As dusk befell the windswept savannahs of Shili, the intense heat permeating the vast plains began to recede with the setting sun. Moisture from the humid climate accumulated on the local flora, clinging to the white underside that faced towards the west with the direction of the wind. Stalking to the east treaded the orange-furred beast that plagued these lands, devouring those who ventured too far from the native settlements.
Contrary to the cool breeze sweeping through the plains, sweat clung to the pack hunters’ rust-coloured bodies after tracking the creature for weeks on end. As it drew nearer, the Togruta drew their spears and readied themselves for the final moments of the hunt.
“Draw your bow, Kalee.” whispered the eldest of the hunters, crouched low beneath the canopied cover of tall grass shielding them. Kalee, the second of his daughters retrieved a crude arrow from a quiver fastened around her hip and set it against the nock point. Feeling the rise and fall of her diaphragm as her heartbeats began to slow, the soft-featured woman awaited the final command.
Each minute seemed like an hour, lingering for an eternity before the elder breathed “Attack!”
In one, single motion her fingers tightened around the feathered shaft and relaxing them to the sound of an audible ‘twang’. Turu-grass parted in the projectile’s wake before it came to rest in the beast’s stomach. Lodged in place with the aid of several barbs along the arrowhead, it created a deep wound that bled profusely and stained the grass a deeper shade of crimson.
Just then, the beast attacked as only cornered animal would. Before the Togruta had time to act, the beast snapped its jaws around the elder’s torso. Bones snapped under the intense pressure while razor-sharp teeth cut into flesh. Falling limp in the Akul’s embrace, the Togruta elder was lifted from his feet. Clamping down on its would-be hunter, the monster shook its prey violently. With each shake, the creature’s fangs buried themselves deeper into his flesh.
“No!” his daughter shouted with her face streaked in tears. Sensing imminent death, the Akul tossed aside its meal and darted out of the crossfire. Cradling the head of her barely-conscious father, she gave his last order, “Kill the beast!”
Hearing the commotion from several meters from the pack hunter’s ambush, A’lora Kituri raced in the opposite direction. She was determined to close the creature’s escape before it could harm another village.
She arrived too late. Amidst the bloodstained ground, the beast was dead.
However, it had not died from where the arrow found its mark. It bore a fresh wound, piercing the creature’s ribs and passing through the heart. Its death would have been painless, compared to what the angered hunter would have intended.
“These wounds, from a slugthrower.” A’lora Kituri mused to herself. However, her investigation was cut short when the elder’s daughter came running from the taller grass with bow in hand.
“The beast… is it dead?” Kalee asked, “I demand to know if my father is avenged.”
“It is, but I arrived too late.” the lavender-skinned seer responded with the calm one would expect of someone devoted to the White Current. Her soothing demeanour vanished the next moment, when a familiar presence revealed itself to her. Her features hardened, replaced with a ferocity few could match.
Letting loose a gaping grin, Turel Sorenn walked out to meet them. “Good thing I was here on time,” he boasted, examining the glistening form of the Fallanassi with interest. Beads of sweat rolled from her shoulders, showing fleeting signs of weariness from chasing down the orange-furred mammal. Her toned form was accentuated underneath the light garments she wore, baring most of her patterned abdomen.
“Surprised to see the prodigal son return?” He teased, creasing a brow in mock concern. A’lora let out an audible sigh. She had grown accustomed to the silence of the Praxeum’s halls and had forgotten her lack of patience to deal with the former Odanite. In truth, she was far more interested in how he came to arrive on Shili. Few, besides Vorsa knew of her frequent visits to her home world.
Just then, Kalee shifted her bow in his direction. Her fingers gripped the arrow’s nock lightly with one hand while the limbs buckled under the strength of her draw, “On time? Our pack’s leader is dead, off-worlder.”
Supernatural reflexes guided the seer’s quarterstaff in the projectile’s path, the arrowhead making a ‘thunk’ against the wooden barrier. Turel smirked inwardly at the kind gesture - he would need to remind her of it later.
“Apologies,” the Jedi responded, calling on the Force to project calm into the woman’s thoughts. He hardly had time to comfort the native before being walloped over the head for his moment of foolishness.
“Ouch, what the frak was that for?”
A’lora continued with the momentum of her swing, guiding the blunt staff to rest at her feet. “That,” she scolded, “is for allowing Vorsa to become Pravus’ Herald. She was your master, Sorenn.”
Throwing up his hands in defeat, Turel’s mocking façade remained plastered on his face. “Her choice - not mine,” he reminded, “besides, she asked me to make sure you weren’t dragging the Jedi into some vision-induced war against the Brotherhood. How could I refuse such a tempting offer?”
A’lora almost scoffed at his candor, “Vorsa might have had the patience to deal with your judgement, but I certainly do not.”
For a moment, Turel looked hurt at her refusal, “You wound me!”
Cracking a grin of her own, she reached for the hilt of her lightsaber, “I’m just getting started.”
I loved a lot of what you did in this post. You set such a beautiful scene, at the risk of losing the reader among so many descriptors. It was a risk well worth taking, as it painted a clear image and set up an engaging story.
You should use a comma to end your dialogue instead of a period, since it is part of the sentence as a whole.
This sentence would flow better with "as only a cornered animal". It reads awkwardly as is.
Same as earlier, should close out the quote with a comma since it is part of the sentence.