Smile all you like. Victory is mine.
Bentre had allowed his focus to slip. In his frustration and pride, he had not seen the finger slip up to rest just short of his stomach. It wasn’t until he heard the crackle of energy that he realized what the Warrior had done. His show of force was ill-timed. Pain rippled through his body as hot ringlets traced along his torso. The sensation was so intense and unexpected the Sadowan’s vibroblade fell from his fingers.
This was the opening that Lucyeth needed. The Palatinaean struck out hard, catching the Shadow square in the face with his palm. As the Corellian let out a cry of pain and anger, the Equite followed the blow through with another palm strike, this time to the chest. This blow drove the Journeyman to his back roughly.
This was not how this was supposed to go at all.
“Enough!” the amplified voice of a Kaminoan echoed in the chamber. As the two Sith turned to regard the speaker, they saw the representative that had first greeted them was shaking their head unhappily. “We do not need this kind of violence brought to this place. I had hoped the two of you could try and haggle for our cloning services, not spread each other’s flesh and blood across our facilities.”
“He started it,” the words fell flat from Bentre’s lips as he rubbed his face as he glared at Lucyeth. Already a bruise was forming under the skin. By his expression it must have smarted quite a bit. The Warrior raised an eyebrow in a slightly mocking concern.
“I bet that is going to sting in the morning, Stahoes. Maybe you should stick to skulking around in the shadows?”
“I don’t know, can’t imagine that wound in your leg is much better. I would even bet-”
“I don’t want to hear it, outsiders.” The spindly alien made a dismissive motion as it cut the argument short. “The both of you have been less than diplomatic.” The Shadow opened his mouth, but did not interrupt the alien as it spoke. “We will provide you some medical care for the injuries you sustained in this ill-advised little brawl. After that you may return to your respective employers.”
“This is poodoo.” Bentre growled.
“If your employers wish to send others, we will still entertain their offers. You two are done here though.” As if on cue, two droids approached the Sith slowly. The first extended an arm toward Lucyeth, helping him up and giving him something to brace against. The second was waved away by a sore Stahoes as he rolled to his feet. Sidestepping the droid’s attempt to lead him away, Bentre pointed an accusatory finger at the Equite.
“Don’t think this is over buddy,” his words were full of poison. “This fight may have ended in a draw of sorts, but don’t think for a moment that makes you any better than me. The next time we fight, you had better hope you catch me unaware. Because if all is equal, I will defeat you and do so soundly.”
“I seriously doubt you will be that much of a threat,” The Warrior shook his head, with the slightest hint of a smile as he turned back toward the droid, leaning against it roughly. “I wasn’t trying to kill.” He shook his head as the droid helped him hobble along to the medical center.
I don’t think Locke and the others are going to be too thrilled when I get back. The Corellian shook his head as he sulked behind the droid leading him to one of the side chambers. The leader of a Battleteam losing his cool like that, and getting thrown out? It is disgraceful. He shook his head. The only good thing, he supposed, was that he would have plenty of time on the trip back to plan his revenge on the Scholaen Sorcerer.
Should be "not that it mattered".
"palatinaean" should be capitalized.
This whole sentence has an awkward flow to it. You missed a "the" between "that emperor" as well.
Again, "palatinaean" needs to be capitalized.
Not sure what you were trying to say here but as is, it should be "his assailant".
The "Force" is a proper noun.
Illusions have nothing to do with concealing yourself in the Force. That would be "concealment".
You might want to spend more time reviewing the Character Sheet of your opponent. This isn't realistic to his personality, particularly the "she let him pontificate..." aspect.
Again, realism issues with the CS usage. Look at your opponent's resolve, as it relates to how well they can keep a level head.
It isn't as clear as it could be what is going on here. You mention that the blaster is knocked wildly in the air, then the bolt goes into the ceiling? That reads to me like the blaster was sent flying, not just pointed upward.