Aiden looked on with no small amount of amusement, as the Wookie took the offensive. Allowing the Wookie this brief moment, he matched each strike with an easy deflection. The Knight took his time on the defensive to analyze his opponent’s movements. They were unrefined, but not sloppy. Clearly Ringer had been practicing his saber techniques, but the Form taught to all beginners was nowhere near impressive enough to match the duelist.
Purposely telegraphing his movements, Aiden flicked his wrist to the right He just caught the tip of Ringer’s sapphire blade with his amethyst one, easily parrying the Wookie’s latest strike. The Padawan countered the parry by twisting himself around and slashing his lightsaber down, relying on pure strength to defeat his opponent. Aiden swung his lightsaber up in time to meet the opposing beam, causing the two blades to hiss upon contact. The Wookie continued to push down, willing himself to break through Aiden’s defenses.
Unfortunately for Ringer, while Aiden’s body looked weak, his strength was well hidden, and the Knight easily overpowered the Padawan learner. Ringer was knocked backwards toward the dull grey durasteel wall behind him. The small Wookie regained his balance and resumed his offensive tactics, thrusting his Armory saber towards Aiden’s torso. Aiden flipped over Ringers' strike, landing next to the wall, and bent backwards to avoid Ringer’s follow up strike. The sound of scorching metal filled the training area as the blue lightsaber added one more scorch mark to the utterly devastated wall.
As the fight progressed, Aiden found easy openings in which he could have killed or maimed his opponent. And while the warrior in him wanted to exploit these mistakes for his own advantage, the Knight knew this was simply a training match meant to prepare the Padawan for the future. He had been tasked with this assignment by the leader of the Wardens, and Aiden knew that he must complete the mission. This could very well save the Wookie in the future. As such, Aiden decided the better response to the Padawan’s mistakes was to show him his errors.
As Ringer struck out at the Knight, Aiden waited for each opportunity to slip past the Wookies defenses. When his right side was left open, Aiden touched his lightsaber against Ringer’s thigh. As the Wookie attempted an overhead slash, Aiden burned his right shoulder with his amethyst blade. Ringer could feel his skin singe, as his hair burned away from the flesh. The Padawan began to slow down slightly, the pain becoming more and more noticeable. Overcoming his pain, as best as he could, Ringer focused on his stance, but his attacks remained ineffective. As the Wookie thrust his lightsaber forward, Aiden stepped to the right. He swept his foot out and caught Ringer in the knee, knocking the Padawan prone. The Taldryan Knight pointed his lightsaber at Ringer’s neck. *
“Ringer, I am impressed by your skill. But unfortunately, had this been a real battle, you would be dead now.” Aiden deactivated his saber for a moment as he spoke. “You have left yourself open to my lightsaber countless times in our battle, and while that is also due to your lack of a decent Form, you must be mindful. Do you understand?”
Ringer listened to what his superior had taught him and took in the information with no diminished pride, though he could sense hours of work that would come until his Form was perfected. The Wookie nodded to the Knight before starting his attack again. Aiden reactivated his amethyst blade and continued to knock the incoming saber away from him. Seeing another opening in Ringer’s defenses, Aiden let out a sigh, and took advantage of the situation. He ducked underneath an incoming slash of the blue blade and twisted his body as he lightly grazed the Wookie’s skin with his own weapon.
As Ringer let out a grunt of pain from his newest injury, Aiden channeled the Force into his left hand and looked up at the Padawan.
“As I’ve said, your skills have impressed me. Let’s see what else you can do.”
Aiden thrust his hand forward, slamming the Wookie with Force energy, causing the Padawan to topple onto the padded ground. Lying on his back, Ringer looked up towards where the Knight began to rise. Confusion plastered on his face, the Wookie growled and grunted in his native tongue. Aiden was unable to understand what the Wookie said, though he had an idea.
“Always expect your opponent to play dirty, and unfair. Now then, show me what you know of the Force. Impress me.”
I would have liked to see a bit more actual action here. You kind of just gloss over it without the same care you had been attributing to your actions up to this point. This hurts your story, as it glosses over the whole goal of your match, which is the combat.
This isn't technically wrong, but the flow is awkward. Starting with "And" here makes it feel like one sentence instead of two.
Try to avoid repetition, especially within the same sentence.
Overall this is a pretty solid post. The biggest gripe I have with how glossed over the combat comes across. There is a lot of action occurring, but it is referred to as a "few clashes" rather than actually painting the full picture.
The other issue is the lack of any real motivation. You imply a greater story with the dialogue, but it doesn't come across in the writing and it just feels like a basic cookie cutter fight, rather than the snapshot in the lives of these characters it could be.