The slow approach was good for more than a couple of things. It set the tone, the pace, in fact, the entire atmosphere of the situation. It also allowed for that most vital of skills in conflict, observation.
First came the Weequay. A non-entity in the situation, and he wasn’t much more of one outside the situation; a glorified businessman with a blaster and a ship, nothing more.
Next was Jon, and he bore more planning. Armed with plenty of weapons, including some bulky bracers, he had plenty of ways to wreck Raziel’s day. That being said, his only close combat weapons were vibroswords, which weren’t built to stand up to even a grazing hit from the lightsaber currently finding its way into Raziel’s hand.
Finally, the droid. It was big, it was fast, and it was in motion. For a moment, Raziel didn’t know what he was dealing with, until the aura of energy surrounding the droid’s electrostaff sprang to life. Then, it was pretty damn clear what the score was. Magnaguard, built for melee combat, and with coprocessors fast enough to process fighting a Jedi.
”Force the defensive,” Raziel thought to himself, his icy lightsaber casting a juxtaposing light across his little slice of the volcanic world. ”Keep it between me and Jon.”
And so, that’s exactly what he did. Raziel rushed towards the machine, already moving his lightsaber in whirling orbits, each one meant to batter and assault the Magnaguard’s defense and prevent it from taking the aggression away. A whirling whip around the top of his head chained into a vicious downward slash before a wrist transition arrested that slash’s momentum and turned it into an uppercut.
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Jon latched his vibroblades together at the pommels and held them in his left hand. “Yeah, I’m gonna need to borrow that,” He said, casually taking the blaster in the Weequay’s hand and leveling his aim off in an effort to get a shot past his droid. “Got a feeling we’re gonna need more gun for this problem.”
“You think, Silvon?” the Weequay snapped, backing away from the slowly encroaching hostility.
“Yeah, I’m pretty sure. This, by the way, is probably the best time to run,” Jon replied, and took a measured step away to get a better angle for his shot. With a practiced ease, he set his greater plan into motion. On the inhale, he triggered the line on his left gauntlet, and watched it wrap handily around the Magnaguard’s feet. At the beginning of his exhale, he turned his hips and jerked, taking his own droid down. More than that, however, it exposed his true target, Raziel.
At the full release of breath, he stiffened his right arm and squeezed the trigger with the tip of his finger, easily mitigating the recoil and keeping him online for the second shot of his double tap.
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Raziel was in motion, always in motion, when the droid suddenly hit the walkway. Instinctively, he swatted in a shielding motion with his lightsaber and caught the blaster bolt headed his way, before deflecting it harmlessly away. He caught the second bolt too, just not with his lightsaber.
A muffled grunt of pain escaped his helmet as he suddenly lurched back from the impact of the blaster bolt on his left shoulder. The armor ate the worst of it, but not all, and there was a lovely little flash burn under his pauldron to remind him of the fact.
From there, it was no holds barred. He tried to be civil. He tried to do this without enmity. Raziel swatted a few more blaster bolts as he rushed Jon, stepping on the droid and leaping off towards him to really drive the point home.
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“Oh boy,” Jon mumbled, tossing the borrowed blaster pistol and whirling his blades around his body defensively. He’d made Raz mad, that was for certain.
“You sowed the wind, Jon,” Raziel called out in his dead rush.
“Yep,” Jon replied, turned his body into Raziel’s charge, and used a combination of both men’s momentums to throw Raziel to the ground. It was pure body mechanics, and he’d trained well enough in Shadow Step to know how to make them work to his advantage.
Which made things all the more difficult when Raziel didn’t fall on his face as was expected. “Mag boots,” he said simply, and Jon could hear the amusement in Raziel’s voice, even through the vocoder in his helmet.
From there, Jon felt himself being lifted up, and suddenly tossed through the air. A panicked glance told him he was on a Force fueled ballistic path towards one of the satellite control centers, and the transparisteel window that shielded it.
Ever quick witted, he twisted in midair and planed his body out like a flying hero from the holos. His left gauntlet spat blaster bolts, and a half-second before he hit the weakened transparisteel, Jon triggered the repulsor on his right gauntlet, shattering the glass before his face did.
A quick tuck and roll and he was back on his feet, just in enough time to see Raziel come leaping through the broken window after him.
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There was no grace, no poetry to the leaping tackle. Such was not in Raziel’s bag of tricks. Just a heavy man in heavy armor, and he was as motivated to spear his target as he was to get away from the recovering droid.
He landed on top of Jon with a heavy smacking sound, bearing them both to the ground, but with Raziel in perfect position above him.
“Laying it on a little thick aren’t you, Raz?” Jon muttered, trying to get his breath back.
“I told you I wasn’t an actor when you asked me to help you with this,” Raziel grumbled a second later, having taken the time to tickle the vocabulator controls in his helmet with the Force, bringing the volume way down. “You think he’s buying it?”
“After what I put into this, he better. Now, haul me up and shove me, we need to buy time for him to break the landing lock on the ship.” Jon replied to him, and that sounded like a good idea as any, so Raziel did exactly that. Apparently, however, Jon was dead set on putting him on the ground, as the moment both men got to their feet, Jon triggered the repulsors on both gauntlets, sending Raziel skidding backwards on his backside.
Positive Takeaways
Alright, this was a very enjoyable setup. I like the idea and general story going into it, very amusing. Utilizing the Obfuscating Stupidity aspect to try and fast talk to someone who obviously knows your character is always amusing.
Can Be Improved
The big one here is: lack of conflict. This was an excellent post for staging the story, but there’s no combat/conflict. Nobody swinging at one another, no Force powers, nothing, just some accusations and a precursor to conflict. You want to push for about half your post involving some kind of fighting, whether it be physical or Force usage. That said, again, an excellent setup on the story front.
Secondly, and much less of an issue, is repeated word usage. You refer to Raz as ‘unreadable’ twice in one sentence, which is rough. The other is your third paragraph, where Jon is handing over the datapad to the Weequay. It got a bit confusing trying to parse which ‘captain’ was being referred to at the end, and required a couple of re-reads to clear it up. Try to avoid confusing situations like this by changing up how you refer to characters.
Again, solid first post for Story, but next time let the droid and guy in armor actually duke it out a bit.