Nine seconds.
The panther braced, tracking her movement coming for it.
Eight seconds.
She slid across the ground, crouched low.
Seven seconds.
Its claws raked easily into her leathers, snagging, yanking, staggering her as they caught in layers of furs and straps. She choked and scrambled, knuckles white on her dagger.
She didn't need to kill it. She probably couldn't on her own if she tried. She just needed time to get to Ruka. Together, they could do this. Together, he had to be okay. He was just ten seconds away.
Six seconds.
Her armor tore, her throat bruised, and she felt the rounded outer curve of claws brushing over the knobs of her spine.
But it didn't matter.
She had room to move.
She wasn't lunging anymore, just falling forward.
Five seconds.
Her knees hit the floor, scraping. Her arm went up. Her dagger pressed in, half-bouncing off the elastic tension of sinew layered by fat and hide. Then, its tip broke the surface and all that tension released and it sunk as if sucked inside, warm and wet.
Four seconds.
She tensed her abdomen, her arm, her shoulder. She dragged. Down and back and in. Not through the stomach, or the heart, but closer to the haunches, tucked directly up under the right hind leg and slicing through the tendons.
The limb went out immediately, buckling and crumpling under its own weight like sticks burned down to empty black husks for a fire, collapsing in the breeze over the dunes. The panther followed, nearly crushing her under its bulk yet again.
Hamstrung.
Three seconds.
She kept her grip on her dagger through sheer force of will and shouldered out from under its rear as it scrabbled and yowled, stomping at her, panicked by its loss of mobility. Her chin banged and ground into the rubbled floor. Her bloodied hand ripped open wider when she used it to claw herself forward. Her shoulders screamed, like they were being pulled slowly from their sockets. Her fierce wiggling freed her battered hips.
Two seconds.
The panther snapped jaws at her, furious, spittle flying, just as she got one foot under her. She yanked the other free and stumbled, bright blue eyes locked on the door. Her leg caught. Pressure crushed at her ankle. She screamed and kept yanking, and her boot came off.
One second.
Sera plowed on, one bare foot slapping against tile, kicking off of it. She launched herself forward.
Red light flooded her vision. The door opened. Ruka laid on the other side. For a skip of her heartbeats, she thought him dead.
Then she saw him propping himself up against the wall where he'd dragged himself, just enough to leverage his head up, his good hand lifted.
Sera fell into him. The panther lurched after her. Ruka swung his fist out like a punch, and a telekinetic hammer-blow followed, blasting into the beast and sending it careening back down the red-washed hall and slamming into the end of its length back the way they'd come.
The lights went back out. The door closed again. Ten seconds had already passed when the previous had seemed like forever.
The Mirialan didn't wait. He twisted his raised fist, veins bulging under his eyes and forehead as he let out a wail of effort, and the awful sound of crumpling metal followed. The Huntress looked over her shoulder to see the doors pinching in on themselves at the seam, like foil. As they both breathed raggedly, the bloody light came back and the doors tried to reopen, but they were buckled and crumpled around each other at their lips. Machineworks in the mechanisms screeched, and something popped and sparked and shrieked somewhere in the paneling. Again the power went out, and it stopped. Again it came back on, and the doors screamed some more, but couldn't open. Sera smelled plastic and burning, faintly.
"Y-you…you!"
Ruka's voice recalled her attention now that the imminent threat was delayed. He was glaring at her, but it was a weak thing, and his expression was so clearly cracked open and worried that she didn't bother to argue. The Zabrak just hugged him fiercely instead. The man winced, and she winced back, all apologies.
"Sorry, sorry! I'm alright, see? It's okay. I told you, we're getting through this, together," she assured. "We are hunters. Not prey."
His gaze searched her a while more, lingering on her missing boot and torn chestplate, dun hides split around the shoulders, some laces sliced. She was bruising already, she knew; her pale sand skin showed everything. But rather than rebuke, the Mirialan just gave a tight nod.
"Need to...move," he grunted, a little low. "Get...get out of here. Some….mmmnwhere more...secure."
Sera glanced at the door. "Only way forward is through. Come on, here."
Their combined efforts got the shredded Sith back upright, but it was a near thing. Even with the Force strengthening their muscles, even with the will to fight that flowed through Sera and the unbending determination Ruka had to keep standing, the gifts of their Ancestors could only do so much. They followed the sound of thunder through the halls, turning here then there, chasing that rumble and praying for freedom as it grew louder, knowing it wasn't enough.
