The hum and crackle of their weapons was the only sound disturbing the serenity of the courtyard as the two opponents sized each other up with new eyes.
“You do not need me,” Strong agreed, circling back to her earlier words while carefully picking his way around her defences. “But you still see me. Then you must want it.”
“I do not vant you,” Tali replied, the tip of her saber-glaive trimming the grass as she shifted in response.
He recognized his disadvantage in reach, something he rarely had to contend with in melee, and proceeded to poke and prod her defences. A step closer, and her weapon twitched, her stance squared. Another, and her forearms tensed for action. A step back, she did not follow, or relent. She was firmly on the defensive.
“Not me, perhaps. But you do enjoy the companionship, do you not?” he continued, launching a conservative swipe at her midriff, the riot baton crackling with tongues of lightning.
“Perhaps,” Tali replied tersely, the tip of her weapon rising like a swan to bat aside his weapon and force him back. He duly did so, slinking back as she rebuffed his advances, only to find renewed purchase for his feet and launching a blistering counter of his own.
The Twi’lek danced aside of the charging bull, their weapons meeting in a flash of plasma discharge, but it was clear who’d yielded this time.
“Miss Sroka, I expected better. Some honesty. Tell me I have earned at least as much?” Strong pressed as he swiveled around the baton in his hand. She might have reach, but up close, he still held the advantage.
“Very vell,” she sighed. “I do enjoy the company,” she admitted.
“Good,” he smiled. A first victory.
Tali sensed his smugness and didn’t like it. He felt confident, and she would have none of it. The Force flowed through her as one moment she held her guard, the next her lavender legs were fleeting across the grass, golden plasma shimmering in the midday sun as she lunged her glaive at his chest.
The baton rose up at the last moment, driving the tip of her weapon aside. His off-hand curling into a fist, and flexing back to a flat palm as he remembered himself, he sent a jab below her guard at her armored waist. Or he would have, had the Twi’lek not mirrored the motion with a thrust of telekinetic energy that sent the Chiss sprawling backwards.
“Vas this the big breakthrough you vere hoping for?” Tali cut dryly, sweeping her weapon around. “Because it’s rather unimpressive.”
“No ma’am, I would not dare to leave a lady unimpressed,” he replied with a confident chuckle, picking himself up with green skidmarks on his blue behind. “Now that we have established you enjoy the company in general, the question becomes: what do you seek of it?”
“Vhat do you mean seek?” Tali pressed, eyes narrowing. “Company is company, I hate to be alone...”
“Not everyone is like that, ma’am Sroka. Some prefer their distance,” he replied, backing away from the advancing Twi’lek.
“Most beings are social creatures, Strong,”
“That they are, Miss Sroka, and you perhaps more than most.”
“So you don’t think I am just lonely?” She swiped at him. He dodged. A follow-up. A parry. She broke the engagement. The scent of ozone lingered.
“I do not think you can be just anything, such a breathtaking woman as yourself,” he panted softly. She had not only reach, but also speed on her side, he’d noticed and reacting to her every strike was leaving him perilously close to being late to the parry. He knew he had to press the attack.
“Spare the flatteries for Lucine, Strong. I’m not here for them,” she stated.
“Yes, of course. Other women might seek companionship for flattery, or vanity, or any number of social boons. But you are different. You are aware of these things, yet you choose to reject them. My every attempt at Garmis chivalry falters before you—”
“Are you trying to make me pity you? It’s not going to vork.” She jabbed at him again, stepping boldly towards him, but he backed away, almost stumbling over the dislodged slab from the footpath.
“—but the moments you seem delighted are the ones I feel flustered, disarmed, wrong-footed.”
She could have pressed her advantage, but paused. “So you say I vant to make a fool of you?”
“No, nothing so pedestrian,” he replied as he recovered. “You… simply prefer when I act on instinct, when my words aren’t so measured.” His voice trailed off as he felt himself reaching for something profound. She did not like that one bit.
A sweeping arc of golden plasma cut through his introspections, the blade of her glaive slamming into his hastily raised baton with enough force to make even the mountain of Chiss quake. He braced his weapon with both arms, and wrestled her back with a shove.
“So vhat if I do? Not everyone in Arcona enjoys playing pretendt,” she panted. That strike had taken much out of her.
“No, of course not. And though you certainly could play it well, you prefer to be honest, genuine...”
