Ria'd's body went numb and cold, like a strong breeze from Hoth brushed past his face. His eyes steeled, locking onto the Sith as the Zabrak watched the Elder's every movement.
Th-thump, th-thump, th-thump, th-thump.
Twin hearts beat like drums in Ria'd's chest. The Defender inhaled and exhaled deep breaths among the buzzing of cam droids that circled the two combatants like a tornado. The water crashed upon the shore below like a tidal wave threatening to rise. The wind picked up in speed, and as the Jedi inspected the Seeker, he could make out the bead of sweat that dripped down the older Human's scalp.
That was when a wide grin plastered itself on the Seeker's face. The Sith Adept stretched his right-hand fingertips towards the Zabrak and poured his hate, rage, sorrow and anguish to them like a molten river. Lightning sparked and hissed as it soared across the distance towards Ria'd. The Jedi instinctively swung his lightsaber to intercept the attack as the lightning dissipated into the blade.
"I said that's enough!" Ria'd screamed at the top of his lungs.
That's it! More! More just like that and you'll be putty in my hands! The Sith thought to himself.
"It's never enough, don't you see that? We are destined to do this forever. You know it is true," Kamjin smoothly declared. The Seeker's words were like a warm blanket over Ria'd's head. Warm, comforting, yet blinding to what was right in front of him. Once again, the Defender found himself at the mercy of the Proconsul's influence over him. He shook his head once, twice, three times, but the Seeker's hold on the Zabrak's mind grew tighter and tighter like a vice that refused to let go.
This was the opening Kamjin was waiting for, and he needed to act quickly. With his right hand, the Elder reached towards one of the circling cam droids that neared towards the fight. The Sith strained himself doing so, fatigue set in from his use of the Force up to this point. Nonetheless, with a hard grunt, Kamjin launched the droid at Ria'd before the Jedi could release himself from the Seeker's influence again.
The plan worked, and the circular droid slammed directly into the Zabrak's forehead, knocking him off his feet and onto his back near the platform's edge, his lightsaber rolling out of his fingers. Ria'd grunted in pain, the impact sent the droid careening off to the side as it sparked in a clump on the platform. The Jedi brought his hands up to cover his injury and when he removed them, he spotted a faint, red liquid in his palms.
Kamjin approached slowly, his pupils dilated, heavily breathing with a triumphant smirk stretched from his lips.
"You see, Jedi? This is where your dogmatic views have gotten you. On your back, beaten and bloodied!" the Proconsul declared loudly not to Ria'd, but to the remaining cam droids that floated around them like an actor to his audience. "It's still not too late. You can swear loyalty to Scholae Palatinae and serve as a mighty Sith healer amongst our ranks, all you need to do is kneel."
The Zabrak slowly forced himself up onto one knee, wobbling as he did so. The Defender felt his head throb with a migraine that refused to disappear. The Jedi's stomach churned as he felt he could vomit at any moment.
The elation Kamjin experienced could be seen from everyone who viewed the fight from afar. Ria'd glanced to Kamjin before he closed eyes and placed a hand over the open wound in his forehead.
"Yes… very good," Kamjin approved as his boots tapped closer to the Zabrak, lightsaber staff humming against the wind as it shone a vibrant violet. "Kneel before your new Master. No-one can challenge the Scholae Palatinae Empire, and you just proved it."
Ria'd focused as best he could given the circumstances. The Jedi forced himself to ignore Kamjin's ramblings and poured the light side of the Force through his body and into his injury.
There is no emotion, there is peace.
Slowly but surely, the pain began to numb, the bleeding slowed to a stop, and the flesh ripped open by the cam droid stitched itself together.
There is no ignorance, there is knowledge.
It was slow, and took far more effort than he was usually used to, all thanks to the Seeker's way with words in his subconscious.
There is no passion, there is serenity.
Thankfully, the Sith's arrogance bought the Jedi the time he needed. The spewing feeling in Ria'd's gut vanished, his headache became nonexistent, but the Defender's breathing worsened.
There is no chaos, there is harmony.
The Jedi knew he needed to end the fight now before he became too tired. Ria'd acted quickly and clasped his hands together. The Zabrak pushed the Force through as a small tremor burst from his body, strong enough to make the Sith's eyes go wide.
