With Khryso closing the distance between them, Corvin put the last pieces of his plan into place. It would require some pinpoint precision and timing to pull off, but he hadn’t exactly expected this fight to break out, so he hadn’t come prepared. Nevertheless, the Umbaran would make do with what he had on his person.
As Khryso vaulted over the table Corvin was using for cover, Corvin simultaneously slid under it, coming out on the other side. With a swift kick, he pushed the table backwards a few inches, hoping to knock the Chiss off-balance before diving away. After a quick tuck and roll, the Umbaran came up into a crouch and thumbed the detonator in his hand. The mine he had set on the table exploded, sending out waves of shrapnel that peppered the crowd, armored bouncers, and Khryso.
The Sith had already been moving away from the blast, following Corvin’s movements, but was still caught in the back by the shockwave. However, having sensed the danger at the last minute, Khryso had managed to put his cloak and saber between him and the blast, minimizing the damage. Nonetheless, as he dropped to his feet, he felt small stings in several places across his back.
Corvin had continued his retreat, barreling into his spectators and reaching down to flip on his holoshroud. He knew it wouldn’t take long for the Sith to lock in on his position through the Force, so the Umbaran was only relying on the Twi’lek disguise to buy him a few seconds. It at least caused enough confusion in the crowd that he managed to vanish into, losing the visual tracking of the bouncers.
He used his seconds of anonymity to double check his blaster. He would have liked to program a second mine to his detonator, but he didn’t have the time. Instead, Corvin intended to use the crowd. “Look, that guys got a lightsaber!” he yelled, “he must be a Jedi or something! He was probably cheating!”
He continued yelling things in an attempt to rile up the crowd and focus their attention on Khryso. The Chiss’ red eyes locked onto Corvin as no doubt the Force confirmed to him the Umbaran’s identity. Thankfully for Corvin, his strategy seemed to be working, turning the formerly neutral crowd against Khryso. In addition the bouncers, having recovered from the mine detonation, were now focused solely on Khryso, with Corvin having seemingly disappeared.
Khryso raised his free hand towards Corvin, his eyes narrowing as anger boiled up beneath the surface. He wouldn’t allow himself to be made a fool of. Harnessing his rage, blue lightning channeled through his fingers, arching out into the crowd towards Corvin. The Umbaran quickly began evasive action, ducking between the now panicking civilians as the electricity snared several of them. Bringing his blaster into firing position, Corvin began taking potshots at the Chiss as the crowd flew into even more chaos, the room turning into a churning sea of people trying to escape.
Khryso brought his saber up to deflect the blaster bolts, unable to properly redirect them back but keeping them away from his person. He continued to track Corvin with the Force, keeping his lightning aimed at the Umbaran even as Corvin used the crowd as shields.
As the bouncers closed in on him from behind, Khryso was forced to cut his attack short. Drawing back his lightning storm, Khryso instead channeled that Force energy into his body, charging towards Corvin.
Corvin quickly tossed a mine onto the ground between him and Khryso, continually firing at the Sith as he retreated. However, Khryso easily avoided stepping on the explosive, jumping over it and cutting through the civilians between the two of them. Deflecting another volley of blaster bolts from Corvin, Khryso finally closed the gap. The first swing of his saber was wild and Corvin neatly rolled out of the way. However, Khryso’s follow up found its mark, impacting against Corvin’s energy shield and shorting it out.
Corvin scrambled backwards, firing another quick salvo from his rifle. Some of the others from the crowd had drawn weapons and begun firing, but it was more so in panic and fear, leading to wild, aimless shots that made deflecting them trivial. However, for a moment, Khryso was put on his backfoot. That gave Corvin a slight opening to dive in and snap his shock collar around Khryso’s ankle.
Quickly rolling away, the Umbaran reached for the activation switch on the collar but froze in place. The world seemed to freeze as the only sound in his ears was the buzzing of Khryso’s violet lightsaber as it pierced his chest.
Breathing heavily, the Chiss withdrew his blade from Corvin as the Umbaran dropped to the ground, offering up his final breath. With a quick slash, he severed the collar from his ankle. The Club had devolved into chaos. As far as Khryso was concerned, this had been an utter disaster. He needed to make a quick exit. Running for the window, he quickly cut it down with his saber and leaped through.
Positive Takeaways
Your use of descriptive language established a clear picture of the scene for the reader. This is certainly a strong point in this post.
Can Be Improved
The ACC rubric requires that duelist hall matches “focus on the combat between the member characters.” You established the interpersonal conflict between the characters but ended the post abruptly just as the action was going to start. As a general rule you should have action in every post of an ACC match with, as the rubric says, the focus being on the combat between the two characters. This is a story detractor.