The storm was inside him, an answer and echo born of every emotion, every feeling— the anger, fear, love, worry, desperation, self-hate, anxiety, and guilt. It all boiled up like towering clouds, vast as the horizon, winds strong enough to fling boulders and rip up trees, thunder booming, lightning raging, just under his skin.
He lifted both hands, threw them out, and just let it all go with a shout, like an exhale, like he could finally breathe.
Light lanced across the square towards the Human wobbling to his feet, exploding not into the man himself but into the ground below him. Tiny chips of sediment burst into the air and pitted the walls and street. Aru gave a gurgling scream of pain as miniature red rips streaked across his flesh, and even angry, the Mirialan cringed. His scars ached. He knew the agony of a shrapnel bomb a little too well.
This wasn't that, but he still hoped it franging hurt.
"It's Corazon," Ruka began in a slow snarl, enunciating each word, "and you're going to keep his name and mine out of your mouth, you pathetic puuja. You're never going to talk about my family again."
The Sith strode forward, watching as Aru stumbled back into the wall, blood blooming from oh-so-many shallow cuts. He bared his teeth at the smuggler while Law braced himself, convulsed, looked like he might vomit or faint. Ruka thought of Eilen's stories, her pinched shoulders and hunched pose bowing inward while she confessed to hiding in her room again because her Aedile had come onboard. He thought of Sven telling them about the missions, about the mockery and the way Law just disappeared when they started getting shot at. His fists clenched at his sides, shaking, the electricity in his veins quaking to be unleashed once more.
But Aru was already bloody, bent over, and gagging. Ruka swallowed, made himself stop, and spoke again.
"You're a danger to everyone around you and the fact that Lucine Vasano or anyone else has ever given you a single kriffing piece of power is an insult and a danger too. You know, my apprentice is on your crew, and so is my second son. I hear what you do. I know you're not just drunk this time here with me, you're drunk all the time. I know that you're a kriffing lech to women and don't even notice you make some of your people uncomfortable. I know you run off and you carry live weapons and explosives while you're drunk and you put people who you've been trusted with, TRUSTED WITH, for some reason I can't goddamn understand, in danger. Nevermind you impersonated me, and put my family in danger in turn. You're as bad as some of the slavers I've had to kill. Maybe I should be making that call. Maybe it'd be the real right thing to do. I don't kriffing know. But I do know you shouldn't be an Aedile, Law. You shouldn't be out on the streets. You oughta be rotting in some cell next to the other frangers who decide to hurt other people."
"...annns...nns...you s'd...ya said I talky muy too muchy," Aru wheezed, spitting bile and mucus. The Human tipped his head back, showing bloody, slimy teeth all in a wide grin, shorn hair stuck to his chin with the spittle. "Git kark'd."
Klaxons roared in Ruka's mind.
One heartbeat, and Aru's eyes went past him.
A second, and his hand lifted. Ruka's own came back up, his body pivoting.
On the third, the smuggler's discarded gunbelt flew into his palm, and he quick-drew one of the blasters and fired off the hip without even aiming, all in one motion.
Klaxons roared, and in four heartbeats, plasma passed under him as the Mirialan threw himself into the air. Even before he landed there were more bolts, and it was all he could do to leap again, twisting and touching down and flattening on the ground and then kicking back up.
Aru pushed off the building, both blasters in his hands now, stumbling and shooting. Ruka got his saber in hand and ignited the blue blade, retreating from the barrage and blocking what he couldn't side-step. The Human just kept shooting, even when one of his guns started to whine and pop, the power coils becoming overtaxed. It sputtered, if just for a second, and the Sith took the chance to lunge forward, slashing at Law to drive him back instead. Again and again, back across the square. A bolt skimmed Ruka's side. His saber glanced over Aru's arm. They both hissed as cloth burned to skin.
