The collected saliva on the Priest's face was remarkable to behold in the eyes of the Kid. He really hadn’t expected to stand toe to toe with an Equite. While he was nimble, he was also inexperienced and it was that unfortunate realization which gripped him during times like these.
The Kiffar reached out and awakened his senses. The Force was very clear about what was to transpire and the next few moments would not be pretty. He could feel the growing tension as he watched the angry bookworm rotate the knife in his right palm, reversing the grip. Doing what he could to remain calm, Gui remembered his training. His Master had taught him to persevere in the face of adversity and remain patient for the opportune moment to establish dominance.
Gritting his teeth, Gui moved in against his better Judgement. All of his senses screamed impact and constriction. His visions were often muddled but accurate and if and when the opportune moment had presented itself, he'd be ready. Unfortunately for the Defender, that moment was not now.
As Gui zipped in, flashing an attack, the Jeswandi practitioner shifted his hips. With but one motion, everything Gui had planned fell to pieces. The Ryn had been baiting him, lulling him into a false sense of security. As Gui's strike horribly missed, Kordath rotated and twisted on his heels. His hands flowed in concert with his hips as he seemingly conducted a mystical symphony. Gui, now frustrated, followed up with another strike but was halted as a rather large and heavy tome cracked him square in the face.
A loud pop could be heard amidst the thudding of the thick cover against flesh as it struck the bridge of the Defenders nose. Pain swelled his face and began to throb as the book fell to the floor, it's blood stained pages fluttering to a standstill as Gui stumbled back and wiped at his nose with his sleeve. He hated reading so this was like some kind of twisted nightmare that Kordath couldn't help but to find amusing as he fought back a laugh. Shaking the stars out of his head, Gui could only manage to raise his arms before Kordath was capitalizing. As the Priest made his move, he unraveled his sash. The long piece of dark cloth became like a spider's web as he wove it around the wrists of Gui, the Kid's struggle only making it worse as he became tangled and ensnared. His arms were nearly tied together and his joints were locked, pulled tight by the Ryn's leash.
But to make matters worse, it was unlikely that Kordath would deviate from his sinister plan. One way or another it was apparent that he would try to make an example out of the defiant little Jedi. The Krath’s aura was dark as was his intent.
The Defender growled in frustration as the Priest slid his hand along Gui’s forearm and clamped down with a vice-like grip that made him writhe in pain as the Ryn twisted his wrist in on itself and jerked straight up. The sharp pain bit into the Defender’s wrist and his fingers spread as the bones of his hands cramped together and began to fracture. Sorrow and agony swept across his face simultaneously as his Vibroknife slipped from his obliterated grip.
The young Kiffar tried to muster as much energy as he could to dull the pain, yet it remained unbearable. The Force felt distant, just out of reach and in that moment doubt consumed him. All the feelings of peace and tranquility faded away and there was nothing left but a voracious darkness.
"Do you see?" The Ryn hissed as he wrenched the arm of Gui and popped his hips, sending the boy crashing into a nearby wall.
"There is power in the Dark." The Priest's surface demeanor had changed. "You’re weak and your presence is a mockery, I’m going to thoroughly enjoy ending you.
"I. I.. can't take.. can't take anymore." Gui muttered through labored breathing. "I'm yours, Mas.. Master."
"Good." Surprise and mild suspicion could be heard in Kordath's voice as he stood tall and took a couple of steps forward, continuing his charade.
"We will be powerful, you and I." He added, his knife gripped behind his back as he took another step forward.
"Well, one of us will be." Gui spat.
The corners of Kordath's lips curled to form a sneer and his tail latched onto the boy's leg and flipped him over. A shout of rage bellowed from within as the Ryn's knife rained down, aimed for soft belly tissue.
Patience. A virtue. While it was something difficult to learn, especially for a Kid. When wielded properly, it was something you could always count on for the "Long Haul" as Smuggler's liked to put it. "It just might save your life one day."
As those words flashed through Gui's mind, he allowed his instincts to take control as he used his wrapped wrists to catch the falling threat. Kordath, filled with anger, kept downward pressure as the Sentinel fought him off. He would not stop until the blood of the Jedi stained the floor but little did he know, Gui would not stop until he was out of danger.
Emerald eyes moved to the Knife on the floor and a smile replaced grim determination as it rattled and took flight, burying itself into the back of the Ryn's skull. Gray eyes rolled back into their sockets and everything went limp as blood ran from his mouth and dripped from the tip of the blade. His body slumping over into a heaping mass of flesh and bone and as quickly as it all started, everything became silent. Gui moaned in pain as he unwrapped himself and caught a glimpse of his own reflection which could be seen on the glistening metal protruding from Kordath's mouth.
This kind of victory was never sweet. Gui was not keen on killing and did not have an endless body count to be gloated over. He did not have much blood on his hands but the blood he did have was perfect. While he would likely never get used to killing. One thing can be said. He has a knack for it.
Councilor (sp). He would collect = collected.
"It's a pleasure." Gui, greeted. - Comma after pleasure, since it’s a continuation of the dialogue, and not a separate clause.
To walk behind the lines of battle, to expose. - What is being exposed? This is a fragmented, incomplete sentence.
remarkable to behold in the eyes of the Kid. / his better Judgement. / face simultaneously as his Vibroknife slipped from - Unnecessary capitalization of “kid” “judgement” and “vibroknife.”
While the first attack of the Priest was sloppy, it was apparent that he was trying to play with a stacked deck as Gui's blade merely glanced off of Ryn's waist with little to no cutting. - Few things here. We have an expression: “Show, don’t tell”. This means that you should SHOW us how Kordath (I think it’s who you meant, but it’s confusing who you’re referring to because of your syntax) is playing with a stacked deck. I don’t really know what that means as a reader. Can you actually show me, through the action? You’re also missing “the” before Ryn.
Ever cautious, Gui's hands instinctively gripped the handles of his Vibroknives - Vibroknives shouldn’t be capitalized just like like lightsaber shouldn’t be capitalized.
A quick 'oof' was heard from the boy as he stumbled forward but tucked into a roll before hitting the ground. - The switch to passive voice for this sentence is awkward.