Croaking amphibians. Chirping, buzzing insects. The sound of light rain created a clear image of their wet surroundings. A speeder zoomed away behind the duo of Arconans. They were at the edge of the Uskil swamps, which really was just a lot of sludge, water, bugs and slimy creatures. Ahead of them were broken down fences, walls, and watchtowers that should’ve kept alien wildlife at bay.
Further, beyond the collapsed defenses, they could see massive domes, some more intact than others. These honeycomb patterned hemispheres must have once kept the different habitats separated. The one nearest to them seemed to be the largest, its panels shattered in so many places probably by a combination of beasts and fallen Nesolat debris.
Who better to join in for a wild hunt than the idealistic and remarkably reliable Sera Kaern? Alaisy Tir’eivra had taken her on a mission with promises of adventure, and a much needed distraction from Arconan life. Life had been complicated as of late, heavy laden with emotions of sadness and worry. The Zabrak’s dual hearts yearned for the Iridonian tribal life, windy canyons and the planet’s untamed, brutal lands.
Acceptance of the tall, proud Sith’s offer came easy, even if the symbiote clad woman seemed dangerous and untrustworthy even at the best of times. It gave the youthful Marauder some reassurance, however, that it was the Headmistress of the Shadow Academy that really sent them out there.
Heavy platforms splashed and sloshed through the muddy water. They were so tall that it kept the latex-clad woman’s feet above water, yet still appropriately sized for her ridiculous body length. Sera followed behind her, eager to take the path that the Sith created through the reeds. Occasionally, the armored Zabraki woman would hop from one tiny dry island to another, her tribal cloak dancing with her. Tir’eivra merely stomped through with her heeled boots, her own hooded mantle gliding through the wetland with a war-like plume of dark, straight hair sticking out.
Every speck of dirt slid right off of the shiny symbiotic-latex. Her suit was completely sealed, without any seams—an alchemical layer of rubbery skin that could also sense its surroundings, or feel pain, sensitive even to a gust of wind. The cold bog-water, bumping of swampland critters and brushing grasses, did not bother the tall Sith. The added awareness that they provided was very welcome in her book.
The ground seemed drier as they made their way towards the greenhouse domes, reeds and mosses replaced by green grasses. Arx Primus broke through the clouds and reflected upon the transparisteel panels. Dense overgrowth clung to the metal rosters supporting the translucent dome panels. A small structure stood out at the entrance—which would be restricted under normal circumstances—and with so many holes filling the giant hemisphere, there was really no more gateway.
With a powerful round-house kick, Kaern broke down what remained of a rusty door with weakened hinges and very deep-set claw marks. Inside the post, they found several research terminals made apparent by the bubbling flask and chemical symbols plastered on the sealed containers next to them. The tall black-clad woman had to duck to avoid hitting the doorpost, but once inside she picked the flasks up, shaking them one by one to check them for their contents. Sera noticed a dried up, weathered corpse in the corner of the room. Empty stims and bags of food lay next to the unfortunate deceased victim.
“Gruesome, I guess there’s something out there that is worse than death from starvation, or injuries?” Sera pressed a button, sliding open the blinds. Bright-sapphire eyes darted over the area, which mostly encompassed a large lake in the middle of the circular habitat. The surface shimmered peacefully under the bright sunlight with the occasional gust of wind creating ripples in the water and shaking the needle-covered branches of pine trees.
“Interesting, this console still functions, if I can access one of these logs-,” vibroclawed, latex-covered fingers tapped away at the panel. Most of the files were secured with complicated passwords, and neither of them were slicing experts, so the Sith picked out the only unprotected one that was placed on the guest account by accident.
“Here is one, listen up,” Alaisy’s argent eyes widened behind her domed visor, reflecting much of the light emitted by the monitor. She read the report out loud with a sultry, well-articulated Imperial voice.
”Research log #88405: The gladiatorial predators have been given an aquatic environment. The artificial lake should have a sustainable food source consisting of various fish and plant-life. We hope that this will acclimatize them to arena-styled sports taking place on watery planets. One of my colleagues expressed concern over underground instability near one of the cave systems. We have since ordered a duracrete reinforcement package. This should keep the habitat separated.”
“Uhh, Alaisy, there’s something coming out of the water over there!” the Zabrak pointed towards the body of water.
The Sith straightened her back as she snaked up from her hunched-over stance. She inclined her masked head at Sera, before turning her sight towards the beast.
“That is most certainly an Acklay,” she could tell by the six claws, and its elongated head.
