with some of the man’s tricks, his eyes searching for disturbances on the ground in case he had decided to remove himself from sight once more.
As he sought out the Human, he felt goosebumps rise on the back of his neck as something grazed it. He turned, fists rising to guard his chest and face, eyes narrowing. It had been just a brush, the barest of touches. Strong growled as he felt something tickle his left ear, whipping his head around and swinging a fist wide and low, trying to find the hidden Knight.
”Mister Aru, I suggest you fight like a man if you wish to continue this misbegotten idea of defending your Master’s honor,” he bellowed, gritting his teeth. The Chiss had an idea of what was going on; Force User’s had a love for playing these kinds of tricks in Arcona. He turned slowly, eyes searching anew. Aru had to be nearby, he decided, to be using such finely targeted abilities. He looked at the crushed pipe and began a tactical evaluation.
”I think stress is getting to you, big guy, maybe you should leave, have a nap, forget this whole business with my mistress,” a voice seemed to whisper in his ear. Strong did his best to ignore it, he knew the man wasn't there, and even if he was the Human couldn’t have reached that high while the Chiss was on his feet. He evaluated the area around where he’d last seen Aru, before the dirty trick with the pipe. It came out of a higher point of ground, at the edge of where it leveled off for the palace itself. He looked up, above where the pipe emerged. Rocks, none particularly large, and a tree that looked rotted and dead from Nal Hutta’s pollution ridden environment.
But large enough to hide a man as slim as Mister Aru, he thought to himself grimly. He blinked as he approached, the ground in front of him shifting in appearance to a morass of roiling mud, a hazard to try and cross. With a grunt of annoyance, he kicked a nearby stone into the pit and noted the lack of a splash, the rock sticking up out of the illusion. He cracked his knuckles and walked through, the mirage dissipating as he passed through it.
”Master Law, you try my patience!”
Strong mounted the small bluff, using the crushed pipe as a handhold, and approached the dead tree with light steps.
”You want to leave Nal Hutta, General,” came a nearby voice, laden with power.
He wavered, feeling the pressure on his mind, before growling and stomping his right foot down. Pain shot up the leg from his blaster wound, helping fracture the tenuous hold the Knight had tried to impress on him. Right hand balled into a fist, Strong cocked his arm back and punched the tree with all of his considerable strength.
Aru sat with eyes half-closed, focused on his illusions and his last-ditch effort to command the hulking man away. His hands gripped his saber hilt tightly as he began to get up from his seated position. He winced, his head hurt, his ribs hurt, his back hurt, everything hurt. He was halfway to his feet when the Force screamed at him, making him freeze in place. It was for the best, as a blue fist the size of his head tore through the old, dead tree above just above him.
That could have killed me at this point, he thought in a strangely detached manner. Instead of panicking or devolving to self-pity, Aru engaged his saber and jabbed upwards. Prepared to do anything, Aru, do what you must to secure the win, he reminded himself.
The Chiss felt heat, the flesh of his forearm bubbling as the green plasma blade skimmed the surface of his arm. He bellowed in anger, jerking away by reflex, spotting Aru through the spray of broken wood. The Human was getting to his feet, a look of grim determination tinged with fear, his saber gripped so hard his knuckles were turning white. Strong didn’t wait, he was seeing red, anger and pain nearly overwhelming his reason. He kicked out at the tree itself, the trunk cracking and leaning alarmingly towards the Knight.
“Sithspit!” shouted Aru, jumping to the side into dirt and mud. He found Strong giving swift chase, the big man moving with all of the deceptive speed he possessed. The Human twisted and tried to get his feet under him, eyes growing wide as he realized the Chiss was diving in at him. “No! No no no,” he yelled as three hundred plus pounds of blue man landed on top of him, a meaty fist knocking the saber out of his hand.
Aru grunted and tried to chop at the General’s neck, the edge of his hand hitting corded muscle and stinging. The two rolled as they struggled, mud staining armor and clothes. The Knight lashed out as their travel brought him on top, but again his hit just seemed to annoy, and anger, the Chiss. He saw the Chiss spit a small amount of blood out of the side of his mouth, a small detail that for some reason stood out during all of it as they reached the crest of the small hill.
At least I made him bleed, thought the Human, smugly.
They rolled down the hill, both men emitting noises of discomfort. At the bottom, Aru tried to get away from the big man but felt a vice-like grip on one arm pulling him back in. Strong wrapped an arm around him at about shoulder height, releasing his arm hold and then placing that hand around the Knight’s mid-back.
“I suggest you submit, Mister Law,” growled Strong into his ear.
“I don’t lose bets, General,” gasped Aru as Garmis began to apply pressure. He wiggled his fingers, trying to focus, to draw his fallen saber hilt to his hand. He tried to cry out in pain when Strong suddenly tightened his hold further, feeling his broken rib, or ribs as it likely was now, grind together and press against his internals. Darkness encroached on his vision, breathing was proving difficult.
”I implore you to fold, then, Master Aru,” suggested Strong. ”I do not wish to return you to Miss Tir’eivra a broken man.”