The venom was winning.
Ruka's bad arm hung limp and useless, flopping against his side, the coils of his still-attached skin bouncing like curls of multicolored ribbon. His other was barely functioning anymore. His legs dragged, then went out, and they both went down when Sera couldn't quite catch him.
"Sera—" Ruka tried, and she growled at him, hooking her arms under his armpits and heaving. She dragged him the last few feet into the next room, what seemed like it might have been a storage area for databanks. It didn't really matter, given it was now another part of the swamp, flooded and muddy and open. Intrepid fungi and mosses already grew on the machines. But that wasn't the important part. The important part was that the roof had been caved in — or maybe broken open from the inside — and the sky yawned above them, black and swirling. The flashes of lightning looked like hope.
"Look!" the Zabrak hissed, her exclamation smothered by breathlessness from her efforts. She hauled Ruka over to the driest patch available and propped him up against yet another wall, flopping down next to him as her legs quivered. She just needed a minute to catch her breath. "See, look, a way out! We've got this—"
His eyes were closed. His chest was still.
His eyes were closed.
His chest was still.
No.
No, no, no.
"RUKA!" Sera yelled in the man's face, and breathed again when there was a twitch behind his eyelids. "RUKA, WAKE UP!"
Her fists knotted in his robes, shaking, hands shaking, her hands, shaking him—
"Nnn…" the Mirialan groaned, and his eyelids peeled back open, wavering, drifting from focusing on her.
"Hey! Hey! Oi! Ruka! Focus. Stay awake, yeah? Focus, come on. Usredotatenc!"
Ruka's eyes rolled towards the sound, and he smiled. Or he tried to. His face wasn't quite holding the shape, and he'd gotten much paler.
"Smart girl," he told her, slurred nearly to nonsense. "Strong girl. My...little warrior…"
"Ancaro," she pleaded. "Stay. Awake!"
The Zabrak swung her arm back and brought it forward again, the slap clapping across his cheek. It was harder than she wanted to strike him right then, but she needed it to hurt. Ruka yelped, a wounded sound, but it seemed to wake him up a little.
"You have to stay awake. Ancaro, don't you give up on me now. Don't you dare. Don't you leave too!" she cried at him. She meant the words to be a shout, powerful and confident and commanding, like the leader she was supposed to be. They broke to pieces instead, in six different places, cracking when her voice did with pain. It wasn't an order; it was a hiccup. She was begging, because she'd already lost Koren and she couldn't lose her brother again, she couldn't. "What about Cora and Noga and Leda? You wouldn't leave them, never! D-don't leave t-t-them! If I-I'm not good enough then don't— don't l-leave them! Hey! Cora! Noga and Leda! Stay! Awake!"
"Quiet," Ruka snapped, then mumbled. "Qu... quit tha'...right...n...now. You. You are...enough. Y'enough, Ser." He wheezed, panting for each rasp of air. His eyes were so sunken, hazy but determined when they peered at her from under his fevered brow. "I pr'm...nnn...I promise I'm not...trying this t-time. I'm trying...t' live."
"How?" the Zabrak snapped, desperate and angry and scared. Her friend was dying. He needed medicine and help and she wasn't enough, even if he said so. She wasn't.
His calloused, scarred hand fumbled to cup her cheek, so gentle, thumb stuttering there to wipe away tears. He shushed a low croon, and it was so much like a lullaby on a cold Iridonian desert night, tucked against a different broad chest, that she had to close her eyes. His call made her open them again. "Sera...Serami, lookit...me." She did. His hand was wet with his blood, and it smeared a print on her face. "I...t-trust you, Sera. You...can do this. You...you can heal m-me, okay? We got...gotta try."
Serami. She knew that much. She had learned a word or two, just from listening to him, just like he'd learned a bit from her. He called her ra'tueria, little warrior. He called Qyreia and Eilen and Karran and Morra his. And now he'd called her his too.
He trusted her. He was relying on her.
Sera's jaw locked. Her bright eyes fixed on his fading ones. She thought of her Ancestors, of her brother, and Nitha, and the parents who had not loved her enough to stay. She thought of Ruka in front of her, who did. She thought of her clanmates, her new family. She thought of Ashla and Bogan, and of the rising sun of her tribe.
She could do this. They were not prey, and they weren't just hunters. They were light and dark too.
