Drip, drip, drip, drip.
The sound of falling water echoing throughout the chamber was all he heard as consciousness returned to him. He opened his eyes and the immediate blurriness pained his retinas and high pitched screeching rang in his ears. He instinctively covered his eyes with his right hand which in all honesty, was nothing more than a futile attempt at relief.
"You awake, Jedi?"
A familiar voice rang out, though it was not one that brought immediate comfort. Ria'd tried to sit up, yet as he did he grunted loudly as sudden pain stopped him from moving any further.
"Not gonna lie, Jedi. I think we did a real number on this place. The cave above us collapsed and frak knows where we are now."
Ria'd carefully eyed his… enemy? Friend? He wasn't honestly sure at this point but at least the humongous Zeltron wasn't trying to punch him. That was certainly an improvement, right? Either way, he was surprised to see the flamboyantly dressed man still here with him. He had him pegged for the type to leave him for dead at the first sign of being able to save his own skin.
"That was impressive what you did, that Force thing you did to keep the rocks away? Don't see that too often from the space wizards I normally beat up," Sage commented without a hint of self-restraint.
Ria'd took the man's ramblings as a chance to recover from the damage he'd sustained during their fall. He placed his hands on his chest and closed his eyes as the soothing energy of the Force entered his body. It eased his pain and comforted him like warm honey. Thankfully, his injuries weren't too serious, some light bruising and friction burns that should only take a small amount of time to fix. After a couple of minutes, he finally rose to his feet.
"So… what do you make of all this?"
The Zabrak glanced up at the question and he stopped healing himself from sheer shock. His eyes opened wide as he inspected the chasm the pair of them were now. The revelation to him was absolutely astonishing.
What they'd discovered below Ach-To was an intricate series of networks and tunnels that led to an old underground abandoned metropolis, lit up by sparkling silver kyber crystals that dotted old ruins and cave walls and acted like natural light in the underground world. He heard Ach-To had its secrets, he heard Ach-To was the former home of the Jedi Order, but what they had accidentally stumbled upon was a literal civilization underground, far away from prying eyes. No matter where they looked, the walls of the many underground buildings had a collection of hieroglyphics so spectacular and mysterious that archaeologists could spend months studying them.and only scratch the surface of their meaning.
"By the Force… I don't believe it," Ria'd stated.
"Looks like some old Jedi stuff, know anything about it?" Sage asked as he crossed his arms.
"Nothing," Ria'd answered. "I didn't even know any of this was here. It looks like some kind of old abandoned city from the ancient days of the Jedi Order. Who knows what could be in there? Ancient relics, powerful rituals and artifacts… the possibilities are endless."
"Mhm, ok," Sage said. "Well, in that case…"
It was like the Defender knew the strike was coming, judging by how he moved out of the way of Sage's bloodied fist which was no doubt damaged from the escape they had made when he punched through the floor.
"Stop! We're both hurt! There's no reason for us to keep fighting like this!" Ria'd screamed as his voice tunnelled around the old city.
"That's where you are wrong, Jedi! There's always a reason to fight!" the giant Scoundrel retorted as he threw yet another haymaker in Ria'd's direction, only for the Jedi to deflect the attack with his open palm. "I've done nothing but fight all my life. Even against those, I thought were my friends, my family, the only people I could trust. Those same people sold me into the ring to fight to the death for a crowd's amusement all for the sake of a few credits. That's where I learned the only person I can count on is me, the only person I should look after… IS ME!"
He threw another punch, only this time, it connected with Ria'd's gut. The Zabrak keeled over as he spat over Sage's forearm, the impact of the brass knuckler bruising his abdomen instantly. Even despite his healing, he was still tired and hurt from his exertion earlier. The Zeltron grinned and pushed him hard into a nearby stone pillar.
"I appreciate you saving me, but it don't mean nothing. All it means to me is that you want me in your debt and that ain't happening! The Boss owes nobody nothing!"
He swung again with the full intention of breaking whatever bone his fists could connect with. Thankfully for Ria'd, he moved his head out of the way just in time before the steel could connect. It slammed into the rock behind him and left a large debt and crack in the fragile stone.
"Arcona wants this, and I'm gonna deliver big. Just like for all the ladies that have ever known me," Sage said as he grinned triumphantly. Unfortunately, his overconfidence would prove to blind him. As he threw his next punch Ria'd quickly grabbed the hilt at his waist as his lightsaber blade sprung into existence once again. Blue quickly drowned out the natural silver light of the crystals and before Sage realised what was happening, the Defender swiped his lightsaber across the front of his body with a quick flick of his wrist and severed Sage's left arm from his body at the elbow.