“That’s sounding an awful lot like flattery.” She brought her weapon around for another go at breaching his faltering defences.
“I mean it sincerely,” he protested, ducking behind the iridescent glow of his baton in a mockery of his trusty shield. The attack never came, the Twi’lek instead struggling to conceal her amusement at the towering Chiss trying to hide behind such an insufficient barrier.
“Fine, yes. I do enjoy your company most vhen you’re being a bit less… you,” she relaxed her shoulders and gestured at his general being.
It forced a smile upon his lips. “I hope I do not disappoint you then, ma’am Sroka. I hear from many that my person can often be quite much.”
“I don’t mindt the challenge,” she struck back. “As long as there’s something vorthwhile at the endt of it.”
“Something such as…?” The question was loaded to the brim.
“Such as...” she struggled for words. “I don’t know!” she spat, averting her gaze in frustration. “This isn’t getting us, me, anywhere!”
He saw his opening, and took it.
“Begging your pardon, but I must disagree. I believe we are nearing something,” he rumbled, charging recklessly at the distracted Twi’lek. She had no desire for this exchange, deflecting his swipe while giving ground.
“Strong...” she muttered through gritted teeth. Whatever joviality she’d found in the fight had vanished, now forced firmly on her back foot.
“In fact, I feel I must insist. What do you find worthwhile?” The Chiss pressed his attack, unrelenting, unremorseful. He was a tidal wave crashing upon a lone islet, a force of nature as he sought to pin down his elusive prey.
“I’m not…!” Her reply was cut short by a sharp grunt as the shafts of their weapons met. His sheer momentum drove her back, her feet slipping on the grass. She was on her last legs, and not even the Force could hold him back much longer.
He went in for the kill.
“Honesty,” he chided, “You demand it from others, but not yourself? You prefer to live in a lie?”
“Yes!” she cried, strength vanishing from her limbs as she sank to her knees, the saber-glaive slipping amidst the straws.
He was taken aback by the sudden admission. He had not expected his verbal thrust to sink so deep. What should have been the coup de grace never landed.
“Yes, damn you, I prefer to live in a lie!” she spat back, tears streaking down her downcast cheeks. “A lie that I couldt have vhat I lost. Vhat I never hadt. That I couldt be vhole again, for the first time. A person, a companion, an equal. I don’t vant anything from you, Strong.” She looked up, amber eyes reddened by grief. “I vant to be something vith you… Myself.”
He stumbled, her gaze striking through his heart like a blaster bolt and gutting him. He had no words. He had nothing.
So he did the only thing he could, and sank to his knees beside her.
“I just vant… an honest companion by my side. Someone vho sees me for vho I am, not vhat I am. Andt I vant to be accepted as their equal.”
“My lady Sroka, you are far more tha—” he tried, his hoarse voice cracking.
“Equal,” she insisted harshly, even through her tears.
“You are equal to any one of us,” he offered. “And I am honored to be equal to you.” He extended his arms wide.
“Thank you, Strong,” she whispered as she pressed her forehead against his chest.
He wrapped his arms around her slender shoulders, carefully embracing her. The moment lingered, and during it he had a realization.
“The noodles,” he murmured.
“Vhat about them?”
“You insisted we split the bill...”
She held her tongue.
“Like equals,” “That was why you were so angry with me, was it not?”
“It soundts silly vhen you say it...” she muttered.
“No,” he insisted in a soft baritone. “I think it sounds just right.”
What Went Well
As usual, you’ve got a strong grasp on most areas that are relevant to the ACC. You did an excellent job setting up the battle’s premise in a way that tied it to the characters’ motivations, and the premise itself was a refreshing change of pace. Your descriptions were in-depth, the combat was plentiful and well-paced, and I couldn’t find any issues with the “mechanical” side of the battle.
Room for Growth
The one thing I did notice on the Syntax end is that you’ve got a habit of putting commas at the end of certain sentences when they should be periods. For example, “Strong grunted and fell back a step, chuckling painfully” should end with a period because (without getting too grammar-nerd about it) it expresses a complete idea. There was also a little weirdness around verb tense. “Then he was in the nearby fountain, Strong realizing…” mixes past and present tense, and should probably have been “realized”, either as two separate sentences or with an “and” after the comma.
Suggestions
Proofread, or if you don’t have the chance to sit through a full proofreading, at least double-check where you’ve got commas vs. periods at the ends of sentences.