There is no death, there is the Force!
"Oh no you don't!" cried the older Human.
Kamjin attempted to impale Ria'd and raised his staff above his head to bring it down upon the Jedi in spectacular fashion. Luckily, he was too slow. The Zabrak saw the attack coming and reacted, instinctively reaching out with the Force and pulling the Proconsul forward. It wasn't particularly strong, but it was enough to stagger the Sith, trip him over the Zabrak, and off the edge of the platform.
"Sithspit!!!" Kamjin exclaimed. In his panic, he let go of his weapon as it fell to the jagged stones below. The Sith clung to the platform with what little energy he had left, though his strength was fading quickly from a mixture of fatigue, age, and lack of physical conditioning. Kamjin's arms burned like a raging inferno scorching across his muscles. After a few heartbeats, the Elder couldn't hold his grip any longer and began to fall.
At least he did, for half a second.
"I've got you!" yelled the Zabrak from above.
A large, gloved hand tightened around the Proconsul's wrist. Cam droids circled the abyss around the platform. All who watched could see the scene unfold like it was a clip from the holonet. Kamjin was slowly pulled up until his chest reached over the edge and he crawled to safety.
Both men's hearts thundered in their chests. Kamjin stared wide-eyed on his hands and knees with Ria'd sitting beside him.
"You…" the Sith started, lost for both words and breath. "Why?"
"You said my dogma would forever have me at odds with the Brotherhood. It doesn't have to be that way," Ria'd answered, slowly rising to his feet. The Zabrak offered a hand out to Kamjin, which the Seeker reluctantly accepted. "I seek only to help. To heal and nurture. I never wanted any of this, Kamjin. Let us leave this bloodshed behind us. The only way we can move forward in this galaxy is to work together, not against each other. Let past grievances be forgotten, and learn to exist together. What do you say?"
The Jedi held his hand out to the Sith again, and Kamjin's eyes glared at it for a moment.
"This was not how this was supposed to go," the Scholae Palatinae responded with mumbled and frustrated words.
"In my experience, it never usually does," the Jedi acknowledged.
The Sith grasped hold of the hand in front of him in a hearty gesture as his eyes glanced over to the Zabrak's lightsaber just a few feet away on the platform. A noticeable grin stretched on the Sith's face which led to a confused expression from Ria'd.
Before the Zabrak could inquire, Kamjin stretched out with the Force as the lightsaber hilt soared from the ground and into the Sith's grasp. Ria'd attempted to intercept, but was far too tired and missed it by half an inch as the Adept pressed the ignition switch. A bright blue blade pierced through the Jedi's abdomen. Wide-eyed, gasping in both pain and shock, the Zabrak dropped to the ground, eyes stinging with tears. Ria'd managed to turn his head to look to Kamjin, betrayal evident in his features.
"I hear what you say, Jedi, but I politely refuse. The light and the dark... They cannot coexist without conflict. Peace is a lie. There is only passion, Through passion, I gain strength," Kamjin recited the words like they held the meaning to his existence before he deactivated Ria'd's lightsaber and sheathed it on his hip. The Proconsul then turned to the remaining cam droids.
"As you can see! The deceptiveness of the Jedi failed to overcome the might of Scholae Palatinae! He tried to trick me, make me lower my guard, but I have prevailed! Scholae Palatinae will prevail in the name of its citizens! For the Empire!" Kamjin proclaimed loudly as the lights faded from Ria'd's eyes, and the Jedi fell unconscious.
Positive Takeaways
An interesting setup, more original than most! You set the scene well, it's clear why they’re having their conflict.
Can Be Improved
It feels like you skipped a bit of story between Kamjin trying to subvert Ria’d and Kamjin deciding he failed. There’s no indication of why Kamjin decided to pull his weapons, as Ria’d didn’t break free till after that happened. That Ria’d was left with his weapon I’m going to call plot convenience more than anything else, though the ISA giving it to Kamjin as a trophy would have felt more organic, something for Ria’d to take back.
Your syntax throughout was pretty good. Could have used a ‘closing’ comma for the aside here about ‘my Clan’s territory’ though, before the and. Also, you kept closing out dialogue that was being modified with periods, when you should do so with a comma, ie. “blah blah,” said the man.