“Is it me, or is it rather small? And what is that thing on its backside?” Tir’eivra pointed out the flattened, rudder-like tail.
“It must be a fledgling, but that tail is something I’ve never seen before. Who knows what’s in that lake?” The Zabrak said with excitement in her voice. She had seen plenty of these crustaceans before—they were used in executions, or arenas, and high-stakes betting matches—but it wasn’t green like usual either. When looking through her macrobinoculars, she noticed this one had black dots covering its carapace, with the rest of its shell glistening in purplish-blue.
Click, clack, click, clack.
The almost two-and-a-half meters tall woman gave no hesitation and decided to check it out in-person.
“I think a careful approach-,” Sera thought Tir’eivra was still in the room with her until she saw her running straight towards the Acklay, blocking her view outside, “kriff, so much for a hunter’s approach,” she muttered as she double-checked her equipment, placed her macrobinoculars back, and ran after the Sith. She was packing a lot of gear with pointy ends, including her Kithani, which was strapped to her left thigh. The Zabrakian huntress was ready to compensate for Alaisy’s lack of subtlety.
The loud tapping of heels continued over the cracked duracrete, until it dulled out over lake-side forest soil. The amethyst-blue Acklay seemed calm, basking in the warmth of the sun. It seemed to be eating a fish, at least until it turned its head towards the giant woman. The creature rose on all six of its thin, claw-like legs. As the Sith stormed towards it, the Acklay felt intimidated, backpedaling with small steps, keeping its limbs close together, all arced backwards, and its elongated teeth-filled head retreating inwards.
“Alaisy!! Hold on, you’re scaring the damned predator!” Sera even felt silly saying that, knowing just how ferocious those precious arena-beasts could be.
The Battlemaster stopped in her tracks and turned towards the sprinting, shouting Savant. The moment she turned, the Acklay picked its fish up and retreated back into the lake. It launched its head underwater, body pulling with it and creating a wide splash. The last thing both Arcona’s saw was the flat tail propelling it further into the depths.
“Well, that was that, it's gone! Why’d you go after it like that?” The Zabrak raised her shoulders, and then pointed at the lake with an open palm in exasperation.
“You saw it! It was petrified, that, was the point!” The Sith knew she made the mistake of turning her head towards Kaern, but she would never admit it. Still, anger burned within her veins. They were going to go after it, or them.
“Look, we can set a trap, lure it out, captu-,”
“No!” the Sith interjected. “We are going to pursue it. Can you hold your breath?” Alaisy walked up to the edge of the lake and touched the water with the tip of her boot. Even her footwear was layered by her symbiote, save for the knife-heel and sole. The water felt strangely warm, almost as warm as the greenhouse dome. Visibility was good, only broken fences and fallen leaves littering the edges.
Sera frowned in confusion, both because of the tall woman’s odd hunting method, but also because of her determination. The damned Sith was just, so, proud, and intense all the time. For a moment she felt frustrated having her own on-the-spot plan ignored like that. She was stubborn, and her will was not easily bent. But that kriffing woman had such a unique view on life that she admired her in a way. Tir’eivra was dark, ruthless, but somehow also strangely reliable, full of pure unadulterated hatred and effective like a deadly weapon. Sera’s intuition knew that there was mutual respect between the warrior and witch.
“Yes, I’ve done my share of free-diving before, and I can hold my breath,” somehow Sera suspected that Alaisy already knew the answer, as if she played with her pride and honor. The tribal huntress couldn’t hold back a smile. If anything the Zabrak was made for this, knives were effective underwater, she was athletic and the Force would make her effective even on the move, helping her hold her breath. This wouldn’t be the first time.
“Excellent, we will not be able to communicate by voice, so let me demonstrate some gestures and let me know if we have an understanding,” Alaisy took her hooded cloak off and stretched her long slender body.
She made her first hand signal by joining her thumb and index finger to form a loop, extending the other fingers.
The next two gestures were a thumbs-up, and a thumbs-down. She then made a fist with her palm-side facing outward, followed by using all five of her fingers to point to the right. Finally, she flattened her hand, palm aimed upwards, and bent her fingertips upward towards herself.
Alaisy finalized the set of gestures with one last one—it involved her hand moving flat across her throat in a slicing movement. For obvious reasons, this was by far her favorite.
“Ohh, yeah they make sense. Let me know if we’re on the same page, Alaisy. In the same order, here’s what I think they mean: the first means ‘everything is alright’, followed by ‘going up and down’, the next one tells me to slow down, then ‘hold’, the next one means ‘stop’, the following one meant to point out which direction to go in, the next one means ‘get over here!’ and the final one means you’re out of air,” Sera scratched her head, unsure if she understood them all.
