As the Chiss walked off, confident in their fledgeling alliance, Valtiere reloaded his pistol, holstered it, and pulled out the scroll. He scanned the document. It was crowded with information. If it was a fake, a forgery, then no matter. A fake document was still a document. It held information on Alchemy. A scroll didn’t need to be steeped in the dark side to be read by eyes. Even if the ‘merchant’ that had sold him the information on the location of a good fake, it was useful.
He rolled up the scroll, sealed the tube, and put it back in his bag. The Chiss had decided to barrel off, expecting Valtiere to follow. He shrugged, following for now. The Commander pulled out his pistol again, fully reloaded.
“You need to head North a bit.” Valtiere said, pointing. The Chiss looked at him, then nodded, turning in that direction. The Commander had to slow his pace to stop his long legs from outstripping his part time ally.
Eventually, they came to a crude tent, the living arrangements of one used to living in the wilderness. A man shambled out of the shelter. Eyes inquisitive first, then lighting with recognition. A broken smile cracked his face, brown teeth placed haphazardly in red gums
“So, Battlemaster.” Valtiere started.
“I’ve actually gone by military titles, such a-”
“Battlemaster” Valtiere interrupted. “This is the ‘merchant’ you referred to. He sold me information. I dug up the scroll.” He called out to the man. “Hail! This man here, seems to think you sold me false information. Care to refute him?” He asked mildly, false levity injected into his tone. The man cackled, the sound quickly becoming a wheeze.
“Yes, I sent you off to dig up a fake scroll that I planted in the middle of Akul territory.” He replied, grin creasing his face into a mass of wrinkles. Valtiere’s eye flicked to the side, the prosthetic staring forward. He could see the anger building in the Chiss again, but directed at the man in front of him, rather than Valtiere himself.
“But I can sense no darkness emanating from the scroll! A relic on the arts of the Sith should be imbued with the Dark Side!” The Chiss retorted, becoming flustered. The old man’s grin stayed fixed on his face, seemingly too baffled to change to any other expression.
“It’s a scroll! A treatise on alchemy! Now, if I had been giving out the vague location of a Holocron, then yes, the ‘dark aura’ would make sense. I’m sure you’d have found it instantly, powerful in the Force as you are.” He said, grin souring on his face, obviously tired of being questioned.
“But.” The old man raised a crooked finger, weathered like dried meat, “This is a scroll. A scrap of once great lore reduced down to naught but words on paper, any lingering taint of darkness washed away by the sands of time.” He sounded almost sad, then, an old man remembering the vigours of youth.
Brimstone had become quiet, wheels of his mind turning as the information was fed in and processed, drawn in by the man’s oratory. Only too late did the Chiss sense danger, a hand clamping down on his shoulder as the muzzle of a pistol pressed into the small of his back.
“If you move, I shoot. If you try and use the Force, I shoot. I’m faster than you, we both know that.” Valtiere growled, voice low, every syllable enunciated. “Even the Force can’t heal a severed spinal column.” He added, a grin colouring his tone.
“You dare?!” Brimstone yelled, arm sweeping around, knocking the pistol. The blow was weak, as the Chiss had to twist, and Valtiere was able to step back, a shot cracking through the air, stopping at an invisible barrier that the Sith had formed in the small space about himself. The Battlemaster seemed to look disappointed in the Commander as Valtiere kept backpedalling. Slowly, he pulled out his pair of Charric blasters, bringing them up to bear.
He fired, blue bolts spitting forth. Valtiere kept moving backward, but the Chiss was a good shot. The shots struck.
“Kind of warm.” Valtiere muttered. His frantic movement had allowed him to get out of the operational range of the pistols. The Chiss growled, throwing the weapons aside. He moved to pull out his lightsaber.
Valtiere careened into the Chiss, knocking the weapon from his grasp into the long grass that surrounded them. The desperate grin that stretched across Valtiere’s face was disconcerting. Sheer luck had given him the opening. He scrambled up quickly, dropping his pistol and drawing his tulwar. He drove down with the curved blade, glimmering as it caught the sun.
Brimstone rolled out the way, the blade catching his uniform as he dodged the deadly sweep of the weapon. He pushed himself up, pulling out his Sapphire Blade, a symbol of his achievement in the Brotherhood. The short gladius was deadly in the right hands. And Brimstone was an accomplished duellist. He thrust forward, the Force empowering him, his strikes moving faster.
But not fast enough, as Valtiere dodged nimbly to the left, the curved blade of his weapon slicing out at Brimstone’s arm, drawing a red line and a hiss of pain from the Chiss.
“Maybe you should have focussed more on your physical state than playing admiral.” Valtiere smirked, again dodging aside, from Brimstone’s thrust as he overextended, again using the Force to squeeze some speed out. Valtiere spun, slicing Brimstone’s back, red stark against the white of the uniform.
Brimstone turned again, malice in his eyes. He thrust a hand forward, and Valtiere felt as if a massive hand slammed him in the sternum, knocking him back, winded. He scrambled back up, blade held ahead of him like a holy icon.
“Why focus on my physical state when I can draw on the powers of the Force, mundane” Brimstone spat, the bleeding of his wounds already slowing to a trickle, his supernatural powers allowing him to heal himself. The pair were breathing heavily, winded by their struggles for supremacy.
“True.” Valtiere noted, sheathing his weapon, seemingly demure in defeat. Then he grinned again.
“But I can run faster than you.” He responded, turning on his heel, powering away, dodging around and over obstacles that hid in the long grass. He heard Brimstone roar in anger, crashing through the foliage after him as Valtiere increased the distance, making for his ship’s landing site, trusting in his speed to carry him from danger.
Loved the intro and the Flashback with Atty on the mission details. I thought that was original..! Well done! <3
Syntax!
The passive tense "Sniped" is usually used when using a sniper's rifle. Snipping is the word you use for an irritating or insolent tone.
The following section was somewhat confusing as written. Here's a suggested edit to help it flow better and more clearly in the hopes that it'll help you in future matches:
Realism! (1/2)
Be careful when writing about another person's character, and be sure to use his character sheet. Brimstone has a +2 Force Sense, Battle Haste II AND Battle Awareness II! He shouldn't be stumping around like you describe when trying to find where you're hiding. With your Parkour / + 3 Athletics you can avoid his shots, sure; outrun him, sure... but you shouldn't turn it into a Marco Polo match.