Two towering, tinted, transparisteel doors slide open to grant you access to the central chamber of the Combat Training Halls. The main room is wide and open and as large as as a holoball field. Tall walls stretch towards a domed ceiling that is made up of rows of ambient lights that spread out and fill the room with soft even lighting that eliminates any shades or shadows. Those same walls are lined around the perimeter with racks and stacks of varied weaponry: everything from swords and polearms to rifles and flamethrowers.
There are two signs that hover over each weapon rack to create an alternating motif in the Combat Training Hall: “No Explosions” and “Accorded Neutral Territory”. While the first is fairly obvious, the second speaks to the single law of the Training Halls: all members of the Brotherhood are welcome, and no member is to be killed or maimed without incurring the wrath of the Grand Master and the Inquisitori.
A trio of training dummies are statically set up and spread out in a line, each made out of a blend of alloys and padding that can withstand blows from any standard weaponry with the exception of lightsaber blades. To the side of the dummies, a large sparring matt has been stretched out to create a larger footprint than the typical Shock-Boxing ring. The padding is good for helping teach new combat students how to take a fall without injury and offers firm footing, but the hard durarubber mat is hardly forgiving.
Behind the sparring area is a door that leads to a small archives that combat students can use to view holorecordings of fights and duels from the past as well as relevant information on combat tactics, techniques, and forms. On the opposite side of the archives at the far end of central room is the locker room that members can safely store their equipment.
The final and probably most important element of the Combat Training Hall is the onsite Med Ward. The maglock door is sealed off and can only be opened by an attending Medic. The Medical facilities feature state of the art bacta tanks for recovery and aftercare. A combination of observation and waiting room rests adjacent to the recovery center and features two large monitors that display a live feed of the central room.
The Combat Halls are staffed around the clock, allowing combat students and mentors alike to come and go as they please at odd or regular hours. It also reserved for members looking to prove their worth to compete in the Antei Combat Center.
Syntax
This section can be very confusing from a reader's perspective. Typically, dialogue would have it's own lines, however this is internal thoughts. A good approach to take would be to have one dialogue employing an em-dash to cut up the sporadic thoughts:
"What did I do wrong — why is my Master angry with me — IS my Master angry with me — he HAS to be upset somehow, he closed down the entire Training Center for this!"
Additionally, you don't need to capitalize "Master" unless it is replacing the name, so here it would be "my master".
Should be possessive: master's
When using "he said/she said" structure, you need to join the dialogue to the rest of the sentence with a comma instead of a period.
Should be "from the right of his head in his peripheral vision.
Much like with "master", unless it is replacing their name it should be lower case. This is one such instance.
Story
I know you switched to thoughts here at the end, but it isn't clear to a reader. You should really use alternating styles to differentiate between the two. I recommend using italics for thoughts.
Continuity
You referenced a few sentences prior to "his Masters approach through the doors as they opened" yet you have them opening again here.
Realism
At +1 Terror, you have the following: At an early stage, the Jedi must devote his full concentration to turn the fears of another being against them. At this rank, it can take up to a minute for the power to cause the target’s fears to fully rise to the surface.
With that in mind, and looking at what is portrayed here, it doesn't really make sense how the power is applied. No one is truly immune to Force Abilities, just different levels of being able to handle it. An accurate portrayal here would be the slow onset of terror, perhaps after he thought your attempt was feeble. Additionally, everyone is afraid of something, the whole point of the power is to find that one thing.