But Aru's other, bulkier blaster was doing just fine, and while the one rested as he let off the trigger, that one kept spitting. Ruka ducked, slid, leaving green skin and a trail of red speckling behind. Then, up again, pushing off the ground with a surge of supernatural strength to pinwheel over another salvo. Red plasma scorched across his shoulder pauldron, burning through to graze his bicep, a vicious hot sting. His lightsaber came a hair's breadth from taking Law's hand clean off, the motion only aborted because he wanted to, wanted to take away this man's ability to hurt his family, and that wasn't right.
"Give up," he snapped, batting away another bolt. For a long moment, Law paused and stared at Ruka, face twisting up tight, like he was conflicted.
But then Aru just sneered, swaying, and took another step back as he went to take another shot. That last step, however, put his back heel over the edge of nothing, and with a wobble and all of a yelp, the Aedile overbalanced and went over the ledge of the island, splashing down loudly into the water below.
"Oh, for Bogan's sake!" Ruka swore, darting over. The surface of the water where the Aedile had disappeared thrashed and bubbled, then went still. He narrowed his eyes, watching, waiting.
...and waiting.
Did he swim away? the Mirialan thought. Then, Can he NOT swim? Is he too drunk? Too hurt? Did he swim down?
He searched the water more frantically, but he couldn't see anything of Law. Not even a shadow, no movement, nothing.
"KARK!" Ruka exclaimed, tearing off his cloak and holsters, and dove in after him.
Everything went dark. The water was freezing cold, nearly forcing a gasp out of him that would've drowned him too. It filled his nostrils, his ears. His eyes burned, but he forced them to stay open, searching, searching, reaching.
Nothing.
Nothing.
Nothing!
Could he really have gone that far? Sunk like a stone? How heavy was his gear? Kriff, kriff, kriff! Goddammit, Law!
His chest absolutely burned, and he was too frantic to stall his breathing. The Sith twisted and propelled himself back to the surface, gulping in another lungful of air when he broke it. Before he could dive back down, though, his senses screamed yet again.
Ruka wrenched aside, but the drag of the water slowed him just a fraction too much. Something hot burned into his right arm and he cried out, grasping that shoulder and thrashing his legs to keep his head above water when he dipped down. Spitting a brackish mouthful, the Mirialan swiveled in the direction from which the shot had come, and found himself staring up at Aru and down the barrel of a blaster.
"Made yousa looky," Aru drawled, completely and infuriatingly dry and not in danger of drowning. He waved the pistol at Ruka's face, touching the tip to the Sith's nose while he crouched at the lip of the ledge. "Climb...hurk...ooooh, that hurt my like, brain, ooh, might throw up on ya, hah, but you're already green. Ugh." The Human belched, the smell like bile, and swallowed. Waved his gun again. "Now do what I says or Alana gonna get ya! Get outta there and give yourself up to my amazingness! Lawbreaker! Hehe. But not Law-breaker. Get it? Cause— 'Cause you didn't break me. I beat, hic, you. I'm a master of illuuussshuns."
"You're a franger, is what you are," Ruka hissed.
"Tut ut ut! Muy badsa language, heh! Sshtay in there then for yousaaa."
Aru stood up, keeping the pistol on a bead with Ruka's head while he treaded water. He started rifling through the Mirialan's things, wiping off his bloody face on Ruka's cloak and even blowing his broken nose in it. Palmed the bacta kit. Tossed around his communicator and threw his holocam into the water to join him. Ruka nearly lunged at that one, but a warning shot exploding into steam an inch from his face tempered him again.
His teeth were starting to chatter, and the hole in his arm pulsed painfully. Aru finally got around to his weapons, twirling the sapphire blade clumsily in one hand.
"You know, I always bet these things were actually candy. Look at 'em! Nothing but candy gets that color. And you're all wah wah wah what about the kids and stuff. So you MUST be giving them candy. I have a bet with my Mistress — that's Alaisy, the new Herald, by the way, she's amazing — that they'll taste like candy. She told me to lick it and find out. If I'm right, I get to keep the latex maid outfit she got for Zig. Why's it for her, y'know? I was her student! And I liked wearing it while she had me clean up the office. 'Course if she's right she gets my soul or something but who cares, she already has it! So, let's see…" He snickered. And. Actually lifted the blade to his mouth.
