As the pressure plate depressed, nozzles popped out of the trio of pillars, spraying a lilac colored foam into the center of their grouping. The foam quickly blanketed the lyleks, bubbling and frothing. The creatures began to hiss and cackle unpleasantly, their pursuit of Khryso forgotten as they scrambled to exit the trap in any direction. Khryso detected a harsh chemical smell coming from the foam and surmised that it was some kind of chemical irritant. Fortunately, his position kept any of the foam from getting on him.
The nozzles stopped spraying and retracted into the pillars. Even though the foam was already starting to dissolve, the lyleks were using their claws and tentacles to toss sand onto their backs. Khryso glanced up at Sinya, who met his eyes with a satisfied smirk. They needed to take advantage of the distracted state the lyleks were in and take them down. Khryso quickly flourished his lightsaber, taking a moment to prepare himself for the attack, as Sinya gracefully pounced onto the top of one of the other pillars, giving herself a much clearer line of sight on the lylek to their right.
Khryso dropped into a sprint, moving quickly across the dusty floor of the Colosseum. He kept his eyes on the target, tracking their movements and attention. The creature noticed his approach, but was not at all prepared for him. Carrying through with the momentum from his sprint, Khryso brought his saber across in a wide horizontal slash, severing the tip of one of the beast’s legs. The creature roared, turning its full attention on him.
As Khryso entered into a deadly dance with the insect, blaster bolts began to rain down from above, most of them glancing off the now filthy carapace of the lylek but the occasional bolt finding a particularly sensitive spot. The few bolts that buried themselves in the sand released small geysers of debris, adding to the small dust cloud that was obscuring the floor thanks to Khryso’s footwork and the lylek’s aggressive advances.
The pair of Plagueians eventually found the openings they needed to knock the creature down, a dozen or more harsh black marks scoring its hide from the combined assault of blaster and lightsaber. Sinya could easily read through the meld that Khryso was feeling the strain of the fighting. He had taken a few hits from the creature’s large legs but thankfully avoided the more debilitating tentacles. That being said, the final lylek had apparently recovered from the foam irritant and was now skittering across the arena to finish off Khryso.
As the Sith took up a defensive stance, readying himself for the creature’s arrival, Sinya knew the same strategy wouldn’t work again. Calling on the Force, she felt energy flooding into her body. Sitting up on the pillars had given her enough time to properly recover, so she was confident jumping back into the fight for their final foe. With its attention focused on Khryso, the lylek had its back to her position.
Almost cat-like, Sinya bounded down to the ground, vaulting off the neighboring pillars on her way to soften the impact as well as give herself some additional horizontal momentum. The Force did the rest, flowing through her and allowing her to move with ease and push herself as far as she needed to. Reaching back into her pack, she withdrew a metallic collar and a small remote.
With her blaster holstered, she wrenched the collar open, launching herself up and onto the lylek’s back. The creature was momentarily distracted from its fight with Khryso, lurching its head around to discover the disturbance. The sudden movement, along with its slippery carapace, likely a result of the foam, almost made her tumble off. The Twi’lek was able to quickly recover her balance, darting along the creature’s back and snapping the collar around its neck.
In the next moment she was properly thrown as its tentacles lashed out at her. She tumbled towards the sandy ground, managing to tuck herself into a somersault and coming to rest in a crouch. Silently, she cheered at her success before activating the remote. The shock from the collar wasn’t particularly powerful, but it was more than enough to throw the lylek off. Sinya’s plan had successfully drawn the creature’s attention from Khryso to herself. As she prepared to jump up and make a quick exit, however, purple bolts of lightning suddenly erupted across the insect’s body.
With the last of his stamina, Khryso had poured himself into the Force, calling upon the distress of his legacy with the Tadrins. Focusing on his frustration with having to kill Lora, his sorrow for not being able to close his account with Luthus, and his anger at the family’s lack of understanding. The emotions manifested themselves as pure dark side energy, erupting from his fingers and overtaking the lylek, causing it writhe in confusion and pain. It only lasted seconds, though, as he dropped to his knees, drawing in a shaky breath.
The lylek, extremely disoriented and rattled, tried to straighten itself, but Sinya drew her lightsaber, closing in to drive the creature to the ground with a flurry of lightsaber strikes that drove into its hide. With the final lylek down for the count, Sinya retrieved her shock collar, feeling the effects of the meld fading away. She turned to Khryso who was kneeling on the sand, leaning forward and supporting himself with his hands.
“You’re not about to die or anything, are you?” the Twi’lek asked, staying a few paces away.
Khryso tried to straighten up, sweat beading his brow. “No, I’m fine. Just need to catch my breath.” He forced himself to his feet, doing his best to hide his unsteady posture. “Well done, Hunter Ani.”
“Right,” she said, smiling, “I think I’m starting to get the hang of this.”
Khryso nodded. “I have noticed improvements in your performance. You continue to impress.” He pressed his lips tightly together, steadying himself for their exit from the Colosseum. “If you’ll excuse me, I require a steam and some comforts of civilization. Until next time, Sinya.” With a slight bow, the Chiss turned and began a carefully controlled walk towards the Colosseum’s exit. The Shadow Academy Staff was already beginning to enter the arena to take back control of the lyleks. Sinya dusted herself off, smiling in satisfaction.
Positive Takeaways
I liked the way you introduced familiarity between the characters and properly identifying the lyleks (and their FACE tentacles despite what the inaccurate aspects say about them having a tail tentacle).
Not a bad setup, could have used another paragraph or so of action to balance out the start-up, but not bad!
Can Be Improved
You had a few syntax issues here, ranging from sentence structure and some questionable word choices. Always get a proofer!
This was a troublesome passage for me, as this could be referring to you having dropped armor aspects you normally use, something we have no frame of reference for as the graders, or I have to assume it refers to the mobility enhancement stock aspect for armors that mentions stripping away things to make it easier to move in, which you do not have ON the armor. I suspect more that it was the former, but this sort of thing can lose you points without further explanation.
Nitpicky, but if you check out the Fiction Center (Resources>Fiction Center>Databank:Dark Brotherhood Universe) you'll find the proper spellings for how to refer to members of each Clan.
In the same vein, if Sinya Ani isn’t her actual name, you should probably make it clear on your Sheet to avoid Syntax errors when you use different wording, even if it is simply in ‘brackets’ so to speak.