The inferno in the Headmaster’s Office was dying down. Many of the tomes were dry, and burned quickly. The couches had caught fire fast and were now piles of glowing embers. Every shelf had fallen, every paper destroyed. The fireplace was still alight, the flickering flames watching sentinel over the ruined room. Smoke was everywhere. It filled the office and overflowed through the doorway into the high-ceilinged audience chamber.
The incinerated furniture still glowed; the fire wasn’t dead yet. Its light radiated into the audience chamber, casting shadows everywhere.
Deo pushed himself upright, keeping a hand on the wall for safety. His simple robes were tattered and charred. His face was in complete shadow, masking his expression.
Seridan took his time to answer the question. The light and the shadows danced across his face, both vying for dominance. He searched to find a suitable answer. One that would be right for a situation such as this.
He wanted to be a Jedi to stop oppression, to fight crime. If he saw wrong, Seridan wanted to possess the ability to change it. He’d seen suffering and pain. He’d lived through oppression, conquered fear and fought tyrants. He wanted to stop it, to defeat it wherever he found it in the galaxy.
“I am a Sentinel,” he said, the words gushing from his mouth, “I fight evil and oppression. I am willing to fight and protect the innocent in any way I can. I can spar, I can duel and I can persuade.” He took a breath, inspiration hitting him suddenly, “I am here now as your student. You have taught me everything I know. I am your Padawan and this is a final test.”
Even with the shadow, Seridan could see a smile on his master’s face. Deo pushed himself away from the wall, his body more slouched than usual.
“You are correct. Let’s see if you pass.” He brought his lightsaber up above his head, preparing for Soresu defence. The blade illuminated Deo’s face; he beared quite a few scratches, and had pain etched onto the corners of his mouth. Seridan’s slash must’ve had quite an impact.
Seridan adjusted his balance, crouching slightly and rolling onto the balls of his feet. He was preparing for one last fight. As he pointed his lightsaber towards the ground, as he had been taught to, he could feel his left shoulder sagging. Numbness still inhabited parts of his left side, stopping some movements to be carried out. His left arm was capable of performing a few low-energy movements, but it was largely useless.
Seridan began to gingerly walk towards his master, taking small strides to maintain stability. Deo moved towards him too. Once they were close enough, Deo lashed out, catching Seridan’s blade in an elaborate disarm. There wasn’t much strength behind the blow, but the accuracy and skill was enough to throw the armory lightsaber from his grasp. Deo’s blue blade dashed upward, stopping under Seridan’s neck. “Is that all you’ve got?” Deo sneered, a glint in his eye.
Seridan delivered a weak Force Push into his master’s belly. Adeodatus stumbled back, winded. Seridan reached out with the Force, searching for his lightsaber in amongst the cushioned seating. He couldn’t find it. There was just too many distractions, stopping him from concentrating. He turned back to find Deo ready once more. His lightsaber stood ready at hip height, his trademark smile poking fun at Seridan.
Seridan’s mind searched along another row of seats. His lightsaber lay in between two of the armrests. Reaching out with his hand, he summoned his saber. It flew back into his hand.
He ignited the emerald blade and walked toward Deo. Once more, Deo struck first. His lightsaber swung toward his left side, but Seridan deflected the blow and attempted a riposte at Deo’s offhand. The counter attack was successfully parried, Deo’s blue blade rushing to meet it.
Seridan decided to change tack. He swung his lightsaber wide, exposing his midsection. Deo took the opportunity and slashed forward, but Seridan had expected this. His saber quickly caught the opposing blade in a lock.
Deo pushed all his weight into it, sliding the saber up and down Seridan’s. Seridan was holding his saber with two hands, but one was near useless and the other was stinging and aching. Deo broke the lock and promptly disarmed his apprentice.
“You’ve done well,” He said with a smile, “Even though you didn’t defeat me, you’ve done well. You used wit and engaged me in speech as well as combat. You answered my questions well, and it’s time for me to answer yours. You were right: this is one of your final tests. And you have passed.”
Deo put his arm around Seridan’s good shoulder and together, they walked back towards the smoky office.
Seridan grinned, “Time to clear this all up, then.”
Adeodatus’ hand instinctively brushed his saber as he heard the rustle of the robes somewhere behind him but he allowed it to pass by without touching the weapon.
Try reading this out loud. You will notice that the flow is off because it's missing a comma after "behind him". It would read better with a full stop as well. Stringing together sentences is nice, but try and imagine what it would be like telling the story to someone else. When you say things, you'll hear why they sound off.
Fortunately, being younger Seridan was slightly faster.
Seridan has a +0 in Athletics, you have a +1. Not that that is a sole indictaor of speed, but it should be noted. You Should have instead maybe drawn attention to his limp being what caused him to move slower, if anything.
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Syntax: We capitalize the Force. Minor.