There's no way this is happening, he's screwing with me, Ruka thought, only to watch it happen as Law actually stuck out his tongue and licked the sword. He screeched in pain almost immediately, blood dripping from his mouth as he dropped the weapon, recoiling.
"Tha's nuh bwooberry!"
"I hate you," the Mirialan told him, and meant it. Not for the stupidity on display, but for everything else. His shivering was getting worse. He kept his gaze between the gun on him and anything, anything that could help...
Aru picked the gladius back up. Ruka lifted his hand from his bleeding shoulder, eyes on the sapphire sword's hilt, and—
"Uh uh uh!" Aru slurred, twisting to hide the blade behind his back, breaking Ruka's line of sight, kriff. "Nug uh, y'don' get t'go magh'ic handin' thish back."
Something glinted, though, just there from Aru's robe pocket, revealed when he contorted. The lip of a bottle. Through all this, the Aedile had kept his damn flask on him. How kriffing fitting.
Ruka willed it out of that pocket and into the air and slammed it right into the Human's temple. Aru dropped like a sack. The blaster didn't go off.
The blaster didn't go off.
The Mirialan swore viciously, tension and relief and adrenaline snapping his ribs like twigs, making his heart hurt. His limbs felt so heavy as he swam the few feet forward and clawed his way back up onto the platform, dropping to hands and knees beside Aru's prone form and just leaning there for a second, just a second, just a second he was so tired couldn't he have that much?
No, he reminded himself, his old mantra, the same one he'd had since he was ten years old and holding a baby in his arms for the first time. Get up! Get up. Do it for them.
He needed to get up. To deal with Law. And the Gungans, and their guards. There were still the guards. It wasn't safe…
Ruka pushed himself off the ground, dripping a whole slew of water and squirting blood from the hole in his bicep. His muscles tried to lock, but he forced the Dark through them and made them move, made himself stand and gather up his things as quickly as he could. He only slowed at all when Aru started groaning, waking to what was probably a lot of pain and grabbing at his skull. The Mirialan stared down at him, considering— everything. The booze. The day. The fight. Every word and taunt and his broken temper. The hurt guards and the ruined mission and the threat to his family.
He thought about it all, and he picked up Aru's blasters too.
"You know," he began, trying to judge how well the Human was even listening. Seemed to be. The groan and glare helped, but his eyes were going different directions. "You know, people only name what's important to them, what that really mean something. You named your guns. Alana, you said? And this one, Queen? Whatever that is. So here's how this is gonna go. I'm pretty sure you wouldn't give a damn if I threatened you. Too kriffing full of yourself. But I can take away something you really care about. I could toss these in the ocean out there or out my airlock or into a damn volcano and you wouldn't be able to do no damn thing to stop me. I want you to remember that feeling, ay. Remember helpless and hurting. Cause that's what you do to your people when you're running around smashed on the job." He carefully looked for the safety like he'd been instructed a few times, made sure it was on each, and then tucked the weapons into his belt. "You can have these back when you retire, IF and WHEN you get your frang together on missions. I don't give one flying frack if you drink yourself to death on your own time. I'd really rather you did. But when it's active duty and you got the Qel-Dromans following you into hostile situations? You're sober. You hear me? On the job with my apprentices or my kid or anyone you're in charge of, you are kriffing sober, or these guns? They gone. They'll disappear. Got me? You being clear headed keeps them safe, and your people too, not that you give a damn about them."
It didn't feel like enough. It felt ridiculous. Taking away a toy, that was something he had done when Noga and Leda were four. Aru was a grown man, a criminal, unstable and ruthless and dangerous, even if he was an idiot.
He flexed his hands, felt the lightning beneath.
It didn't feel like enough, but it was going to have to be.
He'd get back to the surface and then contact Lucine, tell her everything that happened and see what she wanted him to do next. He wasn't a diplomat. Better people needed to figure this one out.
