“You’re giving me a choice?” The large dark eyes of Aleister’s apprentice studied his face and feelings for any indication that this was a trick or test of some sort. Finding nothing, she replied tentatively, “I’ll kill it… I started this fight. I should finish it,” the young Twi’lek’s eyes betrayed her sadness, but her resolve to see this through was set hard on her soft cyan features. “Now... how am I supposed to get on top of it while it’s flailing around blindly?” she asked, a hint of accusation tainting the sweetness of her voice.
Sinya liked to rely on misdirection and stealth to do tactical strikes on her unsuspecting victims before fading into a conjured shadow mist. Then rinse and repeat until the enemy loses the will to fight. This rancor was still plenty willing, but being half blind, it was attacking in completely random unpredictable ways.
“I’m sure you’ll figure something out.” the dashing older Zeltron replied. “I can’t give you all the answers. Where’s the fun in that?” His pink lips curled into a sardonic smile as his orange eyes observed the rising ire of his young apprentice. It was clear she had stopped having fun, which meant his fun was just beginning. Now he had two creatures to torment. “Listen to it howl. It must be in complete agony.” His deep monotone feigned concern, but his face betrayed his elation at the creature’s suffering. He also knew that bringing attention to it increased the Twi’lek’s discomfort a hundred fold. After all, she was the cause of the most painful injury.
“I’ll distract it, while you cut the poor thing’s life short.” He smirked as he ran out from behind the rock, activating the red plasma blade with the telltale snap hiss of a lightsaber. The sound immediately drew the grotesque creature’s attention.
“Wait! I’m not…” the apprentice sighed heavily closing her eyes, breathing deeply, and trying to clear her mind. The air smelled of methane and loamy earth mixed with the acrid scent of blood and burned flesh. She could feel the beast behind her and the bright flame of her master’s presence darting in and out around it. She felt his elation at the creature’s pain and the added chargrine that it bothered her. She let go of that annoyance, it didn’t change anything. She let the Force flow through her, directing her thoughts… from the creature... to the rock behind her.
Her eyes snapped open as she realized the opportunity that was fast approaching. She stood, then easily leapt two meters straight up to land atop the rock. She was just in time to see the rancor stumble backwards on its injured heel, bringing it within range for her to leap once more onto its massive head.
She landed gracefully, immediately pressing the little silver activation stud on her lightsaber. The purple blade sprang to life as she thrust it down into the creature’s skull to end the creature’s misery. That’s when the plan fell apart. The rancor bucked as the blade met the resistance of its thick skull, dislodging the inexperienced hunter.
Sinya fell, her lightsaber fell, the rancor did not fall. The agile girl managed to nimbly transfer the kinetic energy of the landing into a roll, recovering just in time to catch the back of a giant meaty paw to the midsection. Her small light frame was launched several meters away, leaving her in a stunned heap on the mossy floor....
Sinya didn’t know how long she had been out. When she came to, the rancor was gone. She sat up scanning the ground for her lightsaber, which somehow was already back on her belt.
“Whoa, calm down, kid. You took a big hit there.” Aleister handed her a canteen. “The rancor ran off after it bitch slapped you,” he said chuckling.
Sinya took in the rest of the situation as she brought the canteen to her lips. The jotaz was unconscious and bound, there was a new, rancor sized hole in the wall. She could tell from the tracks that it was dragging one leg. Dusk was begi…”pffft! What the hell is this swill!” she said as she sprayed the caustic fluid from her mouth, interrupting her thoughts.
“Moonshine. Good for clearing the sinuses and numbing the pain,” he answered while collecting the rest of the gear. “Let’s go before it gets dark.”
The two of them worked together, concentrating on the jotaz, feeling their mystical connection to the creature and to each other. Without any physical contact, they lifted the large mottled grey creature and guided it back to the landing zone.
Night was falling quickly by the time the shuttle touched down and the jotaz secured in the cargo bay. Sinya paused to take one last look at the ruined facility as the shadows began taking over the landscape. Exhausted physically, mentally, and emotionally, she turned back to the shuttle. Up the loading ramp strode two sets of mud covered leather boots.
Positive Takeaways
You did a good job setting them up for the match, both in laying out the Master-Apprentice dynamic and in noting the creature they needed to find. It was good to see a little bit of Sinya's Survival Skill displayed as she looks at the marks left by the beasts while they're tracking their target.
Congrats, you got me to flinch and yell at a Google Document.
Can Be Improved
There were several grammar issues present that distracted slightly. Of particular note, I would advise you be careful to remember commas when listing adjectival descriptions, and be careful of sentence fragments surrounding verb tense changes.
Mind your possessives. This is a very common error, its vs it's, or "it is." My general suggestion is to ban yourself from using contractions until you've memorized the difference. That way, you won't be able to make the mistake, because it will always be, "it is" and that won't fit when saying "it is spindly limbs." So you're forced to go, "oh, it's its."
You're using two adjectives to describe Sinya here, blue-skinned and small. You either need a comma between them, to list them, or you need to have an "and" between them if you're not going to be listing any more adjectives. If you had more than two, you'd keep using commas to list until you were done.
Your other major issue for this post is the total lack of combat between either the characters or the characters and any creature. In the ACC, a lack of combat is a big Story detractor. Aleister abusing a monkey-lizard doesn't actually count for that. Even one strike at the jotaz would have checked the box for them here. As is, we don't meet the creature indicated at all.