Thunder rumbled and lightning flashed. Their blood mixed where she clamped hands over the cuts in Ruka's arm and shoulder, scabbed over now from bacta, the spots where the infection had begun. On another world, in a different life, another time, there could have been sand, sun, incense and ink; she could have made him her kin truly, or he made her his. The words came to mind unbidden, ones she'd shared with Karran when he'd lost the last markers of his father, his clan.
Under the eyes of our ancestors, under the auspice of our tribes, we bond our honor together; in fallow and in famine, always; in hunt, and in harvest, always; in victory and defeat, courage and fear; in the hardest times, together we draw near; parted not by angered breath nor separated by death; our blood and ink, our honor — together.
"Together," the Zabrak promised, and smiled, pouring all of herself and her focus and will and hope into the Force, into her friend, guiding it to do what it needed to do. She could not fix all the damage, but the poison…
Ruka almost smiled back at her before his eyes rolled back and he went slack.
He's been here before.
"Do you know what 'ancaro' means, Ru?"
"...what?..."
"...It means guardian ..."
A double heartbeat. Pressed to his chest. Thump thump, thump thump.
He remembered that.
Thump thump, thump thump.
Years ago, when Noga was just past his first birthday, proud owner of a single budding tooth and horror now that he'd started to pull himself up for walking attempts. Leda was just a newborn, premature and pale and tiny. Her toes had been crooked and long on one foot, still were, her head small. She barely seemed to grow, and she had trouble breathing sometimes that the street clinic doc said was because of a hole in her heart. Said it was because of Mama drinking. Said she'd be lucky to live to the third month.
Thump thump, thump thump.
He'd held them both to his chest whenever he got a chance, slept that way. He'd thought, Noga and him were going to know her and love her as close as they could as long as they had with her. He'd spent two weeks nearly sleepless just laying there with their two heartbeats, choking back sobs so he wouldn't shake them awake, mourning while she was still alive. It felt like drowning dry.
Mama hadn't even held her once since the birth he'd delivered, and he wasn't inclined to let her either. She left them alone to it though, going out to her clubs, to dance to her own thudding beat. He had his.
Thump thump, thump thump.
Two heartbeats against his chest. Weak and strong. Struggling.
But Leda had lived, and he'd done what he had to to afford the surgery for the hole, and she'd lived and he got to know what it was like when their two heartbeats piled next to his at three and four, at eight and nine, at thirteen and twelve with Cora's right there too.
Thump thump, thump thump.
Two heartbeats.
He'd protect them.
The children.
Three heartbeats.
Cora.
Four, five, six.
Eilen, Karran, Qyreia.
Seven, eight.
Satsi and Turel.
Ten.
Sera.
Sera, in his arms. No, her arm around him. On him. Holding him close. Holding on to him. So few people had ever held on to him.
"Ra'tueria," he croaked, broken back open. A breath, wet, stuttering. His heart was a race running on nothing at all. But she was giving him more. He just had to hold on. Reach back. He clutched at that thought, clutched at her, palms slipping on her forearms, hers slipping on his. He reached out, and touched his mind to hers, his heart to hers, his soul, melded together — together, she said — in the Force.
He reached.
Sera tried.
Sweat dripped down her brow, pooling around her horns, parting in rivulets, itching at her scalp. She swayed in place, and more of her weight ended up pressed into Ruka and the wall behind him as she gave him more and more of her energy, as she offered the venom something else to burn. It was minutes. It was hours. She didn't bother trying to close all the many lacerations; instead she focused on purging the toxins.
And Ruka— Ruka wasn't leaving her this time. He wasn't trying to throw himself on his sword, or off a cliff, while she could do nothing but watch. He wasn't leaning limp against a wall, welcoming a panther's bite. He wasn't leaving her.
He was reaching out, hoping she would catch him. Trusting her to.
Sera reached back with two hearts and two hands and grabbed on with all that she had.
"Aaaaah!" All at once the Mirialan jerked upright, slackened muscles seizing now that they could coil again. They nearly headbutted one another. His breathing was labored and rough in great gasps. Sera's own was just as uneven, exhausted. "Kriff, kriff— ahhh. S-Sera...are you okay?"
"...fine," the Zabrak answered after a moment to wheeze, tipping her head up to beam at him. "You?"
"Been better," the Sith answered, gingerly testing his range of motion. Tiny warbles of pain escaped his throat with each movement, but he was moving again, even sluggish. "I still— everything's stiff. Numb but less. I...ahh, feels like...been run over." He lifted both hands in front of him, and both arms shook badly. His better hand curled and flexed. The other didn't. "It's enough. I can move, I can breathe, it's...enough. Thank you, Sera."
