You stand in a room, nearly dark but for the pulse of rhythmic flashes of bright colored lights. Besides your opponent and yourself, you note a large number of bystanders who are sure to take exception to the coming carnage. Then again, knowing this crowd, they could just as easily find entertainment in an old-fashioned brawl. Spanky's is, after all, one of the more fashionable drinking establishments of Karufr.
The patrons seem to be a mix between the scantily clad women hawking their charms and the well-dressed gentlemen eager to part with their hard-earned credits. The odors in the tavern assault your senses and threaten to muddle your reflexes. Among them, you recognize over a dozen various types of stimulants—both legal and illegal—and the heady scent of, what is quite possibly, the most varied collection of liquor this side of the Galaxy.
The tavern itself is fraught with tactical advantages and disadvantages. Designed in the familiar style of all amphitheaters, the floor is slightly slanted toward a central stage where a lithe, twi'lek female is currently dancing. Littered amongst the floor are drink tables, heavily laden with glassware and other potential missiles. Uncomfortable, heavy metal chairs surround each of the tables in a semi-circle, so that the occupant's view of the stage is never hindered. The only exit, aside from the doorway where you stand, is a vaulted staircase—guarded by two very well-dressed, and heavily muscled, gentlemen—leading into parts unknown.
Small bars bracket the tavern on either side, filled with a glittering rainbow of bottles. Whatever is about to go down, you realize it would go down better with a stiff drink.
You don't really need to list their full name, including the initial. It comes across mechanical for the reader.
Your opponent doesn't have "Saber Throw" on his Character Sheet. These are critical for you to pay attention to as they tell you the abilities of the fighters, and how they would act in a given scenario. Using abilities they don't have is a Realism error.
This is a realism error, though one that might be confusing. When this match began, and on your Character Sheet for this match (which can be reached by clicking your name within this match page), you are an Acolyte and need to be for this match. Using the wrong rank is a Realism error for you, and if your opponent doesn't adhere to your mistake as if it were right, then it would be a Continuity error on their part.
Swapped genders here, "he threw herself".
The continuity of this doesn't make sense. Andrelious was on his feet, as was Tyron. When was Andrelious not on his feet? Also, you don't need a space leading into the ellipses.
What greeting? This hasn't been established.
Should be "Warlord's", in possessive form.
You should read up on the usage of the Force Powers via the wiki. In this case, for Barrier, you have it at +1. That means:
At its most basic level, the Jedi must take several seconds to concentrate and focus their full will to manifest the Force as a protective Barrier. The user’s full concentration is necessary to maintain the barrier.
That wasn't portrayed here.
Where did the couch come from? When did Tyron get behind it?
Possessive again, should be: Hunters'
Warlord's
Keep in mind that Tyron only has knowledge of Form 0. That is the most basic of teachings, and doesn't include acrobatics that are familiar to the more notable forms.
Much like above, acrobatics aren't something that is taught with your form. This is also rushed writing, trying to do too much at one time. Then, you use a comma instead of a period between "defenses" and "The Warlord".
Once again, you have to pay attention to the Character Sheets. Tyron has +0 Perception, and no points in Sense. It wouldn't be realistic for him to have that much battle awareness. The other, more pressing issue, is your comparison of their fitness levels. Tyron has +2 Endurance and Andrelious has +3. Realistically, Tyron would grow tired this quickly. Even with Surge I, as you allude to, they would be on the same level, not differing.
There are a couple things pertaining to this post in particular I want to leave you with. It is imperative that you break up your post into paragraphs. Not only does it make it easier to read, it can help determine the flow of the post. You gave 506 words in what is referred to as a "wall of text". No one wants to see a "wall of text". You also have exactly no dialogue here... at all. Dialogue can help make the action feel more organic. Look to any fight scene from the films, there is often banter and remarks throughout the combat.
The other issue is your lack of understanding for the Character Sheets and how powers work. We have many resources and members available to help you in this area, and I urge you to utilize them.