The Chiss waited a moment, not hearing a response, and loosened his grip. Aru lay against his chest limply, prompting a sigh from the General, who rolled over and gently set the man down. He pulled his medpac from his belt, beaten as the casing was it hadn’t broken open at least.
“I shall see to you as I can, and deposit you within my vessel’s medbay, Mister Law,” he grumbled. “Perhaps you will be awake by the time we reach Port Ol’val, though you will not find me aboard when you do. I believe I have a date this evening.”
What Went Well
I love the premise of this battle. It suits the characters perfectly, and it’s a refreshing change from most of the battles we see in the ACC. You also did a great job of bringing the characters’ personalities out in both their dialogue and the way they fight. Showing how Aru questioned his decision to challenge Strong to a duel helped keep me inside his perspective. The combat itself had enough depth to be interesting, with how Aru tried to outsmart Strong, and the pace was quick enough that it didn’t feel like it dragged on.
Room for Growth
Before I get into this part, don’t be discouraged by how much more there is in this section than in the What Went Well section. It just takes more words to explain how you can improve than to describe what you’re already good at.
This post has several issues in the Realism category. The first comes from the way you used Force Cloak and Illusion to trick Strong and give you the opportunity to land a blaster shot. In general, combining Force Cloak and Illusion is a cool idea, and I like that you decided to try it in this battle. There are few aspects of Force Cloak and Ghosting that made the way they were written in this post seem unrealistic, though.
Ghosting allows the user to move “slowly and deliberately” while using Force Cloak, but the way you describe the events requires Aru to move quickly in at least two places: when he tries to dodge Strong's grab, and when he has to get all the way around and behind Strong in the time it takes Strong to say a sentence or two. Both of those actions would require him to move faster than the “slowly and deliberately” that Ghosting allows, so Force Cloak should’ve deactivated.
The second point about Force Cloak is that at a +3 rating, the power takes “several seconds” to activate fully, according to the CS Guide: Force Powers page on the wiki. I don't see a pause in the action that's long enough to let Aru spend several seconds activating Force Cloak, except maybe after Strong grabs him—but Aru also has to escape from Strong's grip and get around behind him in that same period of time. So, in the situation you described, the power wouldn't work the way you wrote it.
Moving away from Force Cloak, the second realism issue in this post is that the writing didn't reflect the massive difference in the characters' Athletics scores, especially during the chase section. There's no explanation for how Aru (with Athletics +0) was able to outrun Strong (with Athletics +5) despite Strong's speed advantage. It's also not clear how Aru was able to make Strong overshoot him; if Strong was far enough behind Aru that Strong couldn't just grab him, Strong would also have enough time to change direction and follow Aru instead of sliding past him.
The final Realism issue I noted was how you handled Aru getting slammed into the wall. The Barrier might've reduced the impact from Strong's strike, but Aru still hit a stone wall hard enough to crack the wall behind him and leave him senseless (unless the part about how Aru “regained his senses” refers to something else). Despite that, he doesn't seem to be injured from hitting the wall, even though you wrote that he couldn't raise his Barrier before Strong interrupted him.
Besides the Realism concerns, I noticed a few issues with Syntax and Story. You had one passage of dialogue (ending in “the Gray Jedi said”) that ended with a period when a comma would've been correct. There was also a paragraph (when Aru and Strong first start running inside the Winter Palace) where you use “he” to refer to both characters in the same sentence, which made it confusing to see who had started running first.
Regarding Story, Aru's explanation of how Strong interrupted his Barrier seemed a little bit out of place, like it was intended as you telling the judges why you were writing it that way. I didn't deduct points for that, because it might be that Aru just talks like that normally (which would be very anime-esque), but it would've felt more integrated with the story if you'd described the events as they happened instead of telling the reader about them after the fact.
Last but not least, keep an eye on the opponent's loadout. Strong has a personal energy shield that would've protected him from Aru's blaster shot, and it's weird that he didn't activate it either before the fight or after Aru shot him. Like the in-character explanation of Barrier, I didn't deduct points for this (since it's not “against the rules”, it's just not explained), but it's something to keep in mind in the future.
Suggestions
Realism-wise, the biggest suggestions are to make sure the way your post is written matches the skill and power descriptions in the CS Guide, and to make sure you show the reader how Aru is doing what he does, even if his opponent doesn't know. Unlike regular fiction writing, where a reader might be willing to accept things “just happening”, ACC battles need to show how the events of the battle unfold so that the judges can grade them. You showed that you know how to account for CS stats and explain events when you mentioned Aru getting tired from running before Strong did and during Aru's explanation of Barrier, so it's just a question of doing it for the entire post.
Story-wise, as I said earlier, your explanation will feel more immersive if you describe them. Don't just have Aru say “I couldn't raise the Barrier in time”—show him trying to do it, then realising he didn't quite make it when Strong's hammer hits him.
Lastly, for Syntax, get a proofreader when possible. You can also use an online checker like Grammarly, since human proofreaders miss things sometimes.