“Great, we are on the same page. Drop whatever slows you down and let us see what awaits us there,” Alaisy said with a modulated voice while she checked if the tubes on her mask were properly secured before swapping to her air supply. Now, every breath she made not only hissed when she breathed in, but also when she exhaled.
Sera hung her tribal cloak on one of the pine tree branches, placing her helmet and armor plating at the base of the tree. Once she stepped inside the water, she too felt surprised by just how warm it was. The Zabrak closed her eyes, took in a deep breath, and exhaled slowly, stopping until she had about half of her lungs filled with air. She tapped into the Force, willing it, asking it to hold onto her oxygen for as long as possible. Her tight, muscled, and compact body relaxed. Then she inclined her head at the Sith, raising her hand and forming a loop between her thumb and index finger.
Alaisy nodded at Kaern in return, a smile forming in her eyes, while her lips were hidden behind her mask’s nose cup. Then they both descended into the blue.
The water pressed against her ears. Her own breathing and the pressurized air she exhaled became the only thing Alaisy heard now. Sera’s experience underwater, in turn, showed as her movements were fluid and efficient, moving in long strokes with minimal effort. The Zabrak kept her bright-cerulean eyes open just fine, despite the lack of visor. The symbiotic-clad woman mostly relaxed her arms and steered with her body, while her legs propelled her forward even with the lack of fins.
The first school of fish showed up already only several meters down. Algae, shellfish, seaweeds and crustaceans became visible deeper, on the bottom of the mysterious lake.
Both Sera and Alaisy suddenly felt drawn by an aura full of darkness. The Sith pointed to the north-west with all of her fingers stretched out, and the Zabrak replied with her hand forming a loop, all fingers except for the index finger and thumb stretched out.
A wall of rock awaited them. Suddenly the teeming flora and fauna had disappeared, save for the few algae and emptied clams. There was a deep crack in the stone wall where bubbles were seeping out. It got wider and wider closer to the bottom of the lake. Neither the black-clad, nor the horned woman could resist venturing through it.
At first it was murky, and a feeling of doubt arose in the duo. But it became brighter further on as a deep crimson glow guided them. They had just passed from the small sustainable lake into the cave system that the research log had warned the scientists about. Rubble from a spaceship littered the sandy floor, and it looked like someone or something had been hoarding research equipment.
Then they saw their first glimpse of life. Argent eyes with on-fleek dramatic liner widened as a large obelisk appeared. Bright-blue met her gaze as they paused, hanging still in the under-dark. The dark side of the Force made swimming through this last part feel like swimming through mud. Something did not want them here. Both of the women’s eyes darted around towards small crustaceans jumping around. On closer inspection they looked like very tiny versions of the purple Acklay they tried to hunt earlier.
The Zabrak stuck out a hand towards one. She pulled it away just as quickly. It tried to bite her. The worry almost distracted her from maintaining her oxygen consumption. Alaisy saw it too and followed it carefully until the Sith herself lashed out with her vibro-claw. It pierced the large-mouthed fledgling and impaled it onto her blades.
The tribal warrior woman peered at the blood released from the creature, it caused her to heart sink. She gestured behind her with all of her fingers stretched. Alaisy took the small Acklay off and wedged it between her belt. I will be needing this for research.
Ideally, she would have studied the monolith too, but…
A whole troop of tiny Acklays bursted out of every crevice the cave-tunnel had to offer. They circled around the radiating, runed obelisk.
Time to karking **GO!
Sera repeated the same gesture in rapid succession, and the Sith followed her for the first time.
Positive Takeaways
You had a lot of ambiances here, from the initial approach and into the depths, a lot of imagery going on. Your interactions between the ladies were interesting to read, and you definitely pushed a ‘mutual respect’ narrative.
Can Be Improved
Some of your wording choices were a bit off (rosters vs rafters holding up the roof) that are just the inevitable by-product of writing in a non-native tongue. That said, your syntax was impressive for a post this long, like...a few commas that were unnecessary and that was it.
And while not a big deal, I feel it was noteworthy and amusing to point out ‘how precious the creature’ was probably meant to be precocious? Or vicious, but it was also coming from Sera and who knows, maybe she thinks acklay are precious little bugs.
For such a lengthy post (about 1k over the average for even the usual ‘long’ posts in this format) you had next to no actual conflict or action, which did keep your score from going up much, though this was offset somewhat by your ambient set up.