The Arconan wiped tiredly at her eyes, her face. She only ended up smearing more of their blood around. Ruka noticed.
"Get...ugh...here." Whimpering again, he reached behind himself and struggled to free a bacta canister from straps at his lower back, below the gladius. She reached to help. "For your hand."
"Your wounds need it too."
"One of us needs to be able to really fight. Fix...your hand. And your leg."
He nodded down at her bare foot when she blinked in surprise, glancing to see red scrapes, small holes from mauling teeth. Sera hadn't even realized the injury, so determined towards saving her friend. She opened the kit and shook out the three doses, keeping two and waving the last in his face, poking his nose with it. The Mirialan gave her a look but took the thing, and helped her slather the gel over her tattered hand and foot while she dabbed at the lesions on his leg ineffectively.
"I don't think that thing is dead," the Sith commented at length while they worked and the lightning kept flashing above, rain pounding through the wide-rent gap. They kept getting splashed, even in their partially sheltered spot. "Can you sense it?"
The Zabrak could. Stretching out her mind revealed her almost immediately, a seething, scared, hungry mass of agony and anger. It broke her hearts. But her hearts were also hardened for the hunt, knowing it was them or the panther, furious how the beast had nearly taken her friend away.
"Yeah. She's...still kicking. Somehow." She frowned. They'd given her a dozen different wounds between all their weapons and powers, and still. Part of her felt a deep, ancient respect for that. The sand-panther was truly a foe worthy of honor. The rest of her was horrified. "You were right, we should get back to the ship. Regroup. This isn't a hunt for two. We need a tribe."
They both looked around, back down the hall, then at another exit that went deeper somewhere into the complex, then to the open roof.
"I'll throw you, far as I can," Ruka mumbled, squinting up at the rain that would drown them if it could. He patted at the repulsor device on his waist. "You can wear this. The belt will let you land. Then you come back for me and—"
"—I'll pull you up!" Some excitement, hope, flickered back to life in her voice. She balled her fists, forgetting for a moment her fatigue and the ache of barely-closed wounds. "She won't be able to chase us now! She's stuck down here. I crippled her."
"You brilliant thing. Good job."
From there the pair worked as quickly as their battered and torn bodies allowed. Tears rolled down Ruka's cheeks when he twisted his back enough for them to get his belt off, but neither of them said anything about it. Once Sera was secure and the repulsorlift generators were humming, the Sith sent her soaring in a telekinetic grip, tossed as if by a god's hand. The Zabrak felt that grip disappear as soon as she was over the lip of the roof, out of his sight, but it was enough. She sailed a little farther on her momentum and felt the yank and lurch as the belt did its work before she slammed into the swamp.
Running back, Sera found Ruka right where she'd left him, looking up at her, waiting faithfully. Her own telekinetic hold was a little bit clumsier, but she guided him up to her with both her hands, and he met the ground without issue. She nearly tackled him in another hug of relief, but remembered better this time.
"I'll scout us a path," the Huntress volunteered, searching the horizon. The storm beat down on them, washing away blood and dirt and, unfortunately, the bacta too. The wind roared in their ears. It was so dark, broken only by the glare of lightning fracturing the sky. "Maybe I could find some herbs too. Something to chew for a boost, for strength."
"I don't know about eating random plants…" Ruka began to protest, as he always did about imbibing seemingly anything from drinks to the flora some of their more adventurous or alchemical fellows offered, but relented, "but alright. If you think it'll help."
Sera nodded, confident, and drew her Zabraki dagger once more. Ruka, similarly, took out his emerald one.
"Stay here, mister. I'll be back." Worry lingered in her tone. The Mirialan's face softened.
"I'll be here," he replied. "If you want...well. We could bond. I don't want it to distract you, but if I'm just waiting here, I can maintain it."
That offer set something alight in the Zabrak's gut and hearts. Her bonds were her everything, and she gave them freely, to all her friends, happy to connect their minds; but Ruka was hesitant, careful, keeping his guard close. She hadn't known him to do so with anyone but his husband if it wasn't life or death.
"Yeah!" she agreed, and felt their souls twine again as Ruka reached out with his mind and she reached back. Their hearts synced. Their breathing. The colors they saw and the truths they sung. Her toothy grin nearly split her face. The Mirialan stayed relatively still on the ground, posed for meditation, dagger on his knee. He peeked up at her.
"Go on, then. We're still in danger here."