But in the meantime... He glanced at Law, looking at him with murder in his closing eyes, then turned away. In the meantime, Law could sober up and swell up under the care of a Gunganese jail cell. The Gungans didn't just execute people, right? He was fairly sure that wasn't a thing with them, so a couple hours should be safe.
And maybe then, when he was up on the surface, alone and secure and dry, maybe then he could just sit down and scream.
What Went Well
You certainly didn’t skimp on humour; Aru’s sheer wackiness had me chuckling from the start. It was also nice to see a premise that had Aru and Ruka starting off on supposedly the same side before turning on each other.
Room for Growth
First up, the Syntax category. When you describe Lucine’s message to Ruka, it would’ve been a good idea to include something that points out that Ruka is remembering the message Lucine sent him, or it’s difficult to tell whether he’s remembering that or if there’s a random voice in his head or something. Second, you missed adding punctuation in a few spots, like when Ruka sees Aru drinking and driving—there should’ve been an exclamation mark or something at the end of that sentence. Third, you had a few spots where you used incorrect words that a spellcheck wouldn’t have caught, like “representative to Clan Arcona to Naboo” (should’ve been “representative from Clan Arcona”), or “to a diplomatic mission” (should’ve been “on a diplomatic mission”). Fourth, the whole “Force facepalm” thing doesn’t make a ton of sense. I think I get what you’re trying to describe, in that Ruka is mentally facepalming at Aru’s actions, but the Force itself doesn’t really come into play there. Finally, “voracity” is the wrong choice of word; you were probably going for “ferocity”.
Second, the Story category. The biggest problem I have here is that the way you’ve described the events in your post just doesn’t make sense. As far as I can tell, there’s no reason at all that Aru turns on Ruka. Despite Ruka being annoyed with Aru, he actually protects Aru at the beginning of the battle. After that, the reader doesn’t see Aru thinking “ooh, that bastard tried to punch me”, or “wouldn’t it be funny if I trolled him by making him defend from both directions”, or even being drunkenly thinking that he was doing the right thing by helping the Gungans “arrest” Ruka. Aru just tries to shoot him in the back after Ruka protects him from the guards. I’m not sure which part of Aru’s character you’d intended to show by doing that, but it comes off as so random and hard to follow that it takes a lot of the enjoyment out of the post.
Lastly, for Realism, I had two main concerns. First, you have what looks like Ruka starting the fight purely because he got annoyed at Aru, when Ruka’s Aspects made it pretty clear that he avoids fighting whenever possible. (I know you dropped a reference to past conflicts between them, but I can only judge what’s in this battle, and the stuff in this battle doesn’t seem like it justifies Ruka starting a fight.) The ACC Rubric calls a character acting “in a way that directly contradicts their Aspects” a major detractor, so that’s how I have to mark it.
The other issues I saw were around Ruka’s use of Telekinetic Combat. You have Ruka standing still in the middle of a hail of blaster fire (or what I assume was a hail of blaster fire, since you never said the guards stopped shooting) for long enough to draw four different weapons, making no effort to avoid or deflect any of the incoming fire. I have a hard time believing that could’ve happened the way you wrote it, so that got you a minor detractor. The other minor detractor you got was a more technical issue. The description of Telekinetic Combat says that the user has to be concentrating and use hand gestures to direct the motion of their weapons, which you did when Ruka attacks the guards, but not when he summons his blades back to himself and later uses them to attack Aru.
I did find it weird that Aru’s level of drunkenness seems to change throughout the post, from “not drunk enough to actually impair his driving”, to “so drunk he can’t tell where blaster fire is coming from and has to be rescued by Ruka”, to “sober enough that his drinking doesn’t affect his aim”. I didn’t take any points off Realism for this because it’s open to interpretation, but it would be a good idea to be more consistent about that in the future.
Suggestions
Keep the characters’ Aspects in mind when you write the story, and take a little more time to explain why they act in the way they do. Get someone to proofread your posts to catch errors that a spellcheck wouldn’t, like using the wrong word or missing punctuation.