"GAAAH!"
Sage let out a blood-curdling scream and recoiled in horror at his now missing appendage. He clutched the singed nerve ends and dropped to the ground. With his knees to his chest and a slight tremble throughout his body, he did his best to push through the agony though the tortured, muffled groans said otherwise.
Ria'd remained paralyzed on the spot. He breathed heavily and kept the lightsaber ignited in his hands. He slowly looked down at the now severed arm before looking to Sage on the dusty floor. The Defender released the tension he held in his body with a long, drawn out-breath. He retracted the blade on his lightsaber and placed it back on his waist before quickly approaching the Scoundrel.
Sage didn't even realize what was happening. He was so focused on the pain it drowned out every other sense of his body. But then at one moment, it began to ease. It was gradual at first and then slowly began to numb. He stopped screaming and trembling and relaxed into this new feeling.
After a few minutes, he opened his eyes again as his senses came too. That was when he realised what was happening, Ria'd was knelt in front of him with both hands on his wounded ligament, eyes closed as the joint miraculously patched itself.
"Wha-what are you…"
"Hush," Ria'd interrupted. "I need to concentrate."
This carried on for another few minutes until Ria'd could carry on no longer. Both men stayed eerily silent as the only sound that could be heard were the occasional dripping of water and the gentle hum from the crystals.
"There… that's the best I can do right now. It's not perfect, but it should ease your pain until you can get proper medical attention."
The tall Zeltron slowly rose back to his feet and sure enough, his elbow twinged and ached as he held it tentatively, but it was far more tolerable than it was previously. He remained visibly shaken as he stared down at his arm on the floor and felt nauseous knowing he was now incomplete.
"Why did you help me?" the Zeltron asked bewilderingly.
"Because it's the right thing to do," replied the Zabrak, much to Sage's confusion.
"I know you've had a rough life, Sage. But it doesn't have to be like that forever," Ria'd said, swiftly changing the topic. "I'm not trying to put you in my debt, I never asked for anything. I only do what I do because I want to help, not because I want something in return. That's honestly what I think this universe needs, more people willing to help."
"You're naive,' Sage replied. "Most of the galaxy don't care. Everyone is selfish and nothing will change."
"But it can change. Not overnight, maybe not even in our lifetimes. But once the seed of kindness is planted and allowed to grow, the tree gets bigger and bigger and gets noticed, accepted, and things start to change. And let me tell you from my experience, people tend to like that kind of change," Ria'd said. "Sometimes a little act of kindness makes a big difference in a galaxy such as this."
"Like the difference between you cutting my arm off and killing me?" Sage inquired.
"Well… not exactly what I had in mind, but, sure, why not? It all has to start somewhere, right?" Ria'd smiled at him and sure enough, Sage felt a warm feeling emerge in his core . "I don't know what happened to you, Sage. But whatever it was that made you see the universe in this manner, I'm sorry."
"It's not your fault," Sage responded softly.
"I know, but it's something I thought you needed to hear," the Zabrak gently voiced.
Sage suddenly found it hard to make eye contact with him. "So what do we do about this?" he said, gesturing to the forgotten city with his one remaining arm. "Arcona and Taldryan are after Jedi artifacts. I'd say this is a pretty big artifact."
"We don't tell anyone about this," the Jedi answered. "This will be our little secret. I don't trust either Clan with what is here. The scrolls were destroyed and you lost your arm in the resulting cave-in. That's what you will say, and I'll just drop off Taldryan's radar."
"How do you know I'll play along?" the Scoundrel inquired, raising an eyebrow.
The only thing the Zabrak could do was shrug.
"I don't," he answered. "But I hope you will do the right thing. I know you can."
Ria'd didn't say anything more, and simply left Sage alone to try and find a way out. Whatever happened would be Sage's choice to make.
He just hoped he made the right one.
Positive Take-Aways
Fantastic opening post. You do a great job of drawing on the surroundings to build up a cinematic feel to your setting; then, you go that much further when you bring in the characters in no little way. You give them vibrant personalities right from the start, and even manage to get in more than one of your opponent’s Aspects, one of them in a rather amusing way—nothing like calling the fashion sense of the Jedi into question.
Needs Improvement
The post was mostly solid, though I would suggest some wording changes here and there for clarity’s sake. One such example is the following:
This would have been bettered worded as:
As much as it is a minor change, it just flows a little bit better and comes up numerous times throughout your post, where perhaps a slight change in wording could have upped the quality of your writing (though it is up there as it is.)