"We're together," Sera corrected, and turned to prowl into the dark and dank, eyes ever-roving with Ruka's presence a steady thing under her skin. She felt better about physically separating this way. Bonded in a battlemind, they weren't alone.
It was happening. Together, they would get through this after all.
Ruka watched Sera fade into the morass of Uskil's tempest and tried not to sigh. He was swallowing dread every few seconds, clinging on to relief, telling himself she would be okay, that they would both be. That he could keep her safe, and still go home to his family.
He thumbed his weapon, flexing the hand over and over just to reassure that that one, at least, he could use. Move. Feel. The complete helplessness, frozen and suffocating slowly in his own body, was gone. It was fine. He was fine. They'd be fine. Fine, fine, fine. He clenched his eyes shut and told himself to stay calm. Connected, Sera would be able to feel now how very much he wasn't.
They weren't out of peril yet, but they were safe from the damned mutant beast. The two of them had only made it down into the Hot Labs thanks to the Force, and the panther only because it had landed on them. Falling in was easy. But getting out? There was no way. That pit had been far too deep, the ceiling far too high. Even if it wasn't crippled like Sera said, there was no way the thing could have made that jump, ever. Not out of the first room and not out of the one they'd escaped from. No way, ever.
...ever. No way it could have made that jump.
It occurred to him, all at once—
The broken roof wasn't how the panther had gotten out the first time.
Ruka opened his eyes.
Pale feline pupils stared back at him, an inch away. Wet, hot breath huffed across his face.
Sera, he thought through their link, before lightning flashed and it lunged.
What Went Well
There are a lot of good things in this post. As usual, your characterisation is excellent. I remember when you posted the first version of Ruka’s rant about animals on Telegram, and it made me smile to see it here. Beyond “just” making sure the characters seem like real people, you made it possible for me to trace the contours of the story by following each character’s emotional state, from Ruka’s apprehension and Sera’s optimism at the beginning of the battle, to Ruka’s stubborn determination and Sera’s defiance when the sand-panther began its attack, to Ruka’s flagging hope and Sera’s obvious distress when they realise Ruka’s been poisoned. I can’t say I’m surprised by how well you wove the emotional journey together with the physical events, but that doesn’t make it any less of a highlight.
As far as the “external” story goes, the depth of your descriptions is incredible; I loved the reference to “black fabric on black fabric”. The combat is as fast-paced and vivid as I’ve come to expect from you. You did a great job of maintaining the dramatic tension after the battle was over by transitioning into a chase scene, introducing the dilemma around how Ruka and Sera were going to deal with Ruka being poisoned, and the sudden reappearance of the panther at the end of the post.
Room for Growth
On the Realism side, you got one detractor and one comment. The detractor comes from how Ruka inflicts a “deep, angry, smoking slash” across the sand-panther’s back with his lightsaber. From the plain language, I’d assume that “deep” means “deep enough to penetrate the energy-resistant hide” and that the panther would still be wounded, but there didn’t seem to be any actual damage, even after Sera jumped on to the panther’s back.
The Realism comment concerns how Ruka was caught by the sand-panther’s second pounce. (I didn’t give you a detractor for this because you’d already established that the sand-panther was fast enough to catch Ruka even when he did have advance warning.) The ACC interprets Precognition as applying to individual threats/attacks rather than generally dangerous situations, due to how the CS Guide refers to “even as intentions shift in a single moment” and the power allowing the user to prepare counter-actions. Since Ruka had obviously sensed the sand-panther’s first attack (even if he wasn’t able to avoid it completely), it’s not clear to me why he wouldn’t have sensed the second one coming, and maybe been able to mitigate the damage.
The two Syntax errors I caught were:
The “spoke” here should’ve been “said”. “Spoke” refers to the action of speaking without including the content of the speech. “Said” refers to the action of speaking and includes the content of someone’s speech.
Tasting what? I didn’t give you a detractor for that, since there’s nothing really wrong with that sentence, but it doesn’t make much sense.
Besides that, I’d like to protest your use of “closeby” and “flied”. A dictionary confirmed that they’re both real (if irregularly-used) words, and fighting the urge to correct them is making my eye twitch. :P
Suggestions/Other Notes
Go into a bit more detail about why a character wouldn’t have sensed an incoming threat with Precognition (maybe Ru was preoccupied with the crappy weather or his concern for Sera, or distracted by the pain of his injuries, or whatever), and don’t use “spoke